Oh yeah, this just wreaks of 3edgy5me.

5edgy6me. 3edgy5me doesn't suffice here.

Fix grammar pls

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There's more to be added to this chapter, though I thought maybe people would have got that considering that I do the same thing with unfinished chapters in Darkness' Light.

Please update really awesome

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I know you said that your OC was an asshole, but did you have to make him be a total dickbag to the Mane Six and the Royal Alicorn Sisters?

Other than the grammar, that's pretty much all that I have a problem with.

"First I want you to give a full body massage because unless you couldn't tell I'm hurting bad right now, and after you're done with that I want you to suck my dick."

HAHAAHAHAHAHA Oh I am going to love this story

Is it wrong that I want to punch your character in the face?

Your plot is good (did that come out wrong?) But your dialogue needs a lot work.

"You really think you're of any match for me you son of a bitch!"

I mean, you're not wrong

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Why do I see you everywhere!?

This "Demon" nickname thing is so fucking stupid.

Few chapters in and liking story thus far. A bit of excessive cussing in my opinion but other than that nitpick im enjoying it.