• Published 24th Oct 2014
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Vinyl and Octavia's Afternoon - forgotten5p1rit



When Vinyl comes home from from a very tired afternoon, Octavia offers to help Vinyl relax...in a very pleasurable way. [FUTA, MATURE]

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Comments ( 11 )

Had a few spelling/grammar mistakes but by Celestia that was hot! :trollestia:

I like seeing ponies in love being rough with each other like this. That and unrealistic amounts of cum, that definitely helped.

I think you tried a bit too hard on this one, you crammed as much sex as possible in, and forgot about the plot. Remember,when writing fanfic, story comes first, characters cum second.

I bet their water bill was high that month! xD

a host of grammar mistakes but nothing too serious to break the story, some pacing issues were more difficult to get around, but a hot story nonetheless

You had me at the word Vinyl, the futa was also a nice touch.

5197995 OH HEY fancy meeting you here. XP

5206774 :rainbowhuh:...
Are you following me? Because I get the sensation you're following me.

5207551 Not at all! That's why I commented on spotting you here. :rainbowlaugh:

5207816 That's what a creepy stalker person would say!

5208897 And you think a non-stalker would say otherwise? :P

5210860 ... point taken. Now let's stop talking about this, the author's probably sick of getting notifications in his box only to find out it's us two jokers.

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