Three months have passed since Shining Armor has been trapped as an earth pony maid. Now known as Lowly Servant, she had given up all hope of rescue. She thought it was over until Twilight's error prone pupil, Evening Storm turned her into a filly!
Okay, I'm ready for the booing and hissing now. ^^;
No. I loved the original story for what it was, and I enjoyed this story for what it is too, because as much as it's a fixfic, it's more than only that.
They're different types of stories, but looking at them, I don't see why they shouldn't be.
I've been worried that people would hate this story for the inclusion of the OC Evening, being OC's generally aren't smiled upon. :/
Doesn't bother me, really. OCs are more likely to bother people when they're Sues and Stus and self-inserts, and generally when they are in the role of protagonist. These things don't apply to Evening, just as much as they don't apply to any of the OC maids.
While I'm not exactly happy, I don't hate this ending. It at least give me some peace of mind. Though, I do like to see that maid get executed...The crimes she comitted is prettttty high on the list and for so long. High Treason alone is enough to have her burned alive. The head maid and some of the staff could also be put in High Treason category, too. And yes, I would like to see you covering up plot holes and tying up loose ends.
This chapter was pretty good. Shining knew he'd fucked up, Cadance knew she fucked up, and that was the main thing I was looking for: The characters not just brushing everything off like it had never happened.
Imagine, both Celestia and Luna as his concubines. The mere thought made him hard.
I seriously doubt casting that spell on them would go well ... he's truly gone mad with power.
the wood sprites are listed on page?” Shining blinked.
I get what she's saying, but it's worded weird.
And I see you read the Friends Forever comics.
“That Cadance would play with such dangerous magic.
I imagine to Cadence it was JUST A BEDROOM GAME. I think it never hit her that some harmeless role play could backfire so horribly.
“If he was then he’d know without any doubt you’d find the Crystal Ghost listed on-”
And he'd know Twilight was doing a fake entry at first?
I agree... the price here is that SA is gonna need a LOT of therapy after this. I imagine after he was violated by Chrysalis, this is even worse.
“She needs to what!? What Twilight?” Evening screamed back at her in fury. “Die for her crimes!? Should we just kill her then? Is that what needs to be done!?”
HOW ABOUT SHINING ARMOR?! DOES HE LIKE THAT HIS SISTER JUST WANTED HIS WIFE TO DIE?
The irony is that nothing shows SA blames for Cadence for this, he loves her that much.
Why isn't there more reaction to SA seeing his wife almost kill herself?! And himself not having the strength to.
“I know she can’t just be forgiven.
Neither can LemonFresh in theory.
She should have been paying attention! Her mind screamed as Evening plumpted to the floor. She shouldn’t have let this happen!
Sound sort of like what happened with Cadence right?
He wanted her alive for all the suffering he planned to give her.
Shining... don't sink to her level... don't become the Shining Armor she was.
I imagine Shining Armor giving a BIG SPEECH to the assembled maid staff that they're PEOPLE, NOT PROPERTY, NOT SLAVES, that they deserves respect as much as any citizen of the crystal empire. Even after the 'do whatever they say' spell MADE HIM be their partner whether he wanted it or not.
Still, they were the seeds of that one.
At least they won't have a power mad hedonist for a father.
sent Miss Marinette for re-education in Canterlot,
I know it's not meant negative, but it worries me every time I heard that word: 're-education.'
That horrible creature locked me away and hypnotised you into thinking she was me!
She didn't hypnotize everypony in Canterlot ... Chrysalis' real danger is how good an ACTRESS she is.
I imagine SOMEONE telling LemonFresh she was a fool... what happened when the next crisis hit Equestria and he was needed in some fashion? She didn't know his shield magic, and it wasn't her real talent... nor did she have his actual courage...
“A very large part of it is yes, but not all of it falls solely on you.” And Shining Armor AGREED to it.
On the subject of the 'dispel' should have turned him back to a mare.
I didn't explain this that well, and for that I apologize, but the idea is that when you do what Cadance did to cause the transformation, she settled them into that form indefinably. A simple dispel won't change you back.
The only reason the 'True Form' potion did, is because it's specially brewed to do just that, and the potion takes a long time to make.
Basically think of taking a ball of clay and forming it into a bowl, then enchanting it with a float spell. The dispel will get rid of the float spell, but it's not going to turn the bowl back into a ball of clay. You need a spell specifically designed to do that, for that to happen.
I realize it's probably not the best explanation or defense, but it was what I was going for.
The reason Shining didn't react to Cadance trying to off herself is because at the moment he was having trouble keeping his thoughts together. People mentioned to me that after three months of full on depression while Lowly, he shouldn't be able to act and talk as I had him at the end of chapter 2. So I added the 'spell delay' explination and basically had it that as time went on, his mind became more and more of a jumbled mess, him ready to have a sort of breakdown over the sheer weight of everything he'd gone through. By the time he realized what was going to happen with Cadance, Evening had already intervened and was trying to control the situation. From then, Twilight and Evening were having their shouting match/discussion and Shining had no reason to say anything about it.
Being Shining had spent the last several hours as Peppermint, he was content that Evening would fix everything, as part of him was still thinking of him as 'daddy'. It's also why he snapped when he saw Evening hurt. It'd likely have happened with Cadance as well if she had actually managed to hurt herself in a similar fashion.
While I personally have a few things that I wished were slightly different, I think overall it turned out pretty well to be honest, a happy ending is quite fitting for this story. So good job, I definitely enjoyed the story.
This story got my heart pumping at the healthy speed of seventy beats per minute. Thank you.I don't feel sad or depressed very well or happy but fear and shock affect me still so I value them all the more. All last chapter I was going" will shining make it? Oh no! Its going wrong! Yes! Oh dear that feels unhealthy" so props to you good story. If you don't understand what I mean it's basically saying I'm an adrenaline junkie.
bringing an oc into this eh? oh but it results in age regression? well ok that seems interesting enough to give it a look , but it doesn't look like it fixed any of the loopholes in the original fic....
So Cadence turns Shining into a mare, brainwashes him with some seriously illegal magic, turns the wrong maid 'back' into Shining, doesn't realise that this literally who isn't her husband in three months, makes babies with them and leaves Shining to be horribly molested pretty much constantly the whole time, and Shining's response to this is basically 'nah, it's cool'?
Not gonna lie, I'm disappointed. I was expecting Shining to give at least half a fuck that his wife's stupidity trapped him in a living hell, but apparently not. Three days is enough for that guy to get over absolutely anything I guess.
he had made the ruin carvings on the ground to transform his body. Rune*
“Y-Yeah…” He replied, trying to make sense of his emotions. Did he hate them? Shouldn’t he? It’s not like they had done anything to him, in fact they hadn’t even been born yet. Still, they were the seeds of that one.
From What I understand it would technichally be his genetic material as when the act of conception was performed Lemonfresh was essentially 100% Shining Armor. IF it the genetic Material stayed the same Lemonfresh would not of been able to cause such a conception in Cadence. And another thing its CADENCE not Cadance Other than that ^^ I rather thoroughly enjoyed this and actually rather enjoyed the inclusion of your OC and want o know more about Evening! But that's just my opinion!
And to assist you with the dilemma of Lemonfresh's Cutie mark I would be certain it'd be safe to assure that Twilight would have seen plenty of the other maids from previous visits.
6749901 He does give a fuck. Like he said part of him is furious with her for what happened.
It's a difficult situation to be in, and yes Cadance screwed up big time, but the fact she's spent three days practically wanting to die for that mistake softened Shining's heart a little.
Deep down during the entire ordeal all he wanted was for things to go back to how they were. Him as Prince Shining, married to his wife Cadance, who he still loved.
Yes Cadance mistook the wrong pony for him, and he's not just brushing that off. He told her directly that he doesn't know if they can really recover from this. Only that part of him still loves her and he'd like to try. Cadance is not a villain, she's just a mare who made a very stupid mistake. She's already punishing herself for that crime. Far more then anything Shining could do.
Lemonfresh is the real monster. She's the one that decided to take Shining's place and force Lowly to be as she is. Cadance knew nothing about that.
Right now, Shining just wants a taste of what he once had. Even if it doesn't work out in the end. He hasn't forgiven her at all, he states that plainly.
Anytime Cadance questioned his behavior, he’d just chalk it up to being under the persona spell for so long. A lie that had the added bonus of her not attempting any more spells on him for the time being.
AKA, Cadence believes that anytime the fake Shining doesn't 'act' like Shining. Fake Shining would lie and say that being under the persona spell for a full day must have messed with his thought process. He also convinces her not to cast any more spells on him for the moment so they don't make it any worse.
Therefore she hasn't tried to cast another spell on him for those three months, because she was afraid it'd hurt Shining. Never realizing this is an impostor.
6750423 mmmm that's good but the cadance in the original fic sure didn't seem to have any self awareness of how her actions effected others , so while that's still inconsistent i would still accept that as an as reasonable approach that could have been taken to the situation , nice thinking....
though i did say comments , that problem with cadance's extreme ooc wasn't the only problem that fic had....
soon as i start and i swear the opening scene is soo familiar that i've read it in another before but i wouldn't know what one.....
but ugh you should have put in the warning for heavy ooc and shity plot , that wasn't a pleasure to read at all , the characters were even below oc standards......
though it doesn't explain much past the other comment i made , but from your description i can already tell you'd actually be putting some effort into your characters , and it's not like you can retcon the plot since it's a sequel , but yeah it's just not a pleasure at all to read stuff where ponies are acting like assholes for no reason and the staff for the princess of love are all a bunch of cinderella wicked step sisters kinda thing..........
OH OH AND THAT'S RIGHT , the most fucking ridiculous thing out of all of this , is not cadance being crazy , cause it's a fetish fic you're supposed to go into it expecting that , but the utter retardation of shining's character , namely the part where cadance's hypno magic is supposed to make the subject act like how they think whatever they're being programmed to act like acts , and never in any fic (unless it's specific purpose is to explore that scenario like this fetish fic is for it's scenario) could i ever see shining francis armor being such a terrible pony to others that when they are hypnoed into thinking they are him that they would just as terrible as to not only go along with the charade that they are now him , but when confronting the real shining armor who obviously isn't happy with the situation , refuse to help and instead abuse their new hierarchical position to only make the real shining's life even more miserable......
the real shining armor would never do something like that , and having that maid pony apparently think that the real shining armor would act that way is just saddening to me.....
really liked it , altrought i would have loved to know what they would do with the foals and what faith is now suffering lemon ^^
also you have now a good open way for a bonus chapter about if lemon managed to do her plan she was thinking , make luna and celestia her concubine , same for twilight ect , you have a lot of possibilty.
6756773 An epilogue is coming, and a bonus chapter that deals with LemonFresh's fate.
Beyond that, I'm done with this story. I just don't enjoy doing grimdark stories. The one I did "Hearts and Hooves the Discord way" while can be considered 'dark' I actually rationalize it in a silly contrived way to make it not dark.
I am not going to lie. After, reading the first story, which I enjoyed, I was somewhat annoyed. This sequel gave me some much needed closer so for that I thank you. Also I really dig your OC. There I said it.
6756924 But with the sequel, it is not a grimdark story. A grimdark is called such because there is NO perceivable hope of a good end. With this, it is only dark.
actually does the fact that the body of shining that cadance got impregnated with had the mind of the servant in it when it's still shining armor's body? same genes? the only thing was that the real shining armor wasn't present for the 1 particular time that his body had sex with cadance and they didn't copulate......
mmmm sooo i guess you're just sticking with the original fic's explanation for the maid's behavior?.....which is none?.....
To be honest, I've been worried that people would hate this story for the inclusion of the OC Evening, being OC's generally aren't smiled upon. :/
i like how the oc was handled in this fic , fills that 'at least 1 person in this has to not be a moron/asshole' need that most media from my lifetime does their best to avoid.....
...mmm except i guess games cause since you're usually controlling the main character's actions they are as competent/kind as you are , maybe just another reason that's the superior medium heh.....
but yeah perhaps more fics should have an oc thrown into the mix for them to fill a roll that would otherwise be somewhat ooc for a canon character to fill.....
Im glad this ended in the way it did. As for the kink from the first story i would have enjoyed it if it happened to discord celestia chrysalis or blueblood. But shiny no just no he was never really an authority figure type never pompus or had too much power. He was always just a soldier doing his duty. Not to mention we always see him as a victim. It honestly took me awhile to finish this because it was honestly tragic.
No. I loved the original story for what it was, and I enjoyed this story for what it is too, because as much as it's a fixfic, it's more than only that.
They're different types of stories, but looking at them, I don't see why they shouldn't be.
Doesn't bother me, really. OCs are more likely to bother people when they're Sues and Stus and self-inserts, and generally when they are in the role of protagonist. These things don't apply to Evening, just as much as they don't apply to any of the OC maids.
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I have to agree that the story doesn't need to have SA not get his life back for the story not leave scar tissue.
While I'm not exactly happy, I don't hate this ending.
It at least give me some peace of mind.
Though, I do like to see that maid get executed...The crimes she comitted is prettttty high on the list and for so long.
High Treason alone is enough to have her burned alive.
The head maid and some of the staff could also be put in High Treason category, too.
And yes, I would like to see you covering up plot holes and tying up loose ends.
This chapter was pretty good. Shining knew he'd fucked up, Cadance knew she fucked up, and that was the main thing I was looking for: The characters not just brushing everything off like it had never happened.
Imagine, both Celestia and Luna as his concubines. The mere thought made him hard.
I seriously doubt casting that spell on them would go well ... he's truly gone mad with power.
the wood sprites are listed on page?” Shining blinked.
I get what she's saying, but it's worded weird.
And I see you read the Friends Forever comics.
“That Cadance would play with such dangerous magic.
I imagine to Cadence it was JUST A BEDROOM GAME. I think it never hit her that some harmeless role play could backfire so horribly.
“If he was then he’d know without any doubt you’d find the Crystal Ghost listed on-”
And he'd know Twilight was doing a fake entry at first?
I agree... the price here is that SA is gonna need a LOT of therapy after this. I imagine after he was violated by Chrysalis, this is even worse.
“She needs to what!? What Twilight?” Evening screamed back at her in fury. “Die for her crimes!? Should we just kill her then? Is that what needs to be done!?”
HOW ABOUT SHINING ARMOR?! DOES HE LIKE THAT HIS SISTER JUST WANTED HIS WIFE TO DIE?
The irony is that nothing shows SA blames for Cadence for this, he loves her that much.
Why isn't there more reaction to SA seeing his wife almost kill herself?! And himself not having the strength to.
“I know she can’t just be forgiven.
Neither can LemonFresh in theory.
She should have been paying attention! Her mind screamed as Evening plumpted to the floor. She shouldn’t have let this happen!
Sound sort of like what happened with Cadence right?
He wanted her alive for all the suffering he planned to give her.
Shining... don't sink to her level... don't become the Shining Armor she was.
I imagine Shining Armor giving a BIG SPEECH to the assembled maid staff that they're PEOPLE, NOT PROPERTY, NOT SLAVES, that they deserves respect as much as any citizen of the crystal empire. Even after the 'do whatever they say' spell MADE HIM be their partner whether he wanted it or not.
Still, they were the seeds of that one.
At least they won't have a power mad hedonist for a father.
sent Miss Marinette for re-education in Canterlot,
I know it's not meant negative, but it worries me every time I heard that word: 're-education.'
That horrible creature locked me away and hypnotised you into thinking she was me!
She didn't hypnotize everypony in Canterlot ... Chrysalis' real danger is how good an ACTRESS she is.
I imagine SOMEONE telling LemonFresh she was a fool... what happened when the next crisis hit Equestria and he was needed in some fashion? She didn't know his shield magic, and it wasn't her real talent... nor did she have his actual courage...
“A very large part of it is yes, but not all of it falls solely on you.”
And Shining Armor AGREED to it.
LemonFresh was so mad with power, she'd have likely molested her own foals given half the chance.
This is everything I could have wished for in the ending and more. My hands are literally shaking with relief right now.
Thank you so, so very much.
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On the subject of the 'dispel' should have turned him back to a mare.
I didn't explain this that well, and for that I apologize, but the idea is that when you do what Cadance did to cause the transformation, she settled them into that form indefinably. A simple dispel won't change you back.
The only reason the 'True Form' potion did, is because it's specially brewed to do just that, and the potion takes a long time to make.
Basically think of taking a ball of clay and forming it into a bowl, then enchanting it with a float spell. The dispel will get rid of the float spell, but it's not going to turn the bowl back into a ball of clay. You need a spell specifically designed to do that, for that to happen.
I realize it's probably not the best explanation or defense, but it was what I was going for.
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The reason Shining didn't react to Cadance trying to off herself is because at the moment he was having trouble keeping his thoughts together. People mentioned to me that after three months of full on depression while Lowly, he shouldn't be able to act and talk as I had him at the end of chapter 2. So I added the 'spell delay' explination and basically had it that as time went on, his mind became more and more of a jumbled mess, him ready to have a sort of breakdown over the sheer weight of everything he'd gone through. By the time he realized what was going to happen with Cadance, Evening had already intervened and was trying to control the situation. From then, Twilight and Evening were having their shouting match/discussion and Shining had no reason to say anything about it.
Being Shining had spent the last several hours as Peppermint, he was content that Evening would fix everything, as part of him was still thinking of him as 'daddy'. It's also why he snapped when he saw Evening hurt. It'd likely have happened with Cadance as well if she had actually managed to hurt herself in a similar fashion.
6747036 Outta curiosity, what were you hoping for?
I'm sure a lot of people will be comforted by this ending. Good job.
I didn't have a problem with Evening Star. I don't know if anyone did, did they?
Also, you might want to change the tag on the fic to Complete if it's finished, just to let people know it's done.
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It's not done. We still have the epilogue.
Was hoping they could do some sort of karmatic payback on the maid. But still, great chapter regardless.:D
While I personally have a few things that I wished were slightly different, I think overall it turned out pretty well to be honest, a happy ending is quite fitting for this story. So good job, I definitely enjoyed the story.
This story got my heart pumping at the healthy speed of seventy beats per minute. Thank you.I don't feel sad or depressed very well or happy but fear and shock affect me still so I value them all the more. All last chapter I was going" will shining make it? Oh no! Its going wrong! Yes! Oh dear that feels unhealthy" so props to you good story. If you don't understand what I mean it's basically saying I'm an adrenaline junkie.
6747392 Some Karmic justice...Not a slap to the hand and left it at that.
Why no evening be ded >~; (LIEZ)
But eyyyyyyy
bringing an oc into this eh? oh but it results in age regression? well ok that seems interesting enough to give it a look , but it doesn't look like it fixed any of the loopholes in the original fic....
6748714 Which loopholes?
how to fix plothole "shinning told me "
So Cadence turns Shining into a mare, brainwashes him with some seriously illegal magic, turns the wrong maid 'back' into Shining, doesn't realise that this literally who isn't her husband in three months, makes babies with them and leaves Shining to be horribly molested pretty much constantly the whole time, and Shining's response to this is basically 'nah, it's cool'?
Not gonna lie, I'm disappointed. I was expecting Shining to give at least half a fuck that his wife's stupidity trapped him in a living hell, but apparently not. Three days is enough for that guy to get over absolutely anything I guess.
he had made the ruin carvings on the ground to transform his body.
Rune*
From What I understand it would technichally be his genetic material as when the act of conception was performed Lemonfresh was essentially 100% Shining Armor. IF it the genetic Material stayed the same Lemonfresh would not of been able to cause such a conception in Cadence. And another thing its CADENCE not Cadance Other than that ^^ I rather thoroughly enjoyed this and actually rather enjoyed the inclusion of your OC and want o know more about Evening! But that's just my opinion!
And to assist you with the dilemma of Lemonfresh's Cutie mark I would be certain it'd be safe to assure that Twilight would have seen plenty of the other maids from previous visits.
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Shining never saw what Lemonfresh looked like before her transformation either. Only Cadance did. So sadly that doesn't work. :/
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He does give a fuck. Like he said part of him is furious with her for what happened.
It's a difficult situation to be in, and yes Cadance screwed up big time, but the fact she's spent three days practically wanting to die for that mistake softened Shining's heart a little.
Deep down during the entire ordeal all he wanted was for things to go back to how they were. Him as Prince Shining, married to his wife Cadance, who he still loved.
Yes Cadance mistook the wrong pony for him, and he's not just brushing that off. He told her directly that he doesn't know if they can really recover from this. Only that part of him still loves her and he'd like to try. Cadance is not a villain, she's just a mare who made a very stupid mistake. She's already punishing herself for that crime. Far more then anything Shining could do.
Lemonfresh is the real monster. She's the one that decided to take Shining's place and force Lowly to be as she is. Cadance knew nothing about that.
Right now, Shining just wants a taste of what he once had. Even if it doesn't work out in the end. He hasn't forgiven her at all, he states that plainly.
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No it's she blinked. As in 'Peppermint blinked'
6749130 check my comments on the original fic.....
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Taken directly from chapter 1 of my fic:
AKA, Cadence believes that anytime the fake Shining doesn't 'act' like Shining. Fake Shining would lie and say that being under the persona spell for a full day must have messed with his thought process. He also convinces her not to cast any more spells on him for the moment so they don't make it any worse.
Therefore she hasn't tried to cast another spell on him for those three months, because she was afraid it'd hurt Shining. Never realizing this is an impostor.
I like this better.
6750423 mmmm that's good but the cadance in the original fic sure didn't seem to have any self awareness of how her actions effected others , so while that's still inconsistent i would still accept that as an as reasonable approach that could have been taken to the situation , nice thinking....
though i did say comments , that problem with cadance's extreme ooc wasn't the only problem that fic had....
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I only saw the one comment. If you could just tell me here, I can see about addressing the concerns.
6750577 oh i see , the comment was
though it doesn't explain much past the other comment i made , but from your description i can already tell you'd actually be putting some effort into your characters , and it's not like you can retcon the plot since it's a sequel , but yeah it's just not a pleasure at all to read stuff where ponies are acting like assholes for no reason and the staff for the princess of love are all a bunch of cinderella wicked step sisters kinda thing..........
OH OH AND THAT'S RIGHT , the most fucking ridiculous thing out of all of this , is not cadance being crazy , cause it's a fetish fic you're supposed to go into it expecting that , but the utter retardation of shining's character , namely the part where cadance's hypno magic is supposed to make the subject act like how they think whatever they're being programmed to act like acts , and never in any fic (unless it's specific purpose is to explore that scenario like this fetish fic is for it's scenario) could i ever see shining francis armor being such a terrible pony to others that when they are hypnoed into thinking they are him that they would just as terrible as to not only go along with the charade that they are now him , but when confronting the real shining armor who obviously isn't happy with the situation , refuse to help and instead abuse their new hierarchical position to only make the real shining's life even more miserable......
the real shining armor would never do something like that , and having that maid pony apparently think that the real shining armor would act that way is just saddening to me.....
Bittersweet...bittersweet.
6750293 darn
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Symphony, this life? :P
really liked it , altrought i would have loved to know what they would do with the foals and what faith is now suffering lemon ^^
also you have now a good open way for a bonus chapter about if lemon managed to do her plan she was thinking , make luna and celestia her concubine , same for twilight ect , you have a lot of possibilty.
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An epilogue is coming, and a bonus chapter that deals with LemonFresh's fate.
Beyond that, I'm done with this story. I just don't enjoy doing grimdark stories. The one I did "Hearts and Hooves the Discord way" while can be considered 'dark' I actually rationalize it in a silly contrived way to make it not dark.
It's just not my thing yo.
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I decided to change Cadence's name for the fic, but you DO realize the character tag for this website itself has her listed as Princess CadAnce right?
6750081 considering that
2.bp.blogspot.com/-1Jd5jD3-3hk/T4tJ40kHrlI/AAAAAAAAmFA/nEGbHwb-Q3U/s280/1.JPG
(Aka, the girl whose name Cadance takes) spells it with an "a", you are definitely wrong there.
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6756924 do what you do. It's 05:20Z and I enjoyed this instead of sleep, for now.
I am not going to lie. After, reading the first story, which I enjoyed, I was somewhat annoyed. This sequel gave me some much needed closer so for that I thank you. Also I really dig your OC. There I said it.
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But with the sequel, it is not a grimdark story. A grimdark is called such because there is NO perceivable hope of a good end. With this, it is only dark.
actually does the fact that the body of shining that cadance got impregnated with had the mind of the servant in it when it's still shining armor's body? same genes? the only thing was that the real shining armor wasn't present for the 1 particular time that his body had sex with cadance and they didn't copulate......
mmmm sooo i guess you're just sticking with the original fic's explanation for the maid's behavior?.....which is none?.....
i like how the oc was handled in this fic , fills that 'at least 1 person in this has to not be a moron/asshole' need that most media from my lifetime does their best to avoid.....
...mmm except i guess games cause since you're usually controlling the main character's actions they are as competent/kind as you are , maybe just another reason that's the superior medium heh.....
but yeah perhaps more fics should have an oc thrown into the mix for them to fill a roll that would otherwise be somewhat ooc for a canon character to fill.....
Im glad this ended in the way it did. As for the kink from the first story i would have enjoyed it if it happened to discord celestia chrysalis or blueblood. But shiny no just no he was never really an authority figure type never pompus or had too much power. He was always just a soldier doing his duty. Not to mention we always see him as a victim. It honestly took me awhile to finish this because it was honestly tragic.
Good story telling overall.
i think you mean gait, not giant
Aww, man. You totally killed the mood with that one. I laughed so hard I forgot I was supposed to be feeling sad for Evening.
7457923 Well, it would probably still be a more pleasant experience for her than that particular fanfic... :P
I think I found a typo.
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Oh geez, that was a typo alright. Thanks for pointing it out!
I love how evening is portrayed idk what you're talking about