This was a great short story, I loved it

Cute! Loved this one!

Laxative hold-out.
A fun game for fun people.
Mostly Germans.

You've got the names mixed up Muffin was the filly unicorn, Pumpkin was the colt pegasis..

really sexy but as often it seems a little too rushed.

Maybe it's just me, but while your humping dialogue is very realistic, it's not very sexy

Another great example of how you make the most out of the allotted words for a commission. It had the right amount of lead up before getting right into the romance and then ended with an easy, intimate moment that showed how the characters are more than just doing what they did for the sake of a story. Most definitely a strong example of how to tell a quick tale of two characters that leaves a reader interested in them beyond being present for a brief moment together.