Fredrick falls into Equestria and he is allowed to stay in the castle for his troubles. There, he meets and quickly befriends Princess Luna, and their quickly evolving relationship allows them to explore the 'benefits' of being close, best friends.
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First on the chapter!... And fucking wizard.
...You know, in both of these pranks, did anyone consider fatal results, like a heartache or a panic-induced emotional breakdown? Seriously, this second prank would've had my heart beating louder than a percussion section of an orchestra.
Well, Frederick could pull it off if he got help from Pinkie Pie and Discord. I am sure Pinkie Pie would be bought at the words Prank and Discord at the thought of Pranking Celestia and Luna,
6834173 Other than extreme fear, I don't think that would've been a factor. Fredrick doesn't have a heart condition (would've said so if he did), and they weren't waterboarding him or anything physical. Admittedly, they still went overboard.
6834180 You don't have to have a heart condition to have a heart attack. It definitely makes it much more possible, but anyone can have one if they get put under too much stress very quickly or for too long.
6834197 Of course, though it's probably not that common and it's dependent on the person. Still, it's good food for thought. If it got to the point where it was REALLY bad, they would've definitely stopped though. Again, this also did not last very long, and was not going to anyway.
That punch tho.
Brilliant chapter!
6834203 Yeah, but my question is how would they know it's too far and Frederick is actually being affected long-term? When he seems to stop reacting, clutches his chest in pain, and keels over? And emotionally? I mean, using 'mind control,' 'kidnapping,' 'murder,' 'assault,' and crying didn't seem to be enough to be considered too far for the trio-now-quad of terror. So where is the line drawn, really?
As far as pranks go, this one was, in my opinion, way too far. Still good chapter though. Some people will always go too far with their pranks. First time I met my now ex-girlfriends family, her brother pointed a sub-machine gun at me and asked me what my intentions with his little sister was. It was an airsoft gun, but when staring down a barrel you won't ask yourself if it's real or not.
6834249 Fair point. I'd say the line was drawn there because anything else would be just even more horrifying.
As for how, as much as I don't like to do it, I'm gonna have to exercise executive author authority and say 'it won't.' Never really considered the possibility of fatal actions so I'll fully admit that.
6834253 thats when you say "same as your intentions were when you were dating, sir"
Jesus Christ tho. That was probably fun to talk about during the date.
Oh, can I say that I love your username?
6834260 Nothing wrong with it. Actually, I love the prank and the idea of it, but it seems like Luna and Celestia were especially careless for a prank of this magnitude on a mortal. The Celestia prank was intense, but it was on Celestia, an Immortal/Goddess with plenty of experience with pranks that intense, but Fredrick? Not so much.
Still, if all possibilities were covered in stories, The Bible would be much more interesting.
Now gimme the last chapter!
Think we can get a picture of the scene? Both the punch and Stella's entrance?
6834264 He was pretty nice when I got to know him. Went with him a few times to airsoft battles. He and his friends used a beat up old car as a tank and had made crude RPG's which they loaded with left over fireworks from new years celebration as ammo.
Ever had a rocket fly overhead and explode just behind you? It's loud.
*Canterlot noble haughty pony noise* You may. Thank you
It's Just a PRANK Bro! It's just a prank.
The human will need to go into therapy due to this event, he'll have night scares now even though he knows presently it was a prank.
Because such a thing will leave subtle or more obvious changes that others will see in fred, flinching at a certain voice, shadows, being alone at night, checking corridors to ensure no guards are down and/or missing from posts. At worse she may have driven him to enjoy working in daylight more, not be so open during nightly meetings or events due to the psychological altering event that took place, as he stated before he'll have PSTD most definitely from now on. He's dating the same mare who COULD become a nightmare again, there are no certainties that it couldn't because of one simple fact. Life is unpredictable, no matter if you live in the most stable country or home somehow, some way, Murphy's Law will come busting down the door with a fire axe in hand.
Also as a side note, since Luna's dating she's likely seen as more approachable now by the masses, even those who are not ponies will likely come to see her first because she could be seen as more open minded. Though there can be issues, any mare or stallion out to get the royal booty of any will have a grudge perhaps towards Fred for being able to do it. Shining Armor likely faces the same issues too if their wedding hasn't happened yet.
A note: If you are trying to prank someone with a nightmare scenario (if you'll pardon the pun), don't use fucking memes in you evidence.
Fred calms down way too quickly for this to be believable. That's what? 30 seconds? People don't get over seemingly seeing someone they care for being murdered in that time.
That's the kind of shit that sends people to therapy. And at a minimum you'd expect him to tell them all to fuck off and not speak to them for days for such a ridiculously mean prank.
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Fucking hell XD
6834363 Hmmm... yeah perhaps he does just a bit. On the calming down part, I agree. The whole scene seemed hilarious that I forgot to account fully for rippling effects. Mea Culpa.
Goddammit.
I made a few little changes though. Expect this to be brought up next time around.
Someone should write a fic where the sisters prank a human--but the human doesn't just laugh it off; he treats it as a real scenario and actually ends up hurting or even killing somepony, or being hurt himself, like a heart attack...
"I will even bring another human to serve as your assistant.
AND HIS NAME IS JOHN CENAAAAA!"
du, du du, duuu~~
I think my favorite parts of this one were the descriptions of the outfits. Very detailed.
I'm more than a little curious how luna would've snuck in the john cena meme... Like would she pull out his phone and play the music too? Or would she suddenly shout "JOOOOHN CEEEEENA!" In his ear?
