Hilarious chapter... the casualness of Pinkie and Twilight talking about "pimping" out Sunset had me snickering.
Looking forward to whenever you get around to Applejack's turn... then Sunset will see how 'honest' the farm gal is about recording her being nailed by Big Mac.
She had opted to don the outfit she'd customarily worn so long ago, before the Battle of the Bands, before the first time she'd ponied up with her friends. It had been a long time since she'd last worn the orange pleather skirt, the magenta top, the biker jacket, and the purple-and-black flame motif boots.
this makes it sound like she had been a stripper befor.
"I'm not pimping you out, silly! I'm offering you a job stripping at a friend's bachelor party! Totally different thing!" Pinkie grinned. "If I were pimping you out, I wouldn't go less than five."
"Five? Really?" Twilight said. "I think eight would be the minimum."
"I can't believe we're having this conversation," Sunset groaned.
Friends help you save up to buy a new bike part. BEST friends whore you out to their family for five to eight hundred dollars a pop to get you the money.
"You've got the right body for it, you're not skanky, you're pretty close to the type of girl Shiny always used to drool over before he hooked up with Cadance..." Twilight gestured vaguely with one hand. "It's not like it'd be the worst thing you've ever done."
OK, that's funny.
"I can't believe we're having this conversation," Sunset groaned.
I can. And it's hilarious.
"Uhh..." Shining Armor started to look panicked. "Sunset, this..."
Shining, this is a once in a lifetime opportunity. Shut up and enjoy it.
"Did my brother behave himself?" Twilight asked. Sunset turned and smirked at her. "You might want to burn your sheets." "GAH!"
I'm struggling to figure out why the social commentary warning...
Strippers exist. People enjoy watching them. Nothing illegal or amoral going on here, and it's not like you had Shining Armor do anything to her without consent...
6850144 The social commentary warning is because I've seen too many flamewars break out in the comments section of my porn stories over stupid shit because of people taking porn too seriously. (It's actually the AV Club President chapter and an unrelated incident from some time back that led to the social commentary warning, and this isn't the only story that has it.)
I loved that flat "What." Sunset says to Pinkie and then repeats to Twilight. It's a beautiful repetition. Twi and Pinkie discussing the going rate for Sunset Shimmer is priceless.
you need a girl who's all leather and sass and swinging her hips and...
hot. and accurate (which is also hot)
"Sunset, you're way sexier than all those professional strippers!" - Pinkie would know that "It's not like it'd be the worst thing you've ever done." Twilight is so supportive.
I love your details. They're vivid and appeal to the senses and actually add to the story's relatability/realism rather than take up space as fancy sayin'-words. Taking a swig of vodka is brilliant; I appreciated the lack of something trite like 'to take the edge off' or 'for confidence'.
I was rather relieved that Shining Armor didn't actually have (penetrative) sex with her... but only because I don't think Cadance would like it - I don't believe bachelor parties are free-reign for extra-relational relations if that's not how the relationship works. Poor Shiny though, at least he wasn't there being laughed at.
"get yourself cleaned up" is brilliant 'cause that's what you'd say to a whore, and Sunset just kind of turned it around I approve your music choice too. While Pour Some Sugar On Me is a stripper's anthem (it's been done to death) and along with Cherry Pie and Girls Girls Girls are all three fine songs in their own right, but don't have the low bass or heady thrum of a sexy-feeling song.
Hey i have been going back and forth between reading this and playing skyrim and i have to say i like this clopfic and please tell me that you are working on the next chapter
(Like, I'm not complaining about the content or anything, but she actually made him drink more intentionally before dragging him off. I think she committed the crime here!)
9155688 I think it could potentially be saved, with a few changes... maybe. Giving Sunset an out might help, but then I guess there is the problem that even with a safe word, she might still feel pressured to keep going as they hold a position of power over her. Yeah, it's kind of a hard one.
Okay, that bit at the end with Twilight's room was hilarious!
Hilarious chapter... the casualness of Pinkie and Twilight talking about "pimping" out Sunset had me snickering.
Looking forward to whenever you get around to Applejack's turn... then Sunset will see how 'honest' the farm gal is about recording her being nailed by Big Mac.
