You are a precocious colt spending the summer with Spitfire, your mom's boss. You've already got a slight crush on her, but now with the entire summer ahead of the both of you, you feel like anything could happen.
I'm sad to see this coming to an end, but at the same time i'm elated. Finally gonna see how my all-time favorite Second Person fanfic (Number 3 in my All-Time list) ends.
I... I thought I would never see the end of this. I'm in tears, it's so beautiful.
I started reading this early on as a lark, just some pulp story with some spice, but then... then you delivered me into a lovely romance story that lives up to the tag. Too often, the romance tag is just a way to identify clop on here, but this has been something special. I mean that. It's a coming of age that's not just the run of the mill, and while it was mature, it was not just mature for the sake of getting the reader aroused.
This story. This story deserves the highest praise.
I see it's still "incomplete"...
Take us out, captain! I'll be awaiting the conclusion.
Damn you. This story was just so good. I was just dicking around the site looking for some good stories. I decided to give this one a chance.......and here I am, five hours later. It's literaly five thirty in the morning for me cause I couldn't stop myself from reading the next chapter. I'll be honest, I was kinda expecting Spitfire to tease him for a bit longer, but how the story played out from there was fantastic. It's not very often that a story is as 'real' as this one. It actually had the concept that actions can have consequences. I can't wait to see the next chapter coming up.
I was reading this story since the very first chapter was posted, and I have to say, this is NOT where I saw it going, I don't mean that in a bad way, I loved it! It turned out so emotional, and I was just in awe with this chapter, and I really have to thank you for bringing me to my own realization. This chapter helped me realize that I can't wait to be a father someday! Thank you Togashi for taking me for the best ride ever, and helping my head so much.
I read the description when I found this story and thought, "well this could be interesting", reading the first chapter sparked more curiosity about the second, then the third, etc. Kinda like the way I got into MLP. But yes, a very well written story, it was interesting, it was funny, I loved it. I thank thee for sharing something so amazing with us all.
A grand part to the finishing chapter of this story, and I can't wait for the final instalment. I have had a splendid time reading this amazing tale, and will definitely add it to my personal library in my home after getting it professionally printed and bound. I could also send a copy to the author just because of how pleased I am with how this turned out.
Just thought I'd point out an inconsistency: the part where spitfire didn't say who the victim of McDouch's initiations was doesn't make sense cause they would have known anyway cause they had questioned the kid directly after the incident didn't they?
6230757 You're right, I read that part over again, and it makes it sound like the guards questioned both of them. I originally thought it read they only questioned Spitfire.
6426685 Yes, I have part of it written now, I just find it hard to find time to write during the summer. I expect to have time to finish it in the next week or so.
Say I know your busy with other stories but do you think you add a scene or a follow up short where Spitfire's mom appears and finds out the circumstances regarding her grandchild, especially since she made a an canon appearance in the series during "Rarity Investigates". Stormy Flare I think her name was. I just think lt would find it an interesting situation. Especially if the trial happens. Spitfire was shown to have a lot care for her. How do you think Stormy Flare would react to meeting the "father"? Just curious. Still a great story regardless.
im in love with this story. i truly am. this has got to be one of the best romance stories on the website in my opinion. i cant wait to read part 2, and hopefully you gain the motivation for a sequel, maybe when Rookie is in his 20s or maybe as Sunny. no matter what happens, this story is the best damn thing i've read in a long ass time. i know ill always support your works to the end.
PS: i see what you did there in that picture. omfg XD im dead
Well, that was a fun read. Shame that the second part of the epilogue may never be written. Nevertheless, this story gets the rare and highly sought after spike mustache. Bravo! Definitely one of the most unique stories I've ever read. I'll be watching for updates just in case!
Awww, an epilogue? But the story was just getting good...
I'm sad to see this coming to an end, but at the same time i'm elated. Finally gonna see how my all-time favorite Second Person fanfic (Number 3 in my All-Time list) ends.
Will there be a sequel ?
To bad this story is winding down. I'm assuming that there will be a sequel at some point.
Kewl
It's too bad this is near the end, it'd make for a great climax in the story.
It finally updated!
pic in the AN failed.
Amazing story. I hope we get to see there wedding.
I... I thought I would never see the end of this. I'm in tears, it's so beautiful.
I started reading this early on as a lark, just some pulp story with some spice, but then... then you delivered me into a lovely romance story that lives up to the tag. Too often, the romance tag is just a way to identify clop on here, but this has been something special. I mean that. It's a coming of age that's not just the run of the mill, and while it was mature, it was not just mature for the sake of getting the reader aroused.
This story. This story deserves the highest praise.
I see it's still "incomplete"...
Take us out, captain! I'll be awaiting the conclusion.
