"She is my best friend, the figure i look up to even more than my mother, I know her more than anyone else... how I wish I knew everything from the beginning"
Great chapter, I love Spike/Twilight stories and it never feel there are enough out there. I wonder will she end up triggering some dragon instinct in him giving him all this constant simulation like this?
8115733 like you i never feel like there is enough twispike in this fandom, and each season just sums up the amount required, so this is my contribution to it, the first but surely not the last one.
There's a lot of places with wrong words or just the wrong sense of it, like instead of using her or him, you use the opposite of what it is, like the last line "his dragon" or "his little assistant" I would suggest getting an editor or at least proofreading, but enough ranting, really like where this is going keep it up
8116166 thanks for the advice, actually i was thinking in getting an proofreader since English is not my first language, but i wanted so much to see how the people would react to the first chapter that i couldn't resist to publish it.
8115767 Great I Can't wait to see what else you will do with this pairing. I mean I could honestly see you doing the flip. Where Spike is the one lusting after the innocent Twilight. And she doesn't know till it is too late and his desire for her reaches its breaking point lol. I mean we just seen in the last ep that honestly Twi can't really function without Spike fixing all her probs so it isn't hard to see their relationship grow to be something more than siblings lol.
Twilight and Spike can NOT both be 12. Twilight was at least 6 or so when she hatched him.
Or, if you want to go the route of "they age differently from humans," have her 4 when she hatched him, and now she's 10 (which is like 12 for humans) and he's 8 which is also comparable to 12, since dragons age really fast at first)
Great chapter, I love Spike/Twilight stories and it never feel there are enough out there. I wonder will she end up triggering some dragon instinct in him giving him all this constant simulation like this?
Where can I find skunkwaffle?
8115733 like you i never feel like there is enough twispike in this fandom, and each season just sums up the amount required, so this is my contribution to it, the first but surely not the last one.
Think you mean 'her' there. heh.
8116020 thanks for the correction i had to crop something from the original so i knew i could have messed up while editing
seems like an interesting story, but the tragedy tag has me a bit worried.
There's a lot of places with wrong words or just the wrong sense of it, like instead of using her or him, you use the opposite of what it is, like the last line "his dragon" or "his little assistant" I would suggest getting an editor or at least proofreading, but enough ranting, really like where this is going keep it up
8116166 thanks for the advice, actually i was thinking in getting an proofreader since English is not my first language, but i wanted so much to see how the people would react to the first chapter that i couldn't resist to publish it.
8115767 Great I Can't wait to see what else you will do with this pairing. I mean I could honestly see you doing the flip. Where Spike is the one lusting after the innocent Twilight. And she doesn't know till it is too late and his desire for her reaches its breaking point lol. I mean we just seen in the last ep that honestly Twi can't really function without Spike fixing all her probs so it isn't hard to see their relationship grow to be something more than siblings lol.
I'm interest in the story.
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that's great seeing as English isnt your first language, you're doing really well
What's the tragedy?
8117016 patience and time would give you the answer
Hold up. Stop.
Twilight and Spike can NOT both be 12. Twilight was at least 6 or so when she hatched him.
Or, if you want to go the route of "they age differently from humans," have her 4 when she hatched him, and now she's 10 (which is like 12 for humans) and he's 8 which is also comparable to 12, since dragons age really fast at first)
8256648 Sorry it was something that I missed while editing a month ago, she is currently fourteen while Spike is 12. Thanks for pointing it out
This story needs to be edited, a lot but I like it. Moving on.
Lol. I just read the first paragraph and I am already noticing a mistake. There are no “people” in this society. They’re ponies! get it right...
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And if there are a small number of minotaurs or griffins also living in Canterlot?
Sorry, downvoting, too many errors, and I'm not buying that Twilight hatched Spike when she was TWO.