5898733 it doesnt ring of my own words if those are quotes, but it sounds like the spirit of the advice i can give. Many people write post fall as a venting technique and roflestomp dainn, my advice at the time was geared towards making Dainn a credible threat to most authors seeking advice. giving your enemies victories and your allies defeats or making them pay for their victories in costs they would rather not pay is an easy way to build tension. The heros, if they win, need to win against a decent amount of odds. the same is true for the villain if they win.
that said I don't harp on it that much, and the majority of my advice has always been centered around character relations to one another and crushing contrived plot points. people are always going to have differing opinions on what challenge is overbearing and what is too flimsy, characters and the plot are much more essential as long as you don't shoot past the moon like FoE did with contemptible tension building.
it doesnt ring of my own words if those are quotes, but it sounds like the spirit of the advice i can give.
I was paraphrasing the quotes. Not copying them literally.
I'll freely admit I went down the rabbit hole on this. Way too much time juggling my world building as I constructed this. But I don't think I've included anything that is over the top in regards to what they have already done in Canon.
The Crystal Empire vanished for a thousand years. That created the idea of a country that goes out of phase with the rest of the world on a regular basis.
The idea of a lost land cut off from the world due to geography has a long historic tradition. Conan Doyle made use of it in his book "The Lost World" I would not be at all surprised to see it make an appearance in a MLP episode. They already created an entire lost civilization and city for that Daring Do adventure.
The sex addiction is actually rather mild by MLP standards. No mind control, just an increase in a basic natural drive. Far less than what Twilight did with her "Need it, Want it." spell
But I went and harped way too much on these points when I should have been focusing more on the story and the characters. I was trying to make it "okay" for the characters to turn into sex maniacs.
Would have been better served to just follow porn world rules and they are all horny as hell with ridiculous sexual stamina.
I'm already thinking I'm going to ease way back on the justification in the follow up material, and focus more on the relationships between the characters, and try for some humor and plot twists the fans might get a kick out of.
I'm hoping to start a discussion in the Caridoon group about character interactions and how to handle the various secret kinks the characters might have.
For instance, maybe Rainbow Dash has this things for Gryphons. Though she'd deny it up and down, she thinks they are cooler than ponies. Not cooler than her, but ponies in general. Justification for this is the Breezy episode where she tried to weedle Twilight into turning her into a Gryphon. Dragon was her second choice.
Her secret private alone time fantasy might be to imagine herself being rutted by a Gryphon, likely combined with a Daring Do scenario where the Gryphon is question is in league with some Daring Do villain and Rainbow has to distract him, anyway possible, while Daring Do goes for the treasure.
I remember when you posted this as a Fall of Equestria story on the forum. I had forgotten about it until recently and am I glad I refound it. Definitely like how it's been modified to be it's ownot sory and look forward to where it goes.
5905364 sounds pretty neat. though dash is probably going to learn a healthy amount of respect for twilight if she comes under control of her/him as a slave for the duration of their excursion as is hinted. I can easily see twilight's juxtoposition with mental doming and dash's athletic nature will inevitably clash in fun ways. I'm just waiting for Twilight to turn the line about being her pet back around after being threatened. "but you were right rainbowdash, I'd never be qualified to be your pet, that's why you have to become mine."
fun interactions abound, but as far as justification goes, I think this is overthinking it. Exposure to lots of sex in a culture filled with it is bound to have an effect on libido, and horses are already a race that behaviorally has a fair amount of domination and hierarchy. (seems to be reflected in their diarchy as well). having an excuse to let out subtle fading instincts loose along with provocation from constant exposure is really enough, I definitely agree that the ponies get in even more absurd situations than porn logic regularly provides.
I may have to touch base with you a bit when it comes to various relationships. I've just wrapped up chapter eight, the final chapter/epilogue to Applejacked and am ready to start working on a short, I hope, story setting the stage for the rest of the Mane Six to come into the story.
Another story that would be pretty much pure clop would feature the new leader of Equestria, Luna, 'punishing' her sister Tia for playing chess with her own life and the lives of everypony in Equestria. Or something like that. Just an excuse for Luna to dom the hell out of a de-evolved Celestia. If that is the right term.
anyone else besides me thinking how pathetic it is that the stupid king didn't get the prophecy correctly?
I mean, it's REALLY pathetic. He lives in a place where there are creatures called Moon Demons, the prophecy speaks of collaring a Moon Demon, but because that ass thinks only with his cock, he thinks that means Luna.
I mean it's really REALLY pathetic! The guy's Celestia's brother and has lived just as long as her. He should be smart enough to have figured this out, but since he only thinks with his dick, the guy can't see it! God!
“Goddamn bitch of a diseased feline! Can’t you see I’m busy here?!” Her master yelled at the top of his lungs. “Well, fuck you! I’m not going to play your stupid game! I have this nice little mare all juiced up and ready to go. And I’ll be fucked if I’m going to let you cock block me! So you can just go lick your own ass until I’m done here!”
You know, despite all that's been said about the Ursine, this is the best damn OC I've seen in a long time.
