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Fluttershy's Curse

It's a cold dark night in Equestria. In the dark, one lone house is still lit up: Fluttershy's house. She hums to herself as she washes the dishes, when suddenly somepony or something pounds on her door. Terrified, Fluttershy backs away, but eventually opens the door, unaware of the horror she's just brought upon herself.

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Compass The Pegasus

Compass The Pegasus #1 · Nov 10th, 2014 · · ·

First: Separate your paragraphs. It makes it so much easier to read.
Second: Get rid of that colored text. Never do colored text.

Prophetic Brony

Prophetic Brony #2 · Nov 11th, 2014 · · ·

Hmm.... hm. Okay, not a bad 'horror' idea. The opening is a little rushed but it does allow the reader to get to the 'hook' right away. A few spelling errors, no explanation to Spike's location or lack of stirring (not critical but it is night time and he should be home asleep by now, right?), a little disjointed when Fluttershy sits down before the 'monster' appears but overall it has potential for a nifty little mindbreak story with Fluttershy going all Shed.mov under whatever the shadow's influence. I'm not sure if Fluttershy would've gone right to violence and tried to stab the shadow monster with glass, I figure she would just cower and hide from it but she is terrified beyond her normal so maybe she went into cornered animal mode? Not sure but it kind of flies.