And now we play the waiting game for more awesomeness...
Came for the sex, got silliness instead.
All in all, a decent chapter.
Now we know why her last name's Shimmer.
this makes it sound like she had been a stripper befor.
The confidence Sunset had while stripping gave me all kind of ideas on how exactly she got an income in the human world
The whole time Sunset was stripping, I kept thinking of the official stripper's anthem
6493572 Yeah I like my song choice better.
But then, that's because it's Santanico Pandemoneum's theme, and Santanico Pandemoneum is just that awesome.
This and "Stop pimping me out!"
Were probably the funniest things I've ever read. Good job mate.
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I know right? It's either Def Leppard or Warrant:
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you forgot Motley Crue, dude.
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How could I forget the Crue?
6494156 I know right! There needs to be a pimpy pie story or at least more like this one
6497548 I want to write one so bad
Friends help you save up to buy a new bike part. BEST friends whore you out to their family for five to eight hundred dollars a pop to get you the money.
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Ah what a glorious stripping show! Far too much fun, glad to see the update!
OK, that's funny.
I can. And it's hilarious.
Shining, this is a once in a lifetime opportunity. Shut up and enjoy it.
OK, that's funny.
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And just like that, you win the Internet.
Here I thought the sex scene would be this long, drawn out affair with Shining being such a great lay. Then he blows after about fifteen seconds.
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You are excellent at making these sexy stories funny. Good on you bro.
6701286 You know, you COULD think of it as a mental roleplay exercise.
I'm struggling to figure out why the social commentary warning...
Strippers exist. People enjoy watching them. Nothing illegal or amoral going on here, and it's not like you had Shining Armor do anything to her without consent...
6850144 The social commentary warning is because I've seen too many flamewars break out in the comments section of my porn stories over stupid shit because of people taking porn too seriously. (It's actually the AV Club President chapter and an unrelated incident from some time back that led to the social commentary warning, and this isn't the only story that has it.)
I loved that flat "What." Sunset says to Pinkie and then repeats to Twilight. It's a beautiful repetition.
Twi and Pinkie discussing the going rate for Sunset Shimmer is priceless.
hot. and accurate (which is also hot)
"Sunset, you're way sexier than all those professional strippers!" - Pinkie would know that
"It's not like it'd be the worst thing you've ever done." Twilight is so supportive.
I love your details. They're vivid and appeal to the senses and actually add to the story's relatability/realism rather than take up space as fancy sayin'-words. Taking a swig of vodka is brilliant; I appreciated the lack of something trite like 'to take the edge off' or 'for confidence'.
I was rather relieved that Shining Armor didn't actually have (penetrative) sex with her... but only because I don't think Cadance would like it - I don't believe bachelor parties are free-reign for extra-relational relations if that's not how the relationship works.
Poor Shiny though, at least he wasn't there being laughed at.
"get yourself cleaned up" is brilliant 'cause that's what you'd say to a whore, and Sunset just kind of turned it around
I approve your music choice too. While Pour Some Sugar On Me is a stripper's anthem (it's been done to death) and along with Cherry Pie and Girls Girls Girls are all three fine songs in their own right, but don't have the low bass or heady thrum of a sexy-feeling song.
6906849 One of the best commentaries I've ever received on this story, and I do love some in-depth commentary. Thanks!
6906908 I just want you to enjoy me half as much as I enjoy you.
7208907 Neither am I, that's why this one really sucked. But I wanted to at least TRY writing it just once, as an experiment.
Hey i have been going back and forth between reading this and playing skyrim and i have to say i like this clopfic and please tell me that you are working on the next chapter
Probably my favorite chapter yet!
Keep it up my friend!
Okay, This popped into my head when I read this line
False advertising.
This was "Sunset Shimmer Does Shining Armor!"
(Like, I'm not complaining about the content or anything, but she actually made him drink more intentionally before dragging him off. I think she committed the crime here!)
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I think it could potentially be saved, with a few changes... maybe. Giving Sunset an out might help, but then I guess there is the problem that even with a safe word, she might still feel pressured to keep going as they hold a position of power over her. Yeah, it's kind of a hard one.
Still quite the villainess i see. xDDD
Most excellent.