• Published 19th Jul 2012
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The Cracks Are Showing - Tunalock



Being stuck in a mental ward for three years can have some positive outcomes...

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Enter Octavia

Ponyville was a nice place. The market had fair prices, everypony was willing to help out, and it just had this air of excitement. I didn't ever want to leave. However, all the ponies around me were whispering, something about a surprise. They did it in a dark manner, so I don't think I'm going to like it. Just as that thought came to mind, I bumped into a completely pink pony, complete with wild hair. She gave me a once over and then gasped loudly, dashing off. I swear, she looked like something from a children's cartoon. Twilight gave me a nudge and said, "You're in for it now. When Pinkie Pie throws a party, everypony's there." I gave a chuckle and said, "And where would everyone fit in?"

However, as I glanced in another direction, I saw a grey pony with a black mane and a pink bowtie. Her cutie mark was a treble clef, and she carried what seemed to be a case holding a cello in it. Instantly, my mind flashed with pain as I saw two people, a mother with her child. The mother said, "I need your college money, though, Isaac! I need to go up in the ranks in Unitology! I must know its secrets!" She took a wad of paper bills and slammed the door behind her.

"What was it this time?" Twilight asked, worry in her voice. I pointed to the grey mare and asked, "Wh-who's that?" Twilight looked over and said, "Oh, that's Octavia. She's a cellist from Canterlot. That's where I'm from."

"Canterlot?" I asked, and Twilight pointed to a city on the side of the mountain. I looked back to Octavia when a sense of hatred welled up in me. I didn't know why, but it felt like everything was her fault. But, at the same time, it felt as if she was close to me. As if she were family. I turned to Twilight and said, "She seems... familiar..." Twilight looked ahead and said, "Well, if Pinkie's just seen you, I don't think Octavia knows you. Or anypony, for that matter..." We continued on to the library in silence, not noticing the empty streets surrounding them.




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Hey guys, what's up? I know this chapter's short, but it's a transition chapter. There won't be many of these, though. Hopefully. The next two chapters will be exciting, however. I promise. And the ones after that will DEFINITELY be exciting.

Comments ( 37 )

Octavia has a light brown coat and a dark brown mane...

942971 No she doesn't...

941781
WTF!!!!!!!! :flutterrage:
I PLAYED THROUGH ON HARD ON MY FIRST ATTEMPT!!!!!!
Like a boss :moustache:

I have no idea what this crossover is but the story itself sounds good. I'll watch it and see where it goes.

953801
Dead Space

943450
i believe you mean Zealot..
Unless you're talking about the first game.
If you're talking about the second then you used hax man.
Not cool.
Unless the game was fair and the mode wasn't
:rainbowhuh:
:?
:/

1512846
I don't have DS2 :facehoof:
and I played on zealot or whatever the fuck it was called because my mate bet me $40 dollars dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Pinkie_Pie_lolface.png
I died a fuckton :rainbowlaugh:
plus it was PS3 so no hacks, hell I didn't even know how to hack PC games back then... not that I do that kind of shit dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_cake.png

1513133
Yea okay.
But fer your first time?
Nice
Props yo :moustache:

1513224
Yes... I will admit I died at least 20 times on the first chapter alone :facehoof:
The sad thing is i was 12 back then and thought $40 bucks was alot just for all that tedious bullshit :twilightangry2:
well it came out of his allowance so its cool dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png

1513246
Look at the previous conversation with Lerainbowdash if ur gonna get pissy on me cause I cant be bothered explaining dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png

1513337 Pics or it didn't happen.

1513698 Guess it didn't happen.

1513728
Fuck you! I don't need your pics to prove I did something (your mum) :moustache: Go write a fucking chapter or something cause you seem to be having epic writing sessions with how long there's been 2 chapters on your story and all dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Scootaloo.png

1513321
LOL I was like 10 or 11 when I first got into Dead Space.
5th grade

1514177 Sorry, you don't seem to realize that writing is friggin' hard, as well as having to do homework each night. So unless you want horrible chapters, can it and wait like the rest of us.

1526457 I'm only flipping out on you because you first flipped on me.

1531901

Fuck you! I don't need your pics to prove I did something (your mum) Go write a fucking chapter or something cause you seem to be having epic writing sessions with how long there's been 2 chapters on your story and all

That doesn't look chill.

Bruh... chill out! :moustache:
Play L4D2

1535245 I'm not exactly chill when people bitch to me about how long things are taking.

1538162 Yeah, well I am. Don't complain.

1538088

1538162

make sure you guys don't cut yourselves on all that edge

i've beat dead space 1 and 2 on the hardest difficulty

keep your guns loaded and loot EVERYTHING
in a game where it gives you a line to follow to get to objectives how hard can it really be

4281681
The fuck?
These comments are 70 weeks old.

Actually, what's surprising is how it's 70 weeks later and there's still only two chapters. :rainbowlaugh:

Edit: Jesus fuck mothering christ, I was quite the newfag back then. And what the hell is with all the images and shit?
It's a good thing I lurked more.

4281693
i used to not care for crossovers

ive changed, the internet has changed me


may god help me

4281749
i don't know whats more disappointing
the joke itself
or the fact that i laughed

I vish to comment on this... yes... i can zee this turning into a great Story... vith help and if no longer a Hiatus, I belive it vill become a great story if great magic is infused into this story...

not only that my friend... but your imagination has caught my attention...

6220625 I had lots of ideas for this story, too, but I'm trying to focus on non-pony projects for the moment. I have things completed for other stories, but I know that I'll have to write more if I post them, so I'm waiting to do that. Right now, I'm working on a two-part FNaF tale.

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