Okay. I didn't think I'd like it, but now...AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Nice. A little quick-paced, but still nice.

Seems like an awesome story, can't wait to read more. I think you should add an Anthro tag though.

4934294 It isn't antro, his sexual organ wouldn't have reached her breast, since the fandom seems to place them lower, near their marehood. Also pony picture.

4934308
Why is she wearing panties and using pads? Most ponies don't need those sorts of things.

4934329
Cause she's a classy mare.

4934336
I don't think that has anything to do with being classy

4934329 Some like feeling comfy, others use it for fetishes, and some are snotty mares. Rarity makes dresses, remember? It wouldn't be too far fetched to say some ponies wear underwear to bed.

4934377
Yeah but dresses are worn to make you look ravishing at a party etc. I just don't think they wear it for the heck of it.

4934369
One day you will see an amazing lady wear her finest pair of sexy panties to bed, not for you, not for anyone, not for any other reason than to feel like a woman. Then you will know.

Not bad, pretty good writing, nice pacing. But one thing, Apple to Apples doesn't have to be a "foals"/kids games, trust me, if your drunk Apples to Apples can be very...."mature". It's all in the humour or thought process behind the relation in the words. And yes I'm aware of the oddity of critiquing that one part. But I loath making a simple, booooring~ statement.

Huh, I didn't think I'd like this but I did. I get the feeling she is teasing him. Though, if i was in his position I would ask her to be my coach for the summer and by the time the summer was over he would at least have skills and a physique to turn some girls' heads.

4935177
The teasing has only begun.

I thought this would be good. I was right. I am looking forward to more chapters.

That is all, have a like and a favorite.

4934393 i some times put on my best suit just to look at myself in the mirror.........but thats just me

I hope you don't make us wait too long for the next chapter...

I am intrigued, but damn... How old is Spitfire in this story? A 13 year old colt. She must be in her 30's.

This story.... it hurts me inside....

4936430
I always pictured her in her 30's at least. She's a Captain so she's most likely a senior member of the Wonderbolts, also demonstrated by her position as the head instructor at the flight academy.
For the purpose of this story Spitfire is in her mid 30's.

MOAR!!

4936828 Is it alright if I imagine Spitfire to be in her early 20s?

This should be interesting. Though I do wonder since this is a 13 year old colt here, it makes me wonder how old Spitfire is. She can't still be in her teens. Maybe very early 20s?

This is really good. Can't wait to see what happened next.

4937025 Was noted at mid 30's. 20's is just to young for a position shes in.

4937091 when one person looks through the clop fics a musty smell forms in the air?

Magic?

old beaten up leather chairs

You tryin to tell me that ponies sit on animal skin chairs? In the land of everything is intelligent?

4937151 No... that's just hormones in the air.

Great opener to what I'm sure will be a great story. Have a like and a fave, and I eagerly await the next chapter.

Could have sworn I saw something just like this on Mulp...

4937189 trolllololo

Her soft coat rubs against your as she speaks softly to you.

error

4937589
Got it, thanks.

You have a great story brewing.
I'm a little confused at times, getting the feeling that sometimes anthro is sneaking in, or, maybe I'm just reading too much into the story?
Keep up the good work.
I eagerly await the next chapter

4937714 hell yah

She picks up your sticks, and places them on either side of her yellow hoof. Carefully she pincers them together, picking up a napkin.

"brain.exe" has performed an illegal action and must be shut down.

4938476 lol exactly. If I was in his poisison I wouldn't think like that. I don't read a story like this to get aroused. I just think of them as hummerfull if I was him I would be thinking that she was to old.

Oh, Spitfire, you fiery temptress.

Troll level- Spitfire.

She picks up your sticks, and places them on either side of her yellow hoof. Carefully she pincers them together, picking up a napkin.

But... hooves! She can't, I mean, it's just not possible for her to...

i.imgur.com/6QpFmdO.jpg

Also:

"Ever have Chinese before, kid?"

How dare you not come up with a horribly contrived horse pun!

Other than that, this seems like fun! Great job!

I find this very enjoyable.
And when I say I'm reading this mostly for the plot, I do mean the story.
You have me very engrossed in the story.
The sex stuff is just a plus.

Another!
twilight.ponychan.net/chan/files/src/134370364287.gif

For most of my life I thought I was a pervert, but this story proved to me what being a pervert really is.
And for that, I thank you.

4945566 What? You mean "Ever had lasagne before, kid?"

Good so far, and for not making a horrible horse-pun about Chinese food, you lose a point. Kidding.

4934846 I understand the panties, but why pads? Horses don't get periods do they? Or is that to cover up the scent during heat and to stop liquid from dripping under her?

Crap. You're already getting hard again. 'This is a terrible idea.' Your mind is screaming. Your dick respectfully disagrees. At thirteen, you already knows which one wins.

Ain't that the truth...

4960060
Pleased to meet you. I am the Arbiter, Thel 'Vadam.

Spitfire is just teasing the young lad. Give him a break! You're going to give him blue balls by the end of the summer!

5005530 With what he did with her panties, I don't think blue balls is gonna be a problem.

Ever have Chinese before, kid?

Well, let me recall the food back when I was in Beijing. The food was terrible! I personally prefer Hokkianesse cooking myself.
And about chopstick, I have a crazy thing going on about it. You see, I'm not a lefty(says the boy who does everything except writing and shaking hands with left hand(and wearing a watch)) but I always hold a spoon, chopsticks, knife, etc with my left hand

"Well I guess that was a silly question, asking a teenage colt if he can cook. Don't be embarrassed. The only thing I can cook is toast. Looks like we're stopping somewhere for dinner."

Am I the only one who thought of this?