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We have finally dispose of the corrupted heroes, a stupid/revenge driven king, and a retard creature who deserve this and more. I kinda feel sorry for Ren, but it was too late for redemption...especially when he caused a poor demi-human to be enslaved after slaying her guardian papa dragon. However, I am glad our shield hero is feeling better from their death even if he wasn't aware of it.
Hahahahahahah!
I feel really sorry for the Bow and Sword heroes. I feel like they could have done some real good but nothing ever was able to convince them they weren't just in a game and that the people's lives they should have been saving were more than real.
Simply Beautiful ~♡
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indeed
Well fuck Raphtalia, I guess.
In all seriousness, though, considering how the light novel ends, Naofumi not being around would be a doomsday scenario of sorts. Not just because a bunch of people would die, but also because the world's neglect has repercussions that affect other worlds as well. I dunno what kind of boons he'll find on Equestria, I'm just not sure he'll be able to handle the completed form of a newborn god's conceptual magic without that other thing he finds there.
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It won’t be easy, I think we all can agree with that sentiment. Equestria will not be as quite as the show’s interpretation. The world of Melromarc ending will have a snowball effect of sorts on Equestria, but how it gets handled will be something I will try my hardest to make different.
Lets celebrate this wonderful chapter with something silly: Guns n wizards!
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Yeah, I think even the most passionate RotSH fans can agree that the ending was rough. Even the narration spells out that it's essentially two kids on a playground one-upping each other.
{Villain: Death times infinity!
Naofumi: Death times infinity plus one; no-takebacks.
Villain: Nooooooooo- *pop*}
I thought the premise was neat, but rather than subverting typical Isekai Tropes, it just wound up becoming even less developed than what they were parodying.
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But I will be drawing from the LN as well as parts of the anime to help sculpt that final part, and the three heroes out of the way, Naofumi will have a clearer head. And trust, he will need it for all the different problems and enemies that are bound to come his way.
Remember, people die when they are killed.
You know the most asinine thing about this, all of this, literally everything, spawned from one single lie.
Had bitch not lied:
Of course that also means he never would’ve met Raphtalia and Filo, unless the slave trader still decided to approach him, which is entirely possible. There might be other differences, but I can’t think of anything right now.
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True, but I am glad that I have tied up that loose end in this iterations of story. Plus if you really think about it, and not without even attributing this to Naofumi; a shield is better weapon in most situations and I feel they knew that before fucking him over like nobody’s business.
Best offense is a good defense.
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Captain America approves.
Oh! Since it’s actually possible for the shield to detach, would it be possible for Naofumi to use his shield the same way Cap does?
I haven't read the novel, so I could be ignorant of character traits not shown in the anime, but some of this seems WAY out of character for the queen.
I mean, I could see a lot of it happening like this. Actually having the resolve to execute Trash and Bitch, after having already spared them once and were already back to their scheming ways within the day, ESPECIALLY now that this time as far as she knows her youngest daughter also fell victim as a result. This, I can get behind.
Then the heroes, logically speaking, she has little choice. Without all four, survival becomes near impossible, and summoning a replacement can't be done unless all four are dead. Logic alone dooms them. Their crimes just make it easier.
But the little details. Toying with them seemed out of sorts for her. Mostly the "double guillotine" scare at the end.
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That's not necessarily true. Melromarc would still be a country beholden to The Church of the Three Heroes, and as such, Malty and the King would've just come up with an entirely different scheme to screw Naofumi over (as he's the Shield Hero and is seen as an Anti-Christ-like figure in more ways than one). Beyond that, the other 3 heroes would've still made the same mistakes as they'd done before because Naofumi still wouldn't be there to dissuade them from doing something stupid (since they can't gain experience if they're within a certain distance from each other), and thus would only be able to chastise them after they've already done something wrong (except for telling Motyasu to knock it off with the taxes and the cursed seed, those are the only two obviously bad things the heroes really did).
And yeah, Malty will incontrovertibly cause trouble regardless of Naofumi's existence.
