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It's a bit long winded, especially for a prologue, and the OC isn't fleshed out very soon, though we get a basic idea of his character from his manner. There is a lot of thought and detail, so this could be good.
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I understand it's a bit long, since it's my first story I can't really decide on long chapters or short ones. I don't really have a following or pre-readers so I'm kinda in a void.
As for why the actual prologue is long is because things will happen later on and story elements such as characters will be introduced. What do you mean by fleshed out If i may ask?
I don't mind the size of the chapters, the pacing is decent, the story is interesting. My biggest problem lies with punctuation and spelling of a few words. Look over the chapters a few times or get a proofreader. Other than that, I await the next chapter.
Edited for proper grammar.
Edited for Proper Grammer.
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Wish granted
7436205 ......sigh god dammit pinkie
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Im working on the next chapter will release in a few days
I wonder what Celestia will have to say about this, dark magic can corrupt a pony
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No worries, I have a decent chapter coming up and a cameo for everyone's favorite moon princess just gotta do editing and structure as I'm working by myself and it's not very easy. But I do appreciate your praise of more
When is it coming out? What's the ETA?
Prologue and first chapter have been great! Seriously, I love the pacing so far!
Chapter 4 editing finished
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Eurielle is a amazing singer.
Wow, this story has put me on a roller coaster of emotions, and I love it! I just recently started reading and I am confused as to why it doesn't have more likes. Keep up the good work!
(Also, I do like the non-italicized dialogue.)