Rainbow Dash finds herself in quite a pickle when her heat arrives earlier than expected... Unfortunately, a mix-up with her estrus medication kicks things into overdrive: Anon and Rainbow Dash are in for a wild ride!
this scene was absolutely stunning. good clop material right here. it is the perfect setup for a good sex scene... I have a feeling Applejack was really enjoying tying up Rainbow's horny butt! <3
8301566 Thanks! Glad you liked the little bit of light roleplay.
8301572 Sorry to hear that! I know I've had a little bit of feedback that has liked the coloring, but it's about 5:1 against thus far. I may revisit in the future! I promise to always keep my character's voices as unique as possible so you'll never have any trouble distinguishing who is speaking!
Big Mac, who had been idly watching to this point, simply put his sister's stetson onto a nearby fencepost and murmured "Eeeeenope," deciding that now was a great time to leave to see about dinner.
If ever Dash could feel her ovaries releasing powerful hormones to activate the ripe egg-cells in her Fallopian tubes, she was feeling it now. If ever Dash could feel her endocrinal system pumping her veins with adrenaline, her mind with powerful dopamines and aphrodisiacs, and her heart with surging adrenaline she was feeling it now. And if ever Dash could feel her skene's glands and urethral tissue swelling with reproductive juices, her clitoral tissue engorging with throbbing hot blood, her autonomous muscle systems triggering bursts of muscle spasms in all of her erogenous zones... SHE COULD FEEL IT NOW.
I read this in Michel Scott's voice. I think that's enough of The Office for today.
It was then that a blue blur came out of nowhere. A blindingly fast hoof connected solidly with AJ's face, knocking her away in a furious tumble which ended with Applejack smashing into a nearby wooden fence.
Er, not correct - it's 'sever', not 'server'. Sever - divide by cutting or slicing; put an end to a connection; break off Server - a computer or computer program which manages access to a centralised resource or service in a network
"But if you want his punk so bad,
Spunk. Spunk is slang for semen. Punk is a name for a type of music (and those who enjoy it), or informal language for a worthless person.
Rainbow told me she downed a whole bottle a' Moon Tea
OBJECTION! If the claimant said she "downed a whole bottle of Moon Tea", then why is she suffering such an intense heat? It's obvious she's either lying, or misidentified what she took, Your Honour. We have a witness here who saw Rainbow Dash swallow the contents of a bottle, but he told our translator that the claimant actually took industrial-strength bear estrus inducer, and we have evidence to verify this statement - this empty estrus inducer bottle. TAKE THAT! .....Did I mention I love Ace Attorney, and am incredibly disappointed there are three games still restricted to Japan for no justifiable reason, and that Apollo Justice has yet to appear on the 3DS, despite every other 'main series' game being released for the system? COME ON CAPCOM, YOU STUPID BUCKERS--oh wait, tangent in 0.5x text. I apologise.
8331410 Great catches! Darn those typos and autocorrects that so cleverly hide as actual words that I end up missing onre-reads!
On the moon tea / estres-inducer, I'm afraid Edgeworth managed to have the evidence excluded because the witness and translator weren't present for this trial.
OVERRULED!!!
Phoenix will need to find some 'other' way to get to the 'bottom' of this defendant's 'desires'...
8331446 I think I missed one yesterday, despite how thorough I was.
almost narcotic hormonal forces she was subject too.
I'm pretty sure that's one 'o' too many in that last word, but I might be wrong - it's quite common for that to occur.
Also, not an error, but something I like to point out every now and then:
AJ had these special ropes because she also knew just how much they could help in a bad heat situation with an animal... or a pony.
Humans and ponies (and minotaurs, and changelings, and griffins, etc.) are biologically 'animals' - humans and ponies, at least, are mammals, while I'm pretty sure minotaurs would be mammals too (we've never actually seen baby minotaurs, as far as I'm aware), while griffins would be either aves (eagles) or mammals (lions), depending on which part is dominant. The only real difference between humans, ponies, etc. and 'animals' is that the first group is made up of sapient life, so biologically it makes no sense to distinguish between the two, but culturally/socially/legally it does.