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This was clearly an example of that. You can say anything about anyone, but there’s always one truth, everyone has a limit before they break. This woman has done literally everything in her power to salvage the damage caused by those 5, and what does she have to show for it? A dead (good) daughter, and only good hero (along with his group at the time), a potential war and a doomed world. This isn’t the ideal expert Queen making the execution, it’s an everyday woman who’s fully realized just how hopeless her situation is, and that it was caused by someone she put into a position of power (he wouldn’t have been able to summon all four heroes if he wasn’t in power at the time), and her own flesh and blood. No amount of training and discipline could’ve possibly prepared her for everything that happened while she was away.
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I can bow to that logic I suppose.
Now we get to see how bad a move it ends up being in the long run, from a PR standpoint anyway. I mean, the whole kingdom saw her toying with them like that before carrying out the execution. Many who knew the heroes and the events leading to this might be okay with it, but most are probably only familiar with rumors, then they see this.
Could be the thing that stirs up unnecessary trouble.
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For the sake of argument, since it was seen to be off of his arm, I would say completely yes. Now, will he at some point?
Highly unlikely.
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True, and that was a bit of what I was trying to emulate the writing the ending scene with the execution. The queen literally has tried everything that she could to get them to see their actions and to fix them before it became too late. She obviously, from what we have seen could have done next to nothing to even prepare for the shitstorm that she walked into when coming back to the kingdom. And when it came to handling that, there could have been another option, but it would have paled in comparison to something substantial.
She was faced in a place where she had nobody besides her Shadows to really confide in, and Fitoria is only beginning to be on the same level as they will try and save the situation, as well as being a Filolial(which she has an obsession for, just like Melty). I honestly don't blame her actions in the slightest.
The only issue comes into play when it comes to dissuading any of the negative thoughts that the citizens may have after seeing that execution be live and for her to toy with them. A lot of people believed the rumors about Naofumi outright and looked at the other heroes in high regard, as any other citizen in their position would. But there exists the far and few that will attempt to turn that around to try and save the world from being destroyed. It will not be easy, and may not even work, but she will at least attempt it.
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That will be something to see, even the best decisions can have a negative consequence that never is realized until the last moment.
And the worst choices sometimes, have the chance to have just enough of a silver lining for the execution to possibly not matter. Possibly.
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True, but that will actually be something I will touch on as a small snippet of conversation in the chapter to come.
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True, it would be the same thing until that cycle broke. And just happened to be broke when our protagonist came through.
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Yep, would have probably helped for an AU tag. And here’s to me trying to bring a different interpretation to the character then what we see in the show.
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Not only that, but apparently Ponyville exists, a town founded by the Apple family (or at least the Apples were among the first settlers? I forget the precise details) while granny Smith was young.
That would make granny at least 600.
Must be a hell of a diet. I need to eat more apples.
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So I've gotta be honest, I'm not really interested in continuing the story. I was expecting this to be more like a HiE fic, where Naofumi'd get transported to modern-day Ponyville, and all his traumas and problems would gradually be solved with the magic of friendship, all while he dealt with some random threat in the trying to take over Equestria. But instead, it's more like "Oh hey, remember that doomsday cult from Past Sins that tried to turn Nyx into Nightmare Moon? Well imagine that, except they're just straight up trying to destroy the whole world, and it's 600 years in the past for some reason." I don't know what it is about the character, but anytime Nightmare Moon gets involved in a fan work, my brain just tunes it out. Pretty much every story beat is about the same, with her either being Luna's dark side or the MLP version of Venom, and a cult based around her is just askin for trouble since they don't have an excuse for being insane, Guess it could be worse though, at least Discord didn't show up to be the villain for no reason.
As far as prior comments on this work go, killing Malty wouldn't fix the problem. If you recall from the light novel, she'd previously influenced a reincarnated hero from that one place (sometime in her youth, much sooner before the 4 Cardinal Heroes were summoned), so if he gets word that she died, it wouldn't only jumpstart a war, but she'd just get brought back from the dead. And since Naofumi isn't there to stop any of that from happening, that just leaves an even bigger window for that god to get revived to ruin everything.
