Despite being a mute, Vinyl was pretty confident about her new life in Canterlot High, until she met this mysterious cellist...
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So...Vinyl and Lyra are more ‘friends with benefit’ than actually in love? Sure, I can roll with that...especially given who they will eventually end up with.
Still liking the story by the way. Looking forward to the next chapter!
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I didn't think it was believable that they would end up in love after knowing each others for so long. Sure, it can happen in certain cases, but still very rarely.
Thanks for the compliment! Glad to see you're still following despite my erratic scedule ^^
Well, something have gone wrong. Don’t get me wrong, but it’s wrong.
Bonbon not making a proper sentence!? Was she swapped with a changeling or something?
Or maybe she just lost it.
Aside from bad puns, very nice to see you, and character development pleases me. You’re doing it right! Go on and you’ll become a permanent feature box dweller!
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Boy.
I don't know why but after reading your jokes I got extremely tired (of living?).
Thanks for the heads up and the nice compliments though o/
Ooh, nice! This was just a very nice and sweet chapter^^
Go, Bonbon, you can do it!~
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Thanks! \o/
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If you find a lot of mistakes you can just PM me all of them ^^
Thanks!
53 degrees? Are we in the Kelvin scale?
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im the exact opposite. i can wear a winter jacket during summer and not get hot
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Fahrenheit scale ^^ I'm trying to adapt to US readers
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Thank you for that \o/
Yeah writing in English can be difficult for me sometimes, since it's not my primary language
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I did ^^"
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Whoho thank you \o/
See you then!
Well I'm around again! Even within the few months you've been working on this the syntax has improved noticeably. My one gripe is that sometimes it feels a little choppy with the scene breaks, but it really isn't too bad even then. How's your editing process go at the moment, if you don't mind me asking?
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My editing process?
Wha... Whu? Wh... What?
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I dunno. There's people out there (Like me) that would be willing to look over your chapters before they're published and suggest grammatical and narrative changes, like certain lines feeling out of character or maybe a missing detail or two. There's no real pressure for it but a decent amount of Fimfic users have buddies to do that just so the story gets a little more polished along the way. I just wanted to know if you have that kinda thing at all. Not that it's required or anything.
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Oh yeah that! ^^"
I was searching a connection with video editing or whatever...
Well, I'm completely alone on my work! My sister, who's not a brony but who has been writing fictions for years, is reading my chapters and sometimes correcting me, but it's more of incoherences than grammar/spelling mistakes.
Honestly, the reason I don't have a proofreader is because I'm a lazy sack of shit who doesn't want to have an extra layer of responsibility to watch over. But I could be wrong. Also from what I've seen (while talking w/ other fimfic writers), is that sometimes people get really upset with changes they want you to make, and I wouldn't want my editor to do something other than correcting my mistakes.
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That's a fair philosophy and answers my question. Sorry if I was a little unclear! Thanks for taking the time to respond in detail! Best of luck with your writing, friend.
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Well you're welcome! Hope you'll keep reading! \o/
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I actually meant to say "how" ^^
Concerning the second thing, I'm gonna think of a better way to say that! Thank you!
As a Minnesotan, I laugh
I think you want "Next" between "sitting" and "To"
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Well I kinda took that from me. I usually wear nothing but a shirt when it's cold as shit.
Also yes, must've deleted this word by accident.
Whoot!
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You're like me then, except for the fact that I wear hoodies when it's hot.
Okay, let's start with, good story so far, can't wait to see where this goes from here. But before I go on reading I have a little issue to point out.
I've overlooked a number of inconsequential mistakes but this is one I can't ignore:
carefull here: 'formerly dressed' implies that she was wearing clothing but isn't anymore.
now I assume you meant 'formally dressed' which implies that she is wearing formal clothing.
Very similar spelling and pronounciation but a major difference in meaning, oh what a glorious mess the english language is.
I'm pretty sure you meant Vinyl and Lyra and I don't know if you meant 72' (feet) or 1972 for its year
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Uh these are two faire points ! I'll correct the first one and make the second clearer ! Thanks, hope you're enjoying the story o/