Awesome! Didn't dive right into sexy times straight away. Just a lot of fun. I would like to see more fun times between the CMC and Coral like the limbo stuff!
i wonder if AJ gonna have Coral Leaf's bulge stuck in her mind for a while and im suprised he got away with the lie from AJ since she is like a living lie detector due to being the bearer of the Element of Honesty
Actually, the original coverart critiques were based on one I did when I first released Chapter 1. Though as the comments show, I finally removed the dreadful thing and threw it into my FurAffinity account, where it languishes currently.
Funny you mention size references. A friend was going over the story, and was curious about some more basic size references. With the story, I mainly wanted to give the reader the chance to use their imagination, and kind of formulate in their heads, just how big AB and Coral Leaf are.
I wanted a 'less is more' approach, as I've read some stories where some authors could go on for 5 paragraphs describing a girls huge, firm, beach balls sprouting proudly from her chest...though I wouldn't rule out some more accurate sizing soon. Definitely a possibility...
I am glad you have taken the time to leave a comment. Comments are like the energy drinks that keep me going with the story. In the last few weeks, I have seen the 'thumbs up' go up by 5-7, and it's making me eager to put up the next chapter soon (had a Birthday and a work party earlier this week, so maybe sometime in the next few days, we'll find out what happens next).
To me, I see the story as kind of a B-movie romance. That absurdity mixed in with the drama and comedy, is one thing that just pushes my buttons. Course, that means I do tick off a lot who just want to gorge themselves on the dessert. I have considered doing little blog posts if people ask my techniques and thought processes.
awesome chapter my friend
Lucky guy there
good chapter. keep it up
.......Well, I think I found the perfect representation of the Apples' reaction to Coral's "height".
Awesome! Didn't dive right into sexy times straight away. Just a lot of fun. I would like to see more fun times between the CMC and Coral like the limbo stuff!
lol the ending.
i wonder if AJ gonna have Coral Leaf's bulge stuck in her mind for a while and im suprised he got away with the lie from AJ since she is like a living lie detector due to being the bearer of the Element of Honesty
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Actually, the original coverart critiques were based on one I did when I first released Chapter 1. Though as the comments show, I finally removed the dreadful thing and threw it into my FurAffinity account, where it languishes currently.
Funny you mention size references. A friend was going over the story, and was curious about some more basic size references. With the story, I mainly wanted to give the reader the chance to use their imagination, and kind of formulate in their heads, just how big AB and Coral Leaf are.
I wanted a 'less is more' approach, as I've read some stories where some authors could go on for 5 paragraphs describing a girls huge, firm, beach balls sprouting proudly from her chest...though I wouldn't rule out some more accurate sizing soon. Definitely a possibility...
I am glad you have taken the time to leave a comment. Comments are like the energy drinks that keep me going with the story. In the last few weeks, I have seen the 'thumbs up' go up by 5-7, and it's making me eager to put up the next chapter soon (had a Birthday and a work party earlier this week, so maybe sometime in the next few days, we'll find out what happens next).
To me, I see the story as kind of a B-movie romance. That absurdity mixed in with the drama and comedy, is one thing that just pushes my buttons. Course, that means I do tick off a lot who just want to gorge themselves on the dessert. I have considered doing little blog posts if people ask my techniques and thought processes.
Good story!
I personally would like Applebloom to have an erotic nightmare in which she becomes an immobile milk factory and falls in love with her breasts.