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Peppermint Swirls


Just an aspiring Fic-writer and a fan of MLP FIM ;)Be warned that some of my stories might be...Cupcakes-ish...but not all of them are, don't worry :D

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Somewhere in Ponyville, long ago, a now defunct candy factory was built, through generations it had passed, but not only did it carry on the candymaking skills, but a curse, too.
It was common, that back in the days of Lore, a mare or stallion’s eyes were to be removed, for that is where the curse was kept. Legends tell that the curse would take place in the form of a pony’s eyes, and at a very early age, fillies and colts had to be taken through various tests, and few survived.
Though this is not the case anymore, elder ponies would often tell these stories to their grandchildren, usually at Nightmare Night.
The long line of candymakers have since died out, but young ponies would still enter the factory, hoping to find something valuable, and trade it for bits.
The closest Ponyville can get to being a candymaker are the owners of Sugarcube Corner, namely, Mr. and Mrs. Cake, and Pinkie Pie, there are indeed rumors of their ancestors being the candymakers, but they, especially Pinkie, have never said anything about the rumor.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 14 )

Artwork: Interesting.
Synopsis/Description: Very interesting.
Chapter 1's Length: Oh, that's probably a prologue. I bet the next chapters will be long-
Chapter 2&3's Length: . . .

Story: A total disappointment. This had a lot of potential, but it just blew up. My advice is for you to revise it all if you really want this to work. I can't even begin to note what is wrong with this fanfic.

Protip: If the chapter isn't finished, don't publish it.

I wanna read this.
Like I must learn the truth behind the mystery.
Please hurry and write more.

626037
I understand that. it's a kind of draft, the first chapter IS a prologue, i WILL revise the rest of the story, thanks :yay:

626225
It's just a draft, mind you i was VERY Derpy and excited that i forgot it was too short.:derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpyderp1::derpyderp2:

626020
Funnily enough, it WAS going to be one XD:derpyderp2:

626037
Is the story really that bad? now that i look back on it...eugh...:facehoof:

UNPUBLISHED CHAPTER 2 AND 3 FOR REVISING.

626037
My my lucy, if you call my pile of waste that is excused for writing better than yours for whatever reason and you call this a total disapointment?
Eh...
I feel as if I should do an epic reading on youtube MictheMicrophone style.

646225 I was helping Peppermint Swirls into revising his/her first three chapters... but I could only get 25% of the 1st chapter done before I had to bail... stuff came up.
Honestly? This story has something interesting and unique... but it needs a proper execution. I told Peppermint Swirls to get a better grasp on english and reboot the whole thing.

646232
A while back I told someone to do that with their fail of a HiE (terri-bad engrish, even by internet standards) and they just ragequit the site and closed their account. I tried to tell him gently that his story was an insult to the entire brony community and the English language and he could improve with a little effort , but he was pretty bullheaded.
"OMFG U DON LIKE MY STORRY LOLOLU SUCK IM 2 GUD FOR THIS SIGHT" was the response... :facehoof:

Hopefully this guy is stronger willed. :ajbemused:

646696 Sorry about that; I know how much it sucks to have your gender confused.

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