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I'm enjoying this so far
Only one thing I found that could be changed
Probs just a typo :P
@Xzaves Thank you for pointing that out for me, I sometimes don't notice these smaller typos during my proofreading process but I have fixed it now!
He's far too trusting and I hope he doesn't flat out tell everything about himself and his kingdom as far as he knows they're all evil pretending to be nice. I also hope he has someway to keep Luna out of his dreams IF she hasn't already invaded them and if he's a mercenary please have him stay as one you knowing taking contracts from Ponies Diamond Dogs Griffins and even Changelings and Dragons have him leave equestrian and go other places. p.s pretty sure the world isn't called Equis if it is that's pretty racist that's like America calling earth Ameri
6302942 while i appreciate your comment and feed back, i hope that you will continue to follow the story as I am only beginning to hammer out a plot and a persona for my OC.
6302942 also there are Gore, Tragedy, and Dark tags on this story for a reason ;)
So when's the next chapter ????
6361071 next chapter should be done tonight. i only yesterday got my laptop back from being repaired
Do you have an editor for this? I saw little mistakes here and there, if you need someone to take a look at things I could probably do it.
significant improvement in regards to grammer
This shining armour seems to be really formal. Normally he seems more laid back yet can be serious when needed. Here he seem exceedingly polite and proper, using words that I don't really see him using. His personality also shifted slightly from the last chapter. Not a game breaker, just seems off.