Princess Cadence has her special somepony propose to her. But things go wrong after that. Can Princess Cadence escape the nightmare she has been put in before its to late?
A different take of the Royal Wedding.
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GuyDaBoomster
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Please tell me how you like it! All criticism is allowed and this is my first fic.
I think its pretty good, I've read fanfics about MLP quite alot and I just started writing them too! Good Luck I hope this one turns out well!
757503 Thanks I will read your fics too!
Hope they turn out well
There's a lot of punctuation and quotation errors. I'm not going to thumb it down, but not up either.
757551 Thanks i will check it out and fix it
I've send you a google doc where I went through some of the problems in your fic. There are a lot of them. You need to read up on the correct use of punctuation and capital letters right away; it is clear you have no grasp on those right now. Make sure to also check into the use of punctuation in dialogue, as you are likewise lacking in this regard.
I can't say much good about the style either, it's incredibly dull, annoying to read due to run-on sentences and lots of repetition... Please excuse me if I'm wrong, but I think you're either young, or pretty new to the English language. Your first priority now should be to learn the rules, because right now you're not able to go even one sentence without a mistake, and it truly cramps your style.
The story line isn't exciting or original either, which is good because honestly, you need practice now, and it'd be a shame to waste a good idea by going at it with your current quality of writing.
This may all sound very negative, but I am doing this for your good: this is what you need to hear to get better. If nobody tells you this, you'll just stay at your current level. Don't despair, we all suck at writing stories at first. What is important is not how many mistakes you made this time, but how many of those mistakes you DON'T make next time. And the time after that. And the time after that. Eventually you'll work your way up there with the best, but it will take a lot of time and effort. Years, probably. I roleplayed and wrote small stories ages before I even thought of submitting anything to anywhere, and even then I wasn't perfect.
Buck, even NOW I'm far from perfect!
Don't lose hope, and keep practising.
757659 Thanks
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