You know at the beginning I was skeptic about this story just being like another Fall of Equestria, and trust me I hate Fall of Equestria. But while there are similarities, I find it way better than Fall of Equestria. Mainly because I can see an happy ending to this story.
My choice for the future of this story is between choice number 1, or choice number 3. But I would go with choice number 1 in this story if I were you.
Thank you. There most certainly are lots of happy endings in the future.
I see no reason why the characters can't indulge in kinky stuff and still have genuine affection and love for each other.
And thank you for making a vote in regards to Mac and Applejack. I have so many contradictory plot concepts in regard to them running through my head that I really need to decide how I'm going to handle them.
Also, I'm tempted to leave it hanging and unresolved as author bait to get other writers intrigued in working with them. ^_^
Luckily I'll get a break from them once this story arc wraps up and I move on to exploring the various latent fetishes that the rest of the Mane Six have as I do up a day in the life story that takes place during Applejack's situation.
Well, the universe is meant to be shared, so if another author wanted to do up a story featuring the third option I'd have no problem with that. Though it might go in the Non-canon folder.
I have so much material to cover featuring the other characters that once this story arc is done up I won't be spending too much time on the apples for a little while
Not in this story arc, but in the next project which will be slice of life moments of the rest of the Mane six during the events of this story back in Ponyville.
Theme I'm working on in my head is that everyone has certain kinky inclinations, but the vast majority of people, and ponies, never let it become more than the occasional fantasy.
The circumstances of this universe sort of forces some of those kinks out into the open.
For instance no matter how tempting the thought might be, Twilight would never dream of giving Rainbow Dash a good spanking after she does something life threatening, not in the regular pony verse that is.
Same goes for Trixie, where the temptation would be even stronger. ^+^
5831606 maybe the arc is short and sweet? I don't know, i guess from lunas words I assumed that mac would be using dusk shine as the "person to give applejack to"
Hmmm, wondering into Spoiler territory. This arc is designed to really shake up the status quo in Equestria.
There is a resolution to Applejack's situation, but not to the overall situation.
I could just keep on continuing this story for a couple of dozen chapters. But then the title really wouldn't fit.
There will be a one or two chapter story "Meanwhile In Ponyville" that will touch base with the rest of the Mane six. And then from there I'll jump into the next story arc that progresses the overall plot thread.
With the characters having an unrealistic reaction. Meaning they enjoy the physical act even if they hate the male involved.
This is a common reaction in rape cases, involuntary pleasure I mean. This can be more damaging psychologically than the actual act itself, seen by the victim as if their body is betraying them or otherwise not strong enough to fight even their base desires.
Thanks for the comment. Because this is a clop story the girl's reaction to this sort of thing is not going to be realistic.
That was what the warning was about.
But I will admit that I'm likely going to touch a bit on their angst over physically enjoying the treatment, if not to the degree I would it I were going for real world reactions.
The monster that is Celestia, hidden behind the mask is my favorite trope, and you played it perfectly this chapter. It's probably a good thing for The unicorn king that they didn't capture Celestia, probably wouldn't have much of anything in Cardoon left.
Mac derailed that thought the instant he became aware he’d made the comparison. The little doe might not be a lot bigger than Apple Bloom, but that was where the resemblance ended. He was not going to put the sperm-smeared doe and his baby sister in the same mental file. E...nope, not going to happen.
Good to know just because that spell lowers his capacity to be empathetic, doesn't mean he's suddenly turned to into a Fall of Equestria male.
This slut will confess that from time to time she has asked the guard to investigate this pony or that one, without giving details. The results from this has led to the arrest of two serial killers and four foal molesters.”
This. Yes. Also, quotation marks before "this slut".
“As I said, there was no reason given for the fight. But from what I learned in your dreams I think it very likely you caught them in the act of raping or trying to rape, Applejack.” “Trying,” Big Mac said flatly.
I now have no sympathy for Blackjack and co.
“Princess Celestia? She ain’t no monster!” Big Mac protested. “Oh, you have no idea, master. You have not seen her soaked to the withers in blood as she waded through the guts of a dragon that had devoured an entire village. Or seen her bury an invading army in the ground and then compact it so the blood seeps up through the thick clay and draws a cloud of flies that linger for weeks, along with the stench of death.
Yikes. I suppose this is why one does not simply piss off Princess Celestia.
“You are one of the most powerful, if not the most powerful, earth pony stallion alive today master. Just as your sister is one of the two most powerful female earth ponies in Equestria,” Luna answered.
I'm guessing the other is Pinkie Pie. What? she's more unpredictable than Discord! At least with him you know to expect shenanigans, with Pinkie, you have no clue WHAT to expect.
Luna chuckled, “You have a lot to learn, master. Though it is true, my preferences tend to be a bit more extreme than other mares. But then, I am more durable and heal quicker.”