Damn you. This story was just so good. I was just dicking around the site looking for some good stories. I decided to give this one a chance.......and here I am, five hours later. It's literaly five thirty in the morning for me cause I couldn't stop myself from reading the next chapter. I'll be honest, I was kinda expecting Spitfire to tease him for a bit longer, but how the story played out from there was fantastic. It's not very often that a story is as 'real' as this one. It actually had the concept that actions can have consequences. I can't wait to see the next chapter coming up.
You’d be tossed of the Academy and I’d probably be in jail.
tossed out of
Soarin’ in a good friend,
is
I loved this story and after reading this latest chapter I think I'll be reading it again soon
SEQUEL SEQUEL SEQUEL!!!
been a while, I am looking forwards to the next chapter! XD
6225694 He's not done just yet.
I like the tone set in the epilogue, very fitting.
FINALLY!
6226684 This is exactly what I was inferring when I wrote that. Where I live, it's not uncommon for parents to allow their underage kids to drink.
BEAUTIFUL!
I was reading this story since the very first chapter was posted, and I have to say, this is NOT where I saw it going, I don't mean that in a bad way, I loved it! It turned out so emotional, and I was just in awe with this chapter, and I really have to thank you for bringing me to my own realization. This chapter helped me realize that I can't wait to be a father someday! Thank you Togashi for taking me for the best ride ever, and helping my head so much.
*clapping* Good show, jolly good show.
I read the description when I found this story and thought, "well this could be interesting", reading the first chapter sparked more curiosity about the second, then the third, etc. Kinda like the way I got into MLP. But yes, a very well written story, it was interesting, it was funny, I loved it. I thank thee for sharing something so amazing with us all.
A grand part to the finishing chapter of this story, and I can't wait for the final instalment. I have had a splendid time reading this amazing tale, and will definitely add it to my personal library in my home after getting it professionally printed and bound. I could also send a copy to the author just because of how pleased I am with how this turned out.
Good show old chap! Wish you would do a follow up story.
Just thought I'd point out an inconsistency: the part where spitfire didn't say who the victim of McDouch's initiations was doesn't make sense cause they would have known anyway cause they had questioned the kid directly after the incident didn't they?
6230757 You're right, I read that part over again, and it makes it sound like the guards questioned both of them. I originally thought it read they only questioned Spitfire.
I'll make a slight edit.
6230835 coolio, thanks
and now...we wait once more!
6058129
You just got burned
No offense
Ok... I never received any notification that this had updated. I just happened to discover that while doing a search for something to read.
Epilogue part 2 soon?
6426685 Yes, I have part of it written now, I just find it hard to find time to write during the summer. I expect to have time to finish it in the next week or so.
16?? He was 13! What happened there? It was only one summer lol. At least a year and a half missing.
6503956 time skips, dude
6503956 he was 13, and turned 14 in the story, the story jumped a year and a half meaning that he is almost 16.
Can't wait for the next chapter and great job mate. Have a happy whatever it is that you celebrate.
Say I know your busy with other stories but do you think you add a scene or a follow up short where Spitfire's mom appears and finds out the circumstances regarding her grandchild, especially since she made a an canon appearance in the series during "Rarity Investigates". Stormy Flare I think her name was. I just think lt would find it an interesting situation. Especially if the trial happens. Spitfire was shown to have a lot care for her. How do you think Stormy Flare would react to meeting the "father"? Just curious. Still a great story regardless.
im in love with this story. i truly am. this has got to be one of the best romance stories on the website in my opinion. i cant wait to read part 2, and hopefully you gain the motivation for a sequel, maybe when Rookie is in his 20s or maybe as Sunny. no matter what happens, this story is the best damn thing i've read in a long ass time. i know ill always support your works to the end.
PS: i see what you did there in that picture. omfg XD im dead
whyyyy did this die so late
6230835
So good.
Commence read.
Seem to be finding stories with parts I haven't read.
Glad to hear that their child didn't have any problems.
Now to await the second part...maybe?
7185322 lol I wonder if anybody realized my comment was a reference to Markiplier? (Video: MEOW)
And it's gone. The story is over now.
Looks at the post date...
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~Crystalline Electrostatic~
2:59_5/8/2016
7196904 SCREAMING
Oh yeah, definitely. Is OP there?
Well, that was a fun read. Shame that the second part of the epilogue may never be written. Nevertheless, this story gets the rare and highly sought after spike mustache. Bravo!
Definitely one of the most unique stories I've ever read. I'll be watching for updates just in case!
Please dont say this is dead!?!??!?!?! I DONT WANT THE DEATH!!!
3 months away to being 2 years in the making. Its a good story and I wonder how it will finish.
WHERE IS PART 2 OF THE EPILOUGE!?!?!?!?