“Big Mac, who had been idly watching to this point, simply put his sister's stetson onto a nearby fencepost and murmured "Eeeeenope," deciding that now was a great time to leave to see about dinner.”
No joke this paragraph made me laugh my fuckin ass off. 10/10 dude 10/10
Dude fuck them, keep the colored text, make it your niche. Make the colored text the thing that helps people recognize that this is a story written by you. Use it as your signature.
8513442 Actually this inspired me to use colored text in a story i am currently editng before publishing the first of like 15 chapters it is les of a clopfic more of a kind of sweet story that has erotic activity in only like 2 chapters it is called "a strange relationship" it will deal with my oc strange quark getting together with queen chrysalis and generally just being a really sweet couple after she realizes feelings for strange quark in like chapter 3 or 4
I vote in favor of colored voices. At first I thought it was distracting, but now I find it much easier to understand where quotes are coming from, as some other stories don't do a good job of showing who's saying what. I like it!
Big Mac, who had been idly watching to this point, simply put his sister's stetson onto a nearby fencepost and murmured "Eeeeenope," deciding that now was a great time to leave to see about dinner.
It could be a cruel fate though: if a mare's heart prevented her from lifting a her tail for just anypony, it would make sure that she would break down any barrier to get to the creature she had chosen as her special somepony.
"Well, if she is going to get between me and you buddy, I'll just have to show her I'm the real alpha-mare around here!" Rainbow said, stalking away from Anon toward AJ. The country-mare was wasting no time in getting back to her feet and had quickly grabbed a nearby coil of rope. She looked up at the threateningly powerful pegasus, carefully gauging and maintaining the distance between them as she formed the rope into a lasso.
Okay, so, can no one smell her estrus? Like, it should be impossible not to smell it right now.
AJ went on, "yep, take a big whiff of the air there..." Anon did so, noticing the thick and strangely pleasant vanilla musk that hung in the air all around him.
10711308 I liked it too, once you knew what color was whose it made it that much easier with regard to dialogue identifying and transitioning between characters but that's just my humble opinion
I came.
Wrong color^. Sorry it just bothered me. This is really good though, great work!
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Nice catch, Thanks! Just fixed it!
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Your welcome.
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Thanks!
That's exactly it though, colors don't serve much purpose and they do bother some readers, so this fic will be their swan song!
this scene was absolutely stunning. good clop material right here. it is the perfect setup for a good sex scene... I have a feeling Applejack was really enjoying tying up Rainbow's horny butt! <3
fantastic work!
Love the story so far but a bit sad to see the colored font go away. Personally, i liked the colored font but oh well i'll live.
I know this gif is an old one, but it pretty much sums up my thoughts.
i.imgur.com/NnoGhN1.gif
8301566
Thanks! Glad you liked the little bit of light roleplay.
8301572
Sorry to hear that! I know I've had a little bit of feedback that has liked the coloring, but it's about 5:1 against thus far. I may revisit in the future! I promise to always keep my character's voices as unique as possible so you'll never have any trouble distinguishing who is speaking!
Smart move, just gtfo, you saw nothing
I read this in Michel Scott's voice. I think that's enough of The Office for today.
FALCON PUUUUUUUNCH
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Hahaha, exactly!
I would be amazed if ol' Dashie will even be able to walk in ten months
8304125
Not sure if this is a veiled reference to pregnancy... or to the railing Anon is about to give her... either way... yes.
Oh boy... there aren't enough fics with this setting when it comes to clop. Nicely done.
Er, not correct - it's 'sever', not 'server'.
Sever - divide by cutting or slicing; put an end to a connection; break off
Server - a computer or computer program which manages access to a centralised resource or service in a network
Spunk. Spunk is slang for semen. Punk is a name for a type of music (and those who enjoy it), or informal language for a worthless person.