“You. Put. A. Collar. On. A. Moon Demon.” Signe said, articulating each word to make sure her dim idiot of a master got this important point. “Of course I want to travel with a male who has balls that big.”
Catus interruptus!
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Dang. I am so glad you showed that disabling spell. That is going to make my life so much easier.
You never crease to amaze, this chapter is as good as ever.
5904266 Not on purpose, but certainly can't deny that Sir Terry, may he rest in peace, has had a strong influence on my writing.
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it doesnt ring of my own words if those are quotes, but it sounds like the spirit of the advice i can give. Many people write post fall as a venting technique and roflestomp dainn, my advice at the time was geared towards making Dainn a credible threat to most authors seeking advice. giving your enemies victories and your allies defeats or making them pay for their victories in costs they would rather not pay is an easy way to build tension. The heros, if they win, need to win against a decent amount of odds. the same is true for the villain if they win.
that said I don't harp on it that much, and the majority of my advice has always been centered around character relations to one another and crushing contrived plot points. people are always going to have differing opinions on what challenge is overbearing and what is too flimsy, characters and the plot are much more essential as long as you don't shoot past the moon like FoE did with contemptible tension building.
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I was paraphrasing the quotes. Not copying them literally.![:twilightblush:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightblush.png)
I'll freely admit I went down the rabbit hole on this. Way too much time juggling my world building as I constructed this. But I don't think I've included anything that is over the top in regards to what they have already done in Canon.
The Crystal Empire vanished for a thousand years. That created the idea of a country that goes out of phase with the rest of the world on a regular basis.
The idea of a lost land cut off from the world due to geography has a long historic tradition. Conan Doyle made use of it in his book "The Lost World" I would not be at all surprised to see it make an appearance in a MLP episode. They already created an entire lost civilization and city for that Daring Do adventure.
The sex addiction is actually rather mild by MLP standards. No mind control, just an increase in a basic natural drive. Far less than what Twilight did with her "Need it, Want it." spell
But I went and harped way too much on these points when I should have been focusing more on the story and the characters. I was trying to make it "okay" for the characters to turn into sex maniacs.
Would have been better served to just follow porn world rules and they are all horny as hell with ridiculous sexual stamina.
I'm already thinking I'm going to ease way back on the justification in the follow up material, and focus more on the relationships between the characters, and try for some humor and plot twists the fans might get a kick out of.
I'm hoping to start a discussion in the Caridoon group about character interactions and how to handle the various secret kinks the characters might have.
For instance, maybe Rainbow Dash has this things for Gryphons. Though she'd deny it up and down, she thinks they are cooler than ponies. Not cooler than her, but ponies in general. Justification for this is the Breezy episode where she tried to weedle Twilight into turning her into a Gryphon. Dragon was her second choice.
Her secret private alone time fantasy might be to imagine herself being rutted by a Gryphon, likely combined with a Daring Do scenario where the Gryphon is question is in league with some Daring Do villain and Rainbow has to distract him, anyway possible, while Daring Do goes for the treasure.![:rainbowhuh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowhuh.png)
I remember when you posted this as a Fall of Equestria story on the forum. I had forgotten about it until recently and am I glad I refound it. Definitely like how it's been modified to be it's ownot sory and look forward to where it goes.
5905364
sounds pretty neat. though dash is probably going to learn a healthy amount of respect for twilight if she comes under control of her/him as a slave for the duration of their excursion as is hinted. I can easily see twilight's juxtoposition with mental doming and dash's athletic nature will inevitably clash in fun ways. I'm just waiting for Twilight to turn the line about being her pet back around after being threatened. "but you were right rainbowdash, I'd never be qualified to be your pet, that's why you have to become mine."
fun interactions abound, but as far as justification goes, I think this is overthinking it. Exposure to lots of sex in a culture filled with it is bound to have an effect on libido, and horses are already a race that behaviorally has a fair amount of domination and hierarchy. (seems to be reflected in their diarchy as well). having an excuse to let out subtle fading instincts loose along with provocation from constant exposure is really enough, I definitely agree that the ponies get in even more absurd situations than porn logic regularly provides.
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I may have to touch base with you a bit when it comes to various relationships. I've just wrapped up chapter eight, the final chapter/epilogue to Applejacked and am ready to start working on a short, I hope, story setting the stage for the rest of the Mane Six to come into the story.
Another story that would be pretty much pure clop would feature the new leader of Equestria, Luna, 'punishing' her sister Tia for playing chess with her own life and the lives of everypony in Equestria. Or something like that. Just an excuse for Luna to dom the hell out of a de-evolved Celestia. If that is the right term.
I mean, it's REALLY pathetic. He lives in a place where there are creatures called Moon Demons, the prophecy speaks of collaring a Moon Demon, but because that ass thinks only with his cock, he thinks that means Luna.
I mean it's really REALLY pathetic! The guy's Celestia's brother and has lived just as long as her. He should be smart enough to have figured this out, but since he only thinks with his dick, the guy can't see it! God!
You know, despite all that's been said about the Ursine, this is the best damn OC I've seen in a long time.
Literally or figuratively?![:trollestia:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trollestia.png)