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Barley Citrus

I write about the countless coital encounters between humanoid horsies, anthropomorphous equines and at least passably bipedal pony people... Also, I really fuckin like Equestria Girls my dudes.


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I really love the back and forth between Twi and Rarity in this story, it's probably better than the clop.. but that part is nice too 😆

Thanks, do just mean in chapter 2 or in general?
I'd love to hear if anything in particular stood out to you

947538 I mean the story as a whole. I love literally ALL of their interactions lol. As for something specific... I noticed how bold twily is getting as this goes on, she started out kinda hesitant and awkward ( as she should have) but now it's like she thinks she some kinda sex god even keeping her cool with Rarity's teasing. And I just find that fantastic 😂 although, she's probably forgotten that Rarity isn't hers exclusively. So if somebody came sniffing around, I'm sure that would be a bubble popper

I'm glad you picked up on that. I really wanted to show how differently Twilight acts at this stage of their relationship.
And while they aren't exclusive, they definitely have a mutual obsession for each other's body in particular

Pretty good. I wonder if Rarity <could> step on Twilight's face or cock next time ^^"

Hey, thanks.
That sounds fun, but I'll go ahead a say it won't happen in this story
Offscreen, she might do it jokingly. Though this Rarity isn't really the Physical domination type.

Yeeessss I love the emotion in this chapter VERY well done! Rarity 100% loves Twilight back, she just needs to admit it to herself.

Thank you, I'm glad you liked that
It was the #1 thing that I was worried wouldn't come through properly

Though just so you know
Any official confessions happen offscreen
The Fire Is So Delightful is chronologically the next story in the continuity
So go give it a read

I’ve been reading through this series, and it may just be me, but I’m getting some definite sprinklings of Softcore-BDSM undertones; especially with how Rarity interacts with Twilight at the beginning of this chapter. Again, that may just be me.

I wouldn't call it BDSM
But yeah, there's definitely some light-domination

The D & S can stand for “Domination & Submission”. It’s not all whips and leather. :raritywink:
But yeah, I thought I sensed that.

Right, that's fair
I just think they're worth separating for context

Though that's also just using broad terms
I could go deeper into their character motivations and what differences there are for them
But for Rarity at least, her domination doesn't come from a BDSM related mindset or intention

Yeah. I've always found Rares to be naturally dominant.

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