Interesting.

Quick question.... muffins or cake?

P.S. Like it... like really like it! u got my fav!

5979282 guess both

good start but does Artemis or rather Nightmare Moon intend to be the villain and if so? Why? she has an oppritunity to live peacfully as a immortal goddess why risk messing that up with the obvius villain intro

by the way love the chapter can't wait for more

5979345 oh trust me she playing it for its worth.

5979377 oohh ok yeah i'd probably do that too

Yes! You have two MLP Displaced displaced!

Question.... I see its mature is there going too be you know.

5979627 Ok if another person asks that maybe I'll answer

It would be so easy to throw Twilight off in an anthro mlp world as NMM. Just do what Xante does when facing heroes, start stripping at random. I don't that has been tried yet against the Mane 6 and would undoubtably be hilarious.

Has Artemis gone insane? After a thousand years of loneliness on the moon, I know I would. It's the only reason that I can think of that explains why she's acting the part. A thousand years is too long to just want to play the villain and not just explain your situation peacefully when you get free so you could get a chance go home.

5979263 i concur i shall watch this for updates this story has my attention.

5980000 kinda she did a lot to keep her mind off it after all

Sweet. I'll want a crossover sometime within the next month.

5980831 really/

5981285 Yup. If I remember I'll PM you after I finish this current crossover and two others.

...I really have a lot of issues with the execution of this fic. The intro is rushed as hell and gives us no insight into your character whatsoever. Furthermore, your character does not display any reasonable surprise about suddenly finding herself a horse goddess on the moon, genre-savviness or not, nor any other affect than annoyance at being trapped on the moon for a thousand years (which is a span of time pretty incomprehensible to the average human teenager). I haven't got any inherent problems with the anthro, but the way your character narrates/observes it feels unnatural (again, lack of surprise, though not as much is needed as the 'oh god I turned into a horse goddess'), and the focus on sexuality (noticing giant breasts immediately, random pony going 'hey our new conqueror/boogeymare is pretty hot') feels pretty awkward and uncomfortable. And that's all without knowing why the protagonist feels the need to play the Nightmare Moon part, since if she's a fan of the show, surely she knows where that path's going to lead.

Lastly... minor nitpick, but Nightmare Moon doesn't wear a crown. She has a helmet.

It's a cool premise to have NMM be separate from Luna, Displaced or not, but the execution here needs a lot of work.

5982432 thanks for the tips I may rewrite the first chapter to flesh it out

5979345
It's some what consequence free... She knows the elements will "purify" her soul, cure any mental problems from the 1000 moon trip and free celestia. So as long as she doesnt actually hurt some one why not go play?

5982432 I had it be a crown because the outfit a bit different

I would still like to do a crossover, but I'll wait until you have an editor for this story.

I am interested in where this will go. I love any great story featuring Nightmare Moon as a protagonist, or just a major character in the story. Aswell as a antagonist. Human turned Nightmare moon, i am okay with where this is going. I hope the chapters will be a bit longer in the future though and that you have more build up. But it is a promising start. Liked, faved, and tracked. Hope to see more soon. Go Artemis, show them what the nightmare can do combined with the cleverness and wits of a human.

The sad part is, with how this is going so far, I can picture Sombra, who is another displaced, booting down the door to Canterlot Castle, shouting, "I'm back, bitches!"

Much like this:

This reminds me of that other one of these...the tale of loki.
now to get of MMO's and 4chan, and get to reading this later.

Wondering how often you might update?

Alright I'm in keep it coming.

when are you going ad A new chapter

6064566 when my editor finishes he been busy

How human is our displaced?

6075999 human at birth, currently a Alicorn demigoddess

6076016 I meant her current physical form. It's all pony, right?

6082640 anthro

6082642 ah. Since she's NMM, couldn't she shape shift back to her human form?

6082684 true

6082699 Why doesn't she? I mean, NMM clearly doesn't need her horn to use make(see: Shadowbolts), at least not while in another form. So why not return to your own face, if it costs you nothing?

6082725 most likely pure boredom, she mostly lost the memory of what she once was

6082735 ... it clearly implies that she didn't. And "most likely"? Aren't you the writer? Don't you get to decide?

I'm wondering when this'll be updated, it's an awesome started and I can't wait for more.
I just re-read it from when I read it a few weeks ago, still just as awesome.

This is great story I want more!

Is this dead?

6235886 no I just can't get the file for it next chapter to work

Run away!
(Sings brave sir robbin ran away)

Interesting concept, poor execution. Okay she ended up as Nightmare Moon on an anthro version of Equestria. No big freak outs and no sign of the actual NMM that was banished. ANd she just went into being even girl. Not needed, espeically when the fact both sisters are still around there's no need for Twilight to be Element of Magic for they would still work for the sisters.

Question: Update?

6470742 I.... forgot about this story....

6470745 Looks at comment in disbelief. What?

6470745 Are you going to continue this?

6522942 I.... don't know.... should I? Or should I remake this?

6523112 I'd say continue this, it has captured my attention and very few displaced fanfics are able to do that, just please don't do one thing. Please don't put this in the Nightmare Fuel universe. Just look it up in the displaced group and you'll see what I mean. Those fanfics aren't really my cup of tea, and they confuse me to no end.

6523180 very well then

6523188 Thank you. The reason this has my attention is I've only read 2 other fanfics like this called Of Bat and Shy: A Tale of Twins and Chaos is Displaced: The Tale of Loki. The reason I say "like this" is because I have seen few displaced fanfics where someone goes to bronycon and is sent to equestria as their costume.