I suppose it pays to be an immortal alicorn.
To his amazement, “Big Mac found himself actually blushing at her compliment. “It wasn’t me. It was the spell you cast on me.” He reached up and brushed his finger along the feather in his hat. Luna nodded, her expression turning serious. “You are right, master. I did work a spell, but not the one you think. In fact, I cast two. The first, the one you felt was a spell to refresh you. All it did was wash away the weariness of a long day, made worse by your frantic worry over your sister’s situation. I did not remove your empathy or ability feel compassion. How can you think I had when you are able to hold Bother as you are doing?”
You know at the beginning I was skeptic about this story just being like another Fall of Equestria, and trust me I hate Fall of Equestria. But while there are similarities, I find it way better than Fall of Equestria. Mainly because I can see an happy ending to this story.
My choice for the future of this story is between choice number 1, or choice number 3. But I would go with choice number 1 in this story if I were you.
5783968 I agree with you friend I could not have put this in better word (Which now I wished I did) as stated bellow.
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Thank you. There most certainly are lots of happy endings in the future.
I see no reason why the characters can't indulge in kinky stuff and still have genuine affection and love for each other.
And thank you for making a vote in regards to Mac and Applejack. I have so many contradictory plot concepts in regard to them running through my head that I really need to decide how I'm going to handle them.
Also, I'm tempted to leave it hanging and unresolved as author bait to get other writers intrigued in working with them. ^_^
Luckily I'll get a break from them once this story arc wraps up and I move on to exploring the various latent fetishes that the rest of the Mane Six have as I do up a day in the life story that takes place during Applejack's situation.
"Meanwhile in Ponyville" Working title.
5818976 I vote for choice number 1
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Noted and recorded. That's two for option one so far.
I'd really like choice number 3 but I'm okay with all of the options
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Well, the universe is meant to be shared, so if another author wanted to do up a story featuring the third option I'd have no problem with that. Though it might go in the Non-canon folder.
I have so much material to cover featuring the other characters that once this story arc is done up I won't be spending too much time on the apples for a little while
Honestly this is turning out better and better.
Keep up the good work. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Not sure if this is going to follow the idea thread or not but here's to hoping to see some dashlight and duskshine.
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Not in this story arc, but in the next project which will be slice of life moments of the rest of the Mane six during the events of this story back in Ponyville.
Theme I'm working on in my head is that everyone has certain kinky inclinations, but the vast majority of people, and ponies, never let it become more than the occasional fantasy.
The circumstances of this universe sort of forces some of those kinks out into the open.
For instance no matter how tempting the thought might be, Twilight would never dream of giving Rainbow Dash a good spanking after she does something life threatening, not in the regular pony verse that is.
Same goes for Trixie, where the temptation would be even stronger. ^+^
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Thank you.
Next chapter is a bit of a world builder and gives the reader a look a the Caridoon Celestia and Luna don't know exists.
Then, finally, we get to chapter five and get to see Applejack in peril.
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maybe the arc is short and sweet? I don't know, i guess from lunas words I assumed that mac would be using dusk shine as the "person to give applejack to"
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Hmmm, wondering into Spoiler territory. This arc is designed to really shake up the status quo in Equestria.
There is a resolution to Applejack's situation, but not to the overall situation.
I could just keep on continuing this story for a couple of dozen chapters. But then the title really wouldn't fit.
There will be a one or two chapter story "Meanwhile In Ponyville" that will touch base with the rest of the Mane six. And then from there I'll jump into the next story arc that progresses the overall plot thread.
This is a common reaction in rape cases, involuntary pleasure I mean.
This can be more damaging psychologically than the actual act itself, seen by the victim as if their body is betraying them or otherwise not strong enough to fight even their base desires.
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Thanks for the comment. Because this is a clop story the girl's reaction to this sort of thing is not going to be realistic.
That was what the warning was about.
But I will admit that I'm likely going to touch a bit on their angst over physically enjoying the treatment, if not to the degree I would it I were going for real world reactions.
The monster that is Celestia, hidden behind the mask is my favorite trope, and you played it perfectly this chapter. It's probably a good thing for The unicorn king that they didn't capture Celestia, probably wouldn't have much of anything in Cardoon left.
Good to know just because that spell lowers his capacity to be empathetic, doesn't mean he's suddenly turned to into a Fall of Equestria male.
This. Yes. Also, quotation marks before "this slut".
I now have no sympathy for Blackjack and co.
Yikes. I suppose this is why one does not simply piss off Princess Celestia.
I'm guessing the other is Pinkie Pie. What? she's more unpredictable than Discord! At least with him you know to expect shenanigans, with Pinkie, you have no clue WHAT to expect.
I suppose it pays to be an immortal alicorn.
... Well played Luna. Well played.