Twilight woke up and saw the nurses drinking coffe and trailing a doctor that had appeared. The doctor was giving the nurses orders while he examined Soarin's body. A nurse noticed that Twilight had awoken and came over to her.
"Hello, do you need anything, dear?"
"How long have I been asleep?"
"Only 2 hours, you should sleep more."
"Is he alright?"
"Hes alive for now, but hes in a minor comma, don't worry we have our best doctor working on him."
Twilight nodded and looked over at Soarin', she could hardly stand to see him but couldn't look away. Soarin' was barely breathing, his face still showing extreme pain while the doctor felt his ribs and neck. Twilight felt a wave of nausea that forced her back to sleep.
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Twilight dreamed of her and Soarin' laying down on a red checkered blanket in a gentle meadow by a slow flowing stream. Soarin' was back to normal, head and sides unbandaged, he was smiling and stroking Twilight's mane. Soarin' mouthed some words that Twilight couldn't make out, but soon after the world around them twisted into a chapel. Twilight looked down and saw that she was in a white dress, she looked forward and saw an isle with ponies staring at her from the sides, and at the end of the isle she saw Soarin' waiting for her.
'Twilight.'
She started walking down the isle.
'Twilight, wake up.'
Twilight reached the end of the isle and started walking up the red velvet steps to Soarin'
'Twilight wake up!'
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Twilight shot up from her dream and almost hit the pony standing over her with her horn, the morning sun was rising, and SpitFire was right next to her bed.
"Twilight, hes awake."
Twilight jumped out of her cot and rushed to Soarin's side.
"Soarin'?"
Soarin' smiled. "Good morning, Twilight."
Twilight started tearing up. "Your okay?"
Soarin' gave a dehydrated cough. "Y-yeah, I think so."
A nurse brought Soarin' a glass of water and slowly poured a small amount in his mouth.
"Thank you."
The nurse nodded and set the glass down on a tray next to Soarin's bed.
The doctor walked up next to them. "Hello, I'm Doctor Jolt. It seems that Soarin' is doing fine and should be able to leave in a few days."
"Thanks goodness.." SpitFire sighed.
"But..."
SpitFire and Twilight tensed up.
"The crash was too severe for a complete recovery." The doctor cleared his throat. "The crash made his spine shift, his wings are now disabled, he may be able to fly again someday, but never for longer than a few minuets."
Soarin' tried to sit up was was too weak. "Really doctor?"
Doctor Jolt nodded. "I'm sorry son."
"So this means I can't be a WonderBolt anymore?"
"I'm afraid so."
Soarin' looked at Twilight and SpitFire, they were both crying, Soarin' felt bad as well, but he was grateful to be alive.
Twilight had tears running down her face, put her hoof on Soarin's hoof. "I'm so sorry Soarin'..."
"I'm just happy to be alive."
SpitFire spoke up. "Me too, Soar..."
All three stayed in silence for several moments.
"Don't worry Soar, we aren't going to leave Ponyville till you get better." SpitFire gestured over outside the tent and they saw the rest of the WonderBolts waiting outside.
"Thanks Fire.." Soarin' laid back into his bed and closed his eyes.
"I need to go take care of some business, want to come Twi?"
Twilight gave her head a shake. "No, I don't want to leave him."
SpitFire smiled. "Soarin' really picked a winner. Later Twi." SpitFire left the tent
Twilight nuzzled Soarin's hoof, he was asleep now. "I'm not ever going to leave your side Soarin'."
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(4 days later.)
Soarin' exited the tent and took a deep breath of fresh air, the sun was setting. Twilight exited the tent with him, they both had large smiles on their faces.
Soarin' had never missed being outside so much before, it felt like an eternity on that bed.
Twilight nuzzled Soarin' and asked. "Anything do you want to do now that your out?"
Soarin' looked up at the sky. "I want to go for a walk to stretch my legs."
Twilight and Soarin' both slowly walked through Ponyville with waves and hello's from ponies all over town, everyone was happy that Soarin' was better.
"Thank you for letting me stay with you at the library, Twilight."
Twilight kissed him. "There's nopony else I would rather live with.
