Vinyl Scratch is the background character we all know and love, but where is her backstory? When the doors close, who is Vinyl Scratch? Well before we can dive into Vinyl, we must first meet those who shaped her. This includes characters such as Lyra Heartstrings, Derpy Hooves and Vinyl's young mother, Hazel. When a catastrophe occurs in the town of Ponyville, Vinyl's life is turned upside down. Now it is up to Hazel to protect her daughter from the dangerous of the outside world and search for their past within the rubble.
Chapters (2)
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Thank you so much for the feedback, as I have previously established, this is my first time writing for an audience. I am literally just trying to overcome my shyness and believe it or not but most errors you have pointed out is all for a cause. However the Q was a mistake which will be dealt with. The detail is over lengthened because this is how Hazel sees everyponies reactions to the catastrophe that had occurred the previous night, a catastrophe which I will release later in the story. I am purposely holding back information about Hazel and Vinyl's previous night as much as i can because the event will be released during a climax point in the story. Now, about the dialogue, Yes the dialogue is boring and really drawn out within the edge of its life and that i've unfortunately taken it too far but my reason being is because Hazel is this boring dull pony, similar to a mixture between Mrs Cake and Maud Pie, with character development being released in later chapters she will liven up whilst herself and Vinyl are challenged. The length however is something that i have no excuse for however
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Well i certainly appreciate the offer and i would love it if you reviewed my redraft of chapter two for me once posted which will be up in the next twenty or so minutes,
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Is chapter two any better?
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I most definitely changed it up a lot