A sweet, tender chapter, but to be honest it felt a little like filler. Or more accurately, an Iron Man 2 chapter, where a lot of new elements are introduced but the story doesn't really advance.
I liked it alot! I can clearly tell that your story really shows character and i am truly enjoying what i've read and am excited to read whats next! :)
Im so excited for whats to come with this story, i have never read a story as quick as i did this story (that's a good thing) its been so long sense i could find a story that actually made me want to keep reading to find out whats next!
A really sweet chapter as AJ gets to learn about Coral's parents. And AJ definitely seemed to make so many uncomfortable parallels with herself and Gentle's sister. AJ has been incredibly harsh recently, but who know's, maybe there's still some hope for her left. Maybe from as this stuff she learned of what broke Gentle's relationship with her sister she'll come to realise she's been following the exact same destructive path and try her best to make things right. I really hope why find out where Coral is soon, Applebloom needs him, and AJ needs to apologize to him. This is also the first chaptor in the story where Coral isn't in it. Unless that last encounter with Applebloom really was a dream in which case this would be the second.
8251579 I actually see this more like world building, and getting more of an understanding Coral's up bringing. I also feel that this time with Coral's parents could be what helps push AJ along to make things right.
When you think about it Applejack and Demure had the opposite problem when their little sister's starting growing. Demure became distant and apparently wants nothing to do with Gentle directly. Applejack on the other hand became too over protective of Applebloom. Demure couldn't care less what Gentle does and Applejack became controlling of Applebloom making all the decisions for her and Applebloom having no input whatsoever. Who knows, maybe AJ could help restore Gentle and Demure's broken sister relationship and take something out of it to help fix her own.
8291180 I'm glad you have enjoyed where the story is going, and that it is, 'a story.'
It feels like most people that are not enjoying it, expect it to be one of those 'quick-growth-and-get-out' jobs. Of course, it was intriguing to me when we had AB go through her massive growth spurt when she got her cutie mark, that that chapter was met with a very 'ho-hum' reaction.
A sweet, tender chapter, but to be honest it felt a little like filler. Or more accurately, an Iron Man 2 chapter, where a lot of new elements are introduced but the story doesn't really advance.
I liked it alot! I can clearly tell that your story really shows character and i am truly enjoying what i've read and am excited to read whats next! :)
Im so excited for whats to come with this story, i have never read a story as quick as i did this story (that's a good thing) its been so long sense i could find a story that actually made me want to keep reading to find out whats next!
A really sweet chapter as AJ gets to learn about Coral's parents. And AJ definitely seemed to make so many uncomfortable parallels with herself and Gentle's sister. AJ has been incredibly harsh recently, but who know's, maybe there's still some hope for her left. Maybe from as this stuff she learned of what broke Gentle's relationship with her sister she'll come to realise she's been following the exact same destructive path and try her best to make things right. I really hope why find out where Coral is soon, Applebloom needs him, and AJ needs to apologize to him. This is also the first chaptor in the story where Coral isn't in it. Unless that last encounter with Applebloom really was a dream in which case this would be the second.
8251579
I actually see this more like world building, and getting more of an understanding Coral's up bringing. I also feel that this time with Coral's parents could be what helps push AJ along to make things right.
When you think about it Applejack and Demure had the opposite problem when their little sister's starting growing. Demure became distant and apparently wants nothing to do with Gentle directly. Applejack on the other hand became too over protective of Applebloom. Demure couldn't care less what Gentle does and Applejack became controlling of Applebloom making all the decisions for her and Applebloom having no input whatsoever. Who knows, maybe AJ could help restore Gentle and Demure's broken sister relationship and take something out of it to help fix her own.
8291180
I'm glad you have enjoyed where the story is going, and that it is, 'a story.'
It feels like most people that are not enjoying it, expect it to be one of those 'quick-growth-and-get-out' jobs. Of course, it was intriguing to me when we had AB go through her massive growth spurt when she got her cutie mark, that that chapter was met with a very 'ho-hum' reaction.
cant wait for the next update