Oh yeah, and since this is probably the last comment I'll make on this story, I've gotta make a joke that's been revolving in my brain since forever now. You know how there are shards of that god in a bunch of universes that conspires to ascend into divinity by manipulating a bunch of people into doing stuff they want in an unvarnished desire for power? Well...
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It wouldn't leave my head, and now it won't leave yours.
Anyways, peace.
From what I recall in the show, those three were utterly stupid, not comprehending fully how things work, even when they treated it as a game they failed to see aspects of what makes a game a game.
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Appreciate the honesty and criticism man. Thanks for at least giving it a read.
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Out of curiosity, what WOULD you consider Nightmare Moon to be, if not Luna's "dark side"?
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Oh, well some people interpret that one IDW comic where Nightmare Moon became its own entity and possessed Rarity-
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-as evidence that Nightmare Moon is actually a separate entity from Luna (prior to the pilot) that possessed her and convinced her to be evil. So she's basically a parasitic demon that tries to bring about the downfall of the world by possessing a powerful magic user, like in the sequel to the Turnabout Storm novelization, "The Lawyer and the Unicorn".
But she's dull no matter what's done with her, imo.
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Yes yes, Nightmare Moon, your LiveJournal submission is very Deep and CompellingTM, but can we please get to the next episode so we can see how Dusk Shine decides who he wants to bring with him to the Grand Galloping Gala in the TULLoDS manga already?
EDIT: To clarify, I'm not saying that Nightmare Moon isn't Luna's dark side or that it isn't the case (it absolutely is, otherwise it takes away a lot of Luna's agency), I just think Nightmare Moon is a very boring character to write about in fanfiction. It's about as bad as when Discord is some god tier threat that acts like an R-rated version of Bill Cipher in some stories in my opinion.
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Yeah. The Queen in the Light Novel is way more ruthless than the anime's version of her. Light novel Queen also kinda enjoys punishments.
Justice demands retribution.
Something is rising, and it's not the shield hero.
Srsly, if naofumi found a way back to mallumark, I'd bet money he would give the queen his personal 'services' as gratitude for offing bitch and the useless heroes. Like that you stuck with cannon, rin was the best amongst the useless heroes.
You know... *insert TF2 voice line here* would be perfect use, but, I'm going to be flat about this.
This. Was. Perfect.
Everything from the start; Perfect.
The fact the queen actually got the last laugh, makes their deaths all the more sweeter.
I can't make anymore words for how good this was.
The following quotes, fit this chapter:
Thank you
Don't be stupid, the Queen would never execute her Bitch daughter and King Trash ever again. She doesn't actually wants to. Even if Shield Hero suddenly disappeared into another dimension or died the Queen would not harm the other three heroes. Guess what? She needs them to fight in the waves of calamity.
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Right as you may be, and trust me, I also side with you
on she didn’t really want to do what she did.
But for that moment, in her eyes, it makes sense. As far as she’s aware, Naofumi is dead, hoping for him to be alive is trying to find a needle in a haystack with everything around her going on. The other 3 heroes constantly, time after time, major or minor; fucked up in some way. Whether tarnishing their own personal reputation or that of the kingdom that summoned them steadily snowballed in what led her to execute them. It was certainly a political move, to garner attention of the true fight at hand; The Waves Of Calamity. Constant bickering amongst the heroes themselves, their treatment of Naofumi and his party, and disassociation with real life from a video are all things that presented real problems for the monarch. Takt being summoned, even though he already exists in the universe of Shield Hero is just a much of an anomaly as you would think. And Naofumi’s ‘death’ suggests that new Heroes can be summoned but to which degree after him, only the chapters further down this story will tell and show you.
Her having to make the conscious decision, even though not being the one directly cutting the rope that took their lives, the command is just as powerful. A family member, let alone your significant other and child is a mental hurdle most people can never ‘just do’, and she’s no exception; it just hasn’t hit like a iceberg sized hang over.
And all of this with the possibility, or actual occurrence of a small war in later chapters to influence her to try and wrap a really tight cloth dressing over a bloody stump.
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I still think they deserve to be executed. After all the crap they did.
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