These are questions that must be asked!
Yeah... I hardly believe he is coming out of this without any scratches at all. Seeing the one you love being dead infront of you? Even if it was all a prank, it does not stop the visions that come around occasionally from Luna being dead infront of him. I do hope that you will write in some occasions of him flinching from certain stuff.
6834604 Oh definitely, I wouldn't NOT address that. I just did not want to do it in this chapter for reasons. The way I envisioned it, rather than IMMEDIATE, was having it manifest over time.
Like, he thinks he's in the clear but then it shows up
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Based on similar comments, I made a small addition towards the end of the chapter. I intended to definitely explain the... after-effects and foolishness of thinking something was just over and done (after a prank of this magnitude) next chapter, but it was not entirely clear. Hopefully this will make some form of clarification easier and just a tad more believable.
Thank you all VERY much for your input and making me realize my error.
The prank reminded me of that prank video of were the dude had his best friend killed in front of him, that leaves scars... Deep scars.
6834802 I think that one was actually staged, but I know what you're talking about
6834819 was it? Dude look liked he just witnessed his best friend get shot. So I guess good acting on his part. Still don't make Luna's less fucked tho.
"Ah fuck, I cant believe you've done this".
That line made me lose all focus, i had to reread the entire prank to get back into it.
well placed line good sir. And nice reference
6834835 YES! Alright, I'm glad that someone finally commented on that!
Glad you enjoyed!
6834838 No problem. Though Im surprised im the only one who noticed so far.
6834850 They probably did, but others were more focused on how Fredrick is probably scarred for life
6834854 Its like i said though, laughing from that too much to focus. Its a good story though bro. Ill be sad when its gone, got any other stories in mind or going on hiatus for a while after this?
6834869 Oh this isn't my only project, I have plenty going on as you can see on my page. There's also gonna be a followup on this story, but I'll explain more what that means later. I've told my followers already via blog post but I intend to make a general announcement at the end of the story
I Think it would have been great if Fredrick actully got a case of PTSD after this, and Luna, Celestia and Stella had to help him get over the shock, it would have given some sweet angst to this story, however, that's just my own humble opinion.
Personally i belive he forgave them to easily, sure pretending that they would "off" Celestia was beyond twisted and evil, but pretending that the one person you cheerish the most is dead? That's a whole other ball field.
Truley it would have been interesting if he avoided Luna completly, giving her the silent treatment and starting to sleep in Another room and she was desperatly trying to make him forgive her, willing to do ANYTHING to make it up for him, now that would have added some sweet, delicious drama.
That being said, this was a nice addition to the story, making a chapter where the princess actully go to far, and realise that they need to put a line when it comes to their prank war, and that it should never, ever be crossed.
Now, all depressing matters aside, i do wonder if this will lead to some roleplay activities in their bedroom, Luna taking on the form of Nightmare Moon and giving Fredrick a taste of the dark side of the moon.
6834879 Thats cool. See you in the next chapter
He calmed down way faster than I would have. After the punch and realizing who they were I would have told them all to fuck off and returned to my room, locked the door and just not talk to them until I came down off the near heart attack and despair I would have felt at the time. Good chapter but out right ass hole move by the three of them. I'd probably need some help after that.
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I actually liked this because now we get to see Fred suffering from PTSD and Luna and the others realizing just how much they actually hurt him. I was kind of hoping that, instead of punching Luna he would fall in to a full blown panic attack so just so we could get that "oh shit we've gone too far" reaction from them. Hope the next chapter comes soon.
And please PLEASE do a spin off with Stella, shes an awesome character and that one shot wasn't enough.
6834907 Yeah, I intend to address this in detail even though next chapter is the last... and I think I have just the way to do it!
Also, there's two oneshots of her. Moreover, there already is planned. I've given details in blog posts to followers who get the notifications, and I'll be making a formal, general announcement in the author's note of next chapter.
Shit like that is mentally scarring, no matter what. Frederick will never look at Luna the same.
6835050 Definitely, but I don't think he'll not look at her the same. With some measure of frequency, I predict he'll be jumpy if she suddenly appears, or get REALLY anxious when he can't seem to find her... things like that
That. Was. Fucking. Brilliant.
Seriously, that is the a very clever and evil way to prank someone, and irreparably damage their psyche. Forever. Beyond death, even.
Also, jet fuel & steel beams joke plus John Cena later. That... was another stroke of genius
Also interesting that Luna did not expect Fred to immediately retaliate the moment he was unbound. Afterall, he was furious, felt helpless, so if something at least he would go down fighting.
Some scenes definitely need to be illustrated - the photo of Fred and Stella for instance... And definitely Stella in her new, albeit temporary, uniform
Also Stella is now a target. Funny how she didn't realize it before. Now she'll be so paranoid she might even forget her accent
Also also, next chapter is the last chapter. Sad day
Still can't wait for it though, a lot of awesomness in a long chapter!
And then we get My Best Friend Stella, right?
Stella's outfit and dance were my favorite part, but I agree that the prank was too far. Anyway, hope to see the finale soon. BTW, what did Stella meant by this line "but that did not happen to be Frederick, naturally. At least, not anymore". Still, the chapter was great.
6835313 I don't know, what do you think it meant?
6835323 She used to have a crush on him? BTW, will there be a pic of Stella with that outfit?
6835328 Maaaaaayyybeeeeeeee
And no, but there will be something very similar for the next story though.