So apparently, my super-crazy future things scared away the girl. No biggie, I can just bring her to me.
Just a simple teleportation spell tied to a magical beacon I linked to her body, and...
There! Now I've just gotta hide myself in my invisibility.
And grab this conveniently placed potato sack...
...aaaaand GOTCHA!
The human girl struggled for a brief moment, but I took care of her using a hoof to the head and a silencing spell.
Dang, I'm starting to act like some sort of devil or something... meh, it's all a matter of getting back home anyways. Taking into account that what I'm doing will likely split this world off into an alternate universe, I can do anything I want, and get away with it.
Heheh. It's like being both an angel and the devil...
Either way, I gotta scram before somepo--somebody notices the girl missing. I could hold her for ransom in exchange for unlimited access to knowledge.
Talk about crazy. I'll bet Twi's only sane from being in a library surrounded by theoretical magic books.
7946886 Yup.
Oooooh Twilight, you silly mare you.
hahah, nice job!
Oh boy...
7948881 Indeed.
You have a lot of errors considering the short chapter length. Most are mistakes that should be easy to catch on a proof-read, such as writing "holder" instead of "hold her". Are you using speech-to-text?
It's unfortunate that you gave up so quickly on your promise to watch the original show, since you haven't seen any of the good episodes yet. That's probably why you came to the erroneous conclusion that G4 ponies are more intelligent.
7952749 Eh... I don't use text to speech, but most of the stories I write are meant for purely comedic purposes. On top of that, I typically self-edit, so I occasionally may miss a thing or two.
7952749 Also, sorry about the typos
Usually when I self-edit, I just speed-read over the chapter. Just don't forget that the story as a whole isn't meant to be taken seriously, and since it focuses more on Twilight's own mental breakdown, I believe that straying from the gen-1 canon would be best for the advancent of this story.
But yeah... Sorry for the typos. I don't have all that much time to write, with the rest of my day being taken up by homework and school and all...
Also, as a side note, FREAKIN' PHONE KEUBOARD, WHY DO YOU DO THIS?!