OBJECTION! If the claimant said she "downed a whole bottle of Moon Tea", then why is she suffering such an intense heat? It's obvious she's either lying, or misidentified what she took, Your Honour.
We have a witness here who saw Rainbow Dash swallow the contents of a bottle, but he told our translator that the claimant actually took industrial-strength bear estrus inducer, and we have evidence to verify this statement - this empty estrus inducer bottle. TAKE THAT!
.....Did I mention I love Ace Attorney, and am incredibly disappointed there are three games still restricted to Japan for no justifiable reason, and that Apollo Justice has yet to appear on the 3DS, despite every other 'main series' game being released for the system? COME ON CAPCOM, YOU STUPID BUCKERS--oh wait, tangent in 0.5x text. I apologise.
8331410
Great catches! Darn those typos and autocorrects that so cleverly hide as actual words that I end up missing onre-reads!
On the moon tea / estres-inducer, I'm afraid Edgeworth managed to have the evidence excluded because the witness and translator weren't present for this trial.
OVERRULED!!!
Phoenix will need to find some 'other' way to get to the 'bottom' of this defendant's 'desires'...
8331446
I think I missed one yesterday, despite how thorough I was.
I'm pretty sure that's one 'o' too many in that last word, but I might be wrong - it's quite common for that to occur.
Also, not an error, but something I like to point out every now and then:
Humans and ponies (and minotaurs, and changelings, and griffins, etc.) are biologically 'animals' - humans and ponies, at least, are mammals, while I'm pretty sure minotaurs would be mammals too (we've never actually seen baby minotaurs, as far as I'm aware), while griffins would be either aves (eagles) or mammals (lions), depending on which part is dominant.
The only real difference between humans, ponies, etc. and 'animals' is that the first group is made up of sapient life, so biologically it makes no sense to distinguish between the two, but culturally/socially/legally it does.
“Big Mac, who had been idly watching to this point, simply put his sister's stetson onto a nearby fencepost and murmured "Eeeeenope," deciding that now was a great time to leave to see about dinner.”
No joke this paragraph made me laugh my fuckin ass off. 10/10 dude 10/10
Dude fuck them, keep the colored text, make it your niche. Make the colored text the thing that helps people recognize that this is a story written by you. Use it as your signature.
8513442
Actually this inspired me to use colored text in a story i am currently editng before publishing the first of like 15 chapters it is les of a clopfic more of a kind of sweet story that has erotic activity in only like 2 chapters it is called "a strange relationship" it will deal with my oc strange quark getting together with queen chrysalis and generally just being a really sweet couple after she realizes feelings for strange quark in like chapter 3 or 4
Jeez, the sexism is real
I vote in favor of colored voices. At first I thought it was distracting, but now I find it much easier to understand where quotes are coming from, as some other stories don't do a good job of showing who's saying what. I like it!
Ponys can't read.
Always those obvious self druggings...
I don't know I think the story lost me here because for once I would like just a conscious decision. Not wacky excuses aka simple route.
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It is definitely a crutch I enjoy.
This is one of my older fics so I do lean on it more heavily here.
I'm trying to be better about it going forward!
Wise move Big Mac, a wise move indeed.
Just out of curiosity, why is that the fandom consensus for a pony's gestation period?
8902458
Hmmm... is that a way to get around Fimfiction discouraging script format stories?
9583634
Horse gestation.
This was awesome and sweet reread it's about to down
What does that mean?
Okay, so, can no one smell her estrus? Like, it should be impossible not to smell it right now.
Oh, right after I said it.
Okay, never mind.
Shit boutta get real.
I'll grab my tissues...
Personally, I actually like the different colors for different characters. I might actually use that idea in the future
10711308
I liked it too, once you knew what color was whose it made it that much easier with regard to dialogue identifying and transitioning between characters but that's just my humble opinion