Because there is sadness, we cherish happiness. And because there is anger, kindness is born.
After a long time of Fluttershy's friend paying no attention to her, she happens to have a birthday party coming up. She invites her friends to celebrate in her cottage - Fluttershy style of course. Nothing big, she just wants to spend some quality time with her friends. But nopony shows up. Did they forget, or wasn't she just clear enough, when telling everypony what she wanted? How will she take yet another setback?
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Please do continue this. Maybe you could have different povs and make this a story about them searching for her or something? Or have a twist where time became blurred and Discord did something. Besides that the grammar is good and I approve this story.
7584794 Thanks, that means a lot to me
About the continuation, I can't promise anything. This was just a quick project between my main works. That Discord idea would be brilliant, but I'm not sure if I can write him properly. Maybe some day 
'Grammar is good' *checks my nationality again* Oh, still Finnish, thanks!
Why I read things I know is going to make me cry, I'm sensitive like that, I don't know. Tears are a sign showing that the writer has touching words that sincerely make this an amazing story. You are a writer who brings emotion, all that from tears.
7585278 I'm glad you like it
Honestly, I'm a bit touched. My goal is to bring up those emotions, because I know what that feels like. I have read few stories that made me cry as well and I don't cry that easily. So thank you! 
7585151 This doesn't have the emotional impact that it should. My advice is to include flashbacks to memories where she went to visit her friends, but they had to be asked to visit her. And memories of the various events in her life and holidays where she spent it alone in her cabin, despite tendering invitations to her friends to come visit her. To show her tears, the heartbreak, and despair and hopelessness, maybe even apathy. What would really drive this home is if she had approached her friends with her concerns regarding her friendship with her friends and in spite of this, for her friends to continue to leave her lonely and feeling unloved. Because without that weight of history, then the impact is reduced because of a lack of emotional investment in feeling Fluttershy's pain because there isn't any sense of depth of feeling towards her friends.
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Unfortunately, this story wasn't properly planned from the start. Actually, it wasn't planned at all. It was written solely because I happened to have a really bad day that day and the time I used on it was minimal 
While it's not an excuse, I'll stand behind the story. It was supposed to be that way. If I wrote it today, I'd probably take a different path, like the one you mentioned. 
Thanks for the feedback and advice