“Ooooowwwie...What was that for?” Stan rubbed his head and looked up to see a guard holding a frying pan with a dropped jaw.
The pony started shaking. “H-how are you-”
“PrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrIVATE! You need to hit harder!” Stan and the guard looked straight ahead to see an older pony glaring at them.
The private tightened his grip on the pan. “O-okay captain.” He raised it in the air and hit Stan again.
*CLANG*
“Gah...What’s your problem? I’m just getting a-”
*CLANG*
“Do you really have to hit so ha-”
*CLANG*
“Is...is it bedtime yet?...”
*CLANG*
The captain groaned and snatched the pan out of the privates hooves. “You’re doing all wrong son, it’s like this.” He raised it in the air and plunged it down to the changelings head, making sure to make the creature unconscious.
“Wha?” He was abruptly stopped by something else grabbing onto it, both ponies looked down at the changeling to see that it grabbed the pan while its face was down.
“H-how can he…” the captain couldn’t finish his sentence, the pan he had held onto smacked him in the face and tumbled him back.
“C-captain!” The private watched in horror as the guard fell to the floor with his eyes in a daze.
The captain raised his head and said. “P-permission to go to bed sir?” His head hit the floor again and he passed out.
“C-captain…” The private looked away from his high ranking officer and looked back at the changeling. He nearly fell over once he saw it stand up with it’s head hung low.
“Well look who it is…” The bug slowly raised its head and smiled at the private. “Another trespasser it seems.”
“Trespasser? Me? You’re the one wh-who..who…” The private started backing up once he looked at the changelings eyes, they glowed bright red, and its teeth were snarling right at him. “W-what the…”
“And to think I only had to kill one today…” The changeling chuckled. “How lucky for me.” It took a step forward, and with every one, the pony took a step back.
“Uh...u-uh...S-stop in the...i-in the name of..e-equestrian law?” The private started shaking, he saw changelings before during the invasion, but he didn’t know they could look this...scary.
Stan continued stepping forward. He twirled the bottle in his hooves before shoving it into one of the holes in his hooves. He then glanced over to a door and looked back at the private. “Look’s like I’m gonna have to make do, like the queen always says…” Stan ran over to his right, making the private yelp, and smashed through the closet door. “Don’t stop killin’ when they don’t stop strugglin’”
“Okay changeling….Y-you made your point...so…uh.” The private looked in all directions until his eyes spotted the double doors. “At least I can escape if this get’s out of hoof.
“Who says you’re gonna be escaping?” The private turned around and gasped as the changeling came out with-
“Pretty sharp ey?” Stan twirled the fire ax in his hooves while still holding the wine glass in one of his holes. “Wanna see just how sharp it is?”
The private had enough, so he took a deep breath, raised his hoof in the air, held his head high...and ran away, screaming like a filly.
Stan just chuckled and shook his head as the pony ran. “I love it when they play hard to get.”
The private fell face first into to the door, he backed up in a daze and walked through it. He shook his head and pulled a wheel cart, a chair, a table, more chairs, another cart, a potted plant, and many other things he could find in the dining room to block the door. He stepped back to see if the changeling would make an effort to go through, but after a while, the private reassured himself that the changeling wouldn’t-
*SMASH*
The private looked to his right to see another door with a hole in it, curiosity got the best of him as he waked up to it to see the changeling standing on the other side, its red eyes looked as if they were looking into his soul. “HEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEERE'S STANLEY!” It then kicked the door down, sending the private to the other side of the room. The pony quickly got back on his hooves and looked at the deranged changeling one more time before running.
Stan cackled with laughter and held up his weapon of choice. Prepared to end the poor pony's life.
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“*Yawn* How much longer…”
A guard in white looked up at the window “Six hours.”
The guard in red sighed and leaned on his spear. “Are you sure?”
The other pony to the side of him pointed at the moon. “If the moon is in that position, then I’m pretty sure it’s gonna be that long.”
“But it feels like its been there forever.” The red guard whined.
