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The master of the game


I'm someone who enjoys good stories, and who tries his hardest to write good stories.

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664 years after Tirek's defeat. Equestria is a barren, dusty wasteland of burnt hills where humans have taken residence along with some ponies.

Those humans and ponies live independently of the Solar Republic, a gathering of several city-state.

However, when a pony/human hybrid of royal blood and his childhood friend, also a pony/human hybrid who has a crush on him, get involved with the Solar Republic, things will go out of hand as dark schemes are exposed and a new evil, helped by an old one, makes itself known.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 4 )

She turned towards the guard. "Free the male Raider," she ordered.
"Don't," Celestia countered.
Luna turned towards her sister. "He's my son!"she nearly yelled.

A bit awkward, this part, it appears to me. I think it should go something more like this:


"Celestia... I... that raider, over there, he's my son."


But anyways, interesting story, looking forward to the next chapter.

Also, I think the last sentence in the description lacks a verb.

However, when a pony/human hybrid of royal blood and his childhood friend, also a pony/human hybrid, who has a crush on him, things will go out of hand.

I'm wondering exactly what makes the things go out of hand :rainbowderp:

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The last sentence of the description didn't lack a verb, but I nevertheless modified it for clarity.

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