Shame you had to end it this way sarge. I was still very interested in helping you through rebuilding it all. But alas that regrettably wont happen. Well unless you want to. If you'd like to talk I'll be on skype :P

You know, canceling this fic makes me feel like I've lifted a huge weight off my chest. It sucked, big time.

Part of the problem, I think, was that I tried reading House of Leaves around the time I was writing chapter 4 which I think the general consensus is when it got stupid. That said, making the main character both an idiot and a bad narrator was a bad idea.

I hate Fall. I HATE him, so much. He is exactly what I didn't want my protagonist to be. He isn't believable as a person dealing with trauma and post-traumatic stress (and, eventually, drug addiction. And ghoulhood). Looking back, what had planned out would only have made the story stupider.

Lily was going to return and have a whole framed narration chapter from her perspective. Brute used to be One (related to Two and Three). Bloodfire is Broken Skull (or whatever it was I named the Legion's leader, I don't remember). That one blind mare shows up again and becomes Lily's love interest for some reason. Fall's eventual love interest is Cram, for no reason other than to cause angst when she dies. Fall would have been a pretty good MP with a cast of potentially interesting characters who would have (obviously) died gruesome deaths. I planned on Fall planting a bomb in the still-living body of some character and sending them... somewhere, I don't remember why. Both Ghost Lands tribes get massacred by what's left of the Enclave, FOR NO REASON! Fall ends up being the Legion's patsy all along for some elaborate plan I've completely forgotten. Solon drunkenly rapes (or maybe it wasn't rape? I can't remember) Fall's sister, for DRAMA!

Well, that's all I can remember as of now. As you can see, it would've been stupid and unreadable.

What good that has come out of this, however, is I know what not to do.

The two stories I'm working on now are better. I'm working on a (non-pony) novel and a new FO:E fic where I'm attempting to actually form meaningful relationships between the characters and have a compelling, engaging, and humorous plot. If HH was my response to House of Leaves, then my new story is a response to Catch-22, War, Dirk Gently's Holistic Detective Agency, stuff HP Lovecraft wrote, and other intelligible books.

Hope to release it (or at least part of it) soon.

That's all. Till later, adios.