The white one rolled his eyes. “Just let Luna do her job, besides, it’s not like she wouldn’t move it without a reason.”
“I don’t see why the princess needs guards anyway. She’s pretty powerful, and so is her sister.” He pointed to the door of Celestia’s room. “Not to mention she raises the sun for a living!”
The other guard shushed him. “Hey, you wanna wake her up.” He whispered while looking at the door.
The pony in red did the same and grinded his teeth. He understood this. When you wake up a princess, you would need a very good reason, a very important reason, one that would require lives to be in danger, or world’s ending. So the red guard moved back to his position and straightened himself up. “It’s just so boring sitting here, you know, staring at a wall, looking up a ceiling, looking left and right to see...another guard?”
“Yeah.” The white nodded. “It does get kinda bor-”
*CLASH*
“Ow...what the- Private?”
The private continued to pant as he got off the guard. “S-sorry...j...just….guh….just...you know….hef...yeah…” The private fell to the floor and panted his head out while the guards looked at each other, then at him in confusion.
“What are you getting so worked up about private?” The pony in red asked. “And why are you not at your post?” He tapped his hoof.
“I...fugh...don’t have a...p-post…” Private tried getting up, he had never ran so fast in his life, even during practices he ran slower than this.
“No post?” The other guards looked at each other “Then why aren't you, I don’t know, sleeping?”
“He will be….”
The two guards and the private turned around to see a pair of red eyes in the distance. The guards raised an eye while the Private gulped. He then grabbed the red guards hoof and said, “H-he’s….blugh….he’s….not….himself…” He slowly started climbing up the pony untill he got on his own hooves. “I-It’s like….some sorta...sorta….thing…” He lazily hung his tongue out and continued panting.
The white guard rolled his eyes and faced forward. “Hey! You! Come out of the dark!”
White, sharp teeth appeared at the bottom of the red eyes as the figure started walking forward. The private hid behind the red guard while the two guards looked at each other again.
“Oh...you know us Darklings, can’t get away from the dark…” The figure finally came to view as it stepped into the moonlight shining through a window.
“What in the celestia’s mane are you holding changeling!” The red one questioned, tightening his grip on his spear.
The changeling smiled and brought up his weapon. “Oh nothing, just somethin’ I found lying around…” He shrugged and continued staring at them with bright red eyes.
The guards started getting a bit uncomfortable with how the bug was looking at them. “Listen changeling,” The white one said. “Either you state your business, or you answer to the princess.”
“Princess?” Stan’s eyes blinked green for a second before returning to red. “Oh, I don’t think your princess will stop me from ending, not only your lives,” He pointed his hoof, which had the wine bottle, to the private. “but his as well. Then, your pretty p-p-princess?” His eyes turned green again, but he shook his head and returned his eyes to red. “Your princess will be next…”
The guards were flabbergasted at what this changeling was saying. The white one whispered to his fellow guards, “I’m starting to think this one is intoxicated.”
“I-is that why his eyes are red?” The private asked as he continued to quiver in fear behind them.
The red guard shrugged. “Guess so. Why don’t you stay here private, while me and my friend here take care of this.”
The private nodded and backed away. “Alright changeling.” The white one yelled. “Either you come with us, or we wake up the princess.”
Stan’s eyes turned flashed green again. “So be it, you ponies,” He went into a combat stance. “Come and get me!”
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Celestia read quietly in her bed. Her eyes skimmed the pages of every word until she turned the page, she was happy to know the guards were making as little noise as possible outside, she would always hear them go on and on about the silliest of conversations. She sighed placed a bookmark on the page she was reading and put the book away. Now she was ready to finally-
*SMASH*
“Changeling! Stop!”
“How are you still standing! I hit you like...four times with this thing.”
“Just put the broom down changeling!”
“It’s Darkling, and this is an ax! Not a broom!”
“Changeling, you’re drunk, just go home!”
“I will once I end you!”
Celestia raised her eyes toward the door, knowing full well that a fight was in progