This was a fun little read, and sexy too However, not saying its a bad thing but the dude is waaaay! to overused. Couldnt we just make a male OC instead?
But thats just me.

Honestly, I was expecting the weight-gain end up being a sign of pregnancy from a previous romantic encounter than summer snacking; then again, Rarity does love her ice cream a bit too much!

Ever thought of make equestria girls story of sunset shimmer and rarity having sex with each other to show sunset shimmer how much she loves rarity and be girlfriends.