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A Little Kindness

While going to the market, Fluttershy meets a pony who is going through a tough time. This ponies parents are getting a divorce. Fluttershy helps this pony as best as she can. This story shows that a little kindness can help a lot.

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Vertigo22 #1 · Mar 4th, 2017 · · ·

This was cute and kind of heartwarming. There were a handful of typos, but none that took me out of the story (I'll point them out if you'd like).

However, the... only major issue I had with the story is its length.

While I understand why it's short, I couldn't quite buy into how quickly the filly opened up to Fluttershy.

I feel, had the story been at least an extra thousand words longer, it could've been much more impactful.

Long story short: I'd suggest adding more interaction. That scene in the house could've been much more in-depth.

However, as it stands... eh, it's fine. It's solid. I liked it. Harmless and heartfelt in the end.

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Furryart #2 · Mar 5th, 2017 · · ·

7996534 thank you I'm glad you liked the story

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