Soarin' and Twilight continued to walk, Soarin led Twilight out of Ponyville into the country-side. "You were really next to me the whole time Twilight?"
Twilight nodded. "I was so scared, I didn't want to lose you."
"Let's stop here. I want to rest for a second."
Soarin' and Twilight walked away from the road and settled down on a hill. Soarin' and Twilight were both laying the in the grass, holding each others hooves, staring up into the sky.
The sun was setting in a perfect hue, showing a wide array of colors. They locked eyes as if they were staring into each others souls, and then they entered a long passionate kiss. They broke away from each other as they saw the sky change color, they looked at the sky in awe. For miles all they saw on the horizon, were Purple Skies.
Hey guys, WinterTwister here, I hope you enjoyed Purple Skies, I had alot of fun writing it. I want to thank Jolttix for the idea of Soarin' and Twilight, and thewaffler for being a great enthusiasm boost and his amazing ideas.
Again hope you enjoyed the story, it really touched me personally. ~WinterTwister
If you want to see another unseen pair written, send me a PM or leave a comment. I look forward to continue to entertain you guys.
I see what you did there with the doc. Well done I could have not wished for a more cute and heart warming story ever. Thank you so much Twister.
Very well good sir. I salute you.
This was done so well and can tell you really wanted to end it, but luckily you kept the ending open enough for a sequel or follow up if you want to revisit it in the future. Thanks for using most of my suggestion and making the rest your own. See, you got your drama and your happy ending. Everyone wins, well except anyone who wanted a longer chapter.
If you try to please everyone, you'll end up pleasing no one including yourself. -food for thought for future projects.
Peace Out. I think I should post the full suggestion I gave you as a comment for the fans just so they can see the behind the scenes work of the fic, kinda like a DVD Extra or concept art for a video game. I look forward to future projects.
So it ends? Darn I was hoping for more, like their life together and dealing with Rainbow's jeliously. Still good end, and I always love a happy ending. I do hope to see more from you, especially if you do a sequel, and I may have a few unusual/uncommon pairs that you could do.,
Best Regards,
Celestia's Paladin, For Honor and Duty, For the Sun and Moon
I liked this fic, a good romance fic every once in a while is good for ya. As for new ideas, I draw a blank when it comes to WRITTING romance stories. i do hope you revisit this story with a sequel or something along the lines of an extra. Also, you should trust thewaffler above me, his advice is solid.
50195 Phillys and Gentlecolts. The man behind the amazing ending. The Waffler. Here is his amazing suggestion that I used, and he saved this fic so much and solved my HUGE headache.
I know this might be cliche' but you can have your cake and eat it too. The thing is you've already established a really lovey dovey relationship and at one point had characters emit that they'd give up their favorite pass times for the other. So, Soarin' leaving would be really out of character considering the following:
1. he saved her from drunken rapists (you just don't fist fight someone for a girl and then leave the girl.)
2. he emitted that he'd give up flying for her.
3. Both characters had "fun" as Rarity put it.
4. It would put a strain on other relations and new friendships established. Especially the ones between Soarin' and Spike because Twilight is essentially a cross b/w his adoptive mother and his sister, so Soarin leaving would sadden more than just Twilight. Spike essentially getting a male role model in his life then losing that figure would hurt him emotionally as well. Then there is the new Spitfire and Twilight friendship and that Spitfire would never make Soarin' choose between his job and his relationship, not if she's his best friend.
No offense but you just can't be like okay festival is over see ya bitch. if that happened you'd feel the wrath of The Anti-Waffler.
If you wanna do the Soarin' leaving drama I suggest that he get jealous over a slight misunderstanding. leave and come back that way you can have you're sad moment and still have your Disney/Don Bluth happy ending. That's the easy way to deal with it and it is only slightly cliche'.
MY BIG SUPER IMPORTANT GOOD, SERIOUS SUGGESTION.
My Number One Suggestion: I really suggest a serious injury for him during the fifth day of the event during a flight stunt. The drama comes from Twi don't knowing if he'll make through the surgery and whether or not she can cope with the mental stress of the situation. His heart gives out on the operating table, he dies but only briefly as he's brought back at the last minute. "GODDAMIT, WE'RE NOT LOSING HIM, CLEAR!!!"*heart monitor comes back online as his heart start beating again*
He wakes up two days later, which can effectively end the festival. During this his Twilight, his friends and comrades are worried sick. Spike and AJ get closer due to the situation. The last bit of drama is when Soarin' finds out that one of his wings had to be removed because of the gravity of his injuries. This creates drama as well as a way for him to end his tenor as a Wonderbolt without devolving into the whole cliche "Spitfire I'm leaving the group to be with my girl" scenario. The drama is in that if you've ever had serious surgery, I have you then you'd know that doctors try to force anti-depressants on patients b/c many tend to become depressed or have suicidal thoughts.
Soarin' isn't so much down because he can't fly, but rather have to come face to face with his own mortality which he's never really done because most young Wonderbolts think their invincible. He thinks that this crippling of himself makes him less of a stallion and that he can't protect those he cares about. That's were Twilight comes in to comfort him and help him get through this ordeal thus strengthening their relationship. The great thing about this scenario is that creates drama, tension, it's relatable to anyone whose gone through surgery, ends the fic, and leaves on a triumphant happy ending. Everyone wins.
End Scenario.
If you don't listen to any of my other suggestions, please consider the aforementioned scenario. It gives you what you want and gives the reader a heartwarming happy ending not only that but it ends the festival and ends any writers block and if open ended enough for a sequel or follow up or gushy epilogue featuring older versions of the main characters and their children like the last Harry Potter film.
However, this is your decision and will respect that.
Peace Out.- your friend The Waffler AKA Jim.
50203 A sequal huh... hm...
Juuusstt... maybee...
depends on what I'm feeling after AppleBloom's Vendetta.
50219
Or a spin off, go more into Spike/Applejack angle
50225 Lol.
+ =
but maybe, ill put it on the list.
50225 LOL
for some reason its not letting me send you mail,
well heres my reaction to Big mac and celestia.
Well, ill be in site chat if you want to ...chat
dude it should have ended with rainbow dash being asked to be soarins replacement that way everyone is happy! there should be a sequel!
We created a monster, now they want Moar! Dude if you need help with the writing again, just send me a line. I'd be up for a sequel, spin off or extended epilogue. I even have more ideas. Like Soarin' doing TV ads like a lot of retired athletes do in real life. Plus others, but I won't spoil anything.
Peace Out.
Well done sir. Now MOAR
54699 lol
*puts on glasses* deal with it.
54922
I did deal with it. That was constructive criticism. I don't understand why you removed my comment.
55532
Lol. "The voice of one, is blocked by the voice of many." -Sophia Lamb
As a whole this was an enjoyable story (excluding chapter 9 thought I have already commented on that). I felt that it went too fast in the beginning, thought I don't really believe in "love at first sight" so feel free to take that in stride. I really enjoyed the ending of this story, it had that emotion that frankly I find a lot of fan fics with happy endings lack. Sadly there is just something about this story...I cant put my hoof on it...but there is something about it that makes me think of it as a "good story" instead of a "great story".
i must say i rather like this pairing and wish people would do more with soarin in general
i honestly think the chapters were a bit short but never the less it was really quite good though i agree with wandering topaz on not really believing in love at first sight
again i thought it was really good and sorry for rambling
i must say i rather like this pairing and wish people would do more with soarin in general
i honestly think the chapters were a bit short but never the less it was really quite good though i agree with wandering topaz on not really believing in love at first sight
again i thought it was really good and sorry for rambling
might i add on to the next story!! away!!
This story...
Is an absolute mess and doesn't have any flow to it at all. The whole thing reads like a trip down some particularly rough rapids: fast, bumpy, and uncomfortable.
All of drama, and I mean all of it, is forced and physically hurts every time a new batch of it is thrown in. Though the headaches from that mess are nowhere near as bad as the sucker-punches to the metaphorical gut that are the relationships.
There's no build-up, no second-guessing, nothing at all. I've seen Disney movie romantic subplots that moved slower than the relationship between Twilight and Soarin, and don't get me started on Spike and AJ. Seriously, what the buck? Where did that come from!?
Ugh, and the grammar...
Dear Celestia, get a pre-reader or something. Your grammar is atrocious.
In closing...
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