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So I'm an hour too late to make that joke.

This wasn't bad, but for some reason it didn't quite get me like you're other work. Hopefully the next chapters will, and I look forward to reading them

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Maybe it needed more of that gettin' biz-zayyyyyyyyyyyyyy. It and chapter 2 are mostly just talking and sexy situations, nothing really hardcore until chapter 3~

Prince Luna Straight Drownin' In Mares

Straight Drownin in Mares instant fav

The sex is well written but the rest of it is a little.....iffy. Like straight out of a cliche harem hentai iffy.

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Can't speak for the quality of the sex scene, seeing as I bailed on the fic as soon as Twilight was introduced, but I agree - with the caveat that 'cliche harem hentai' appears to be exactly what the author is aiming for. I generally like herding stories, but I can see this one's not going anywhere I'll like, so I'll stick to commenting on the writing rather than the content.
This needs editing. Lots of editing. Lots of excess verbiage and unnecessary exposition for a very straightforward narrative. Lay off the third person omniscient perspective, too ... it makes the flow of your prose really chug. Pick a perspective character for the scene and stick with them, it's much less painful.

Nice work! My only complaint is that you seemed to get a bit... overly friendly... with the exclamation mark in a few sections.

Yessss Coco Pommel.

This was hot 'n heavy.

You can certainly expand on this.
It might be hard, but I can see you brain throbbing with ideas.
Just keep stroking your imagination and know we will all enjoy what comes out.

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5941183 AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAA!!!!

I don't intend to sound overbearing or "entitled", but I would much appreciate a rough estimate of the times between chapters, if you even know yourself. It's really good, and I want to read more as soon as I can.

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I'm hoping to release about one chapter a month, since I'm also working on a lot of other stories alongside it. The next chapter of this will be released to Patreon subs later this month, and I'll be putting up the first chapter of a similar, Twilight-themed, story on Fimfiction in a few days.

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Just a small question. Why didn't you use the rule 63 name of Luna? Luna doesn't really sound like a name for a prince. It's not really a complaint but it confuses me while reading xD

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Oh, sweet. thanks man. Keep up the good work!

Hot!
Please, I need more!

Is this patreon only or will you be updating here as well?

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Everything pony-related I write spends one month on Patreon and is then distributed for free!

Calm down the the exclamation marks. They're made pointless by the density of them.

Looks promising. Hope to see more soon :p

MOAR!

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I'm with RainLight, it's a bit confusing. He's usually Artemis, despite that being the name of a GodDESS in original Greek Mythology but hey, it works.

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How you don't have more upvotes is beyond me. But you deserve every last one of them for that joke.

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The double entendre is strong in you.

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I think Artemis is a reference to Sailor Moon.

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Well, I finally started reading this. And I got to say, I was hooked since the very beginning. And from Celestia pleasing her little brother to Rarity's, Trixie's and Twilight's introduction to the harem life, it only got better. I look forward to more mares in the next chapters, especially Coco (as I implied in my comment in the last blog post).

As a lover of futa, I was originally rather disappointed that it's "just" R63 Luna (I might have read it earlier, if it had been futa). However, that changed as I read this and not only doesn't it bother me anymore, I kinda like it. It helps that there's a certain... theme of masculinity (that I already liked in Laden Milkmaids and also enjoy here) there, that wouldn't work with futa.

So it was this combination of factors that led Twilight to perceive the little royal was as cagey as a guinea pig who'd broken into the female enclosure.

Frocto, where are you getting your idea's from?
Guinea-pig-to-become-father-to-400-after-breaking-into-female-enclosure.

5934555 That joke really lives or dies on its timing... and 9001, is the right time.

"It's... 1006.
"Really?"
"Yeah, kick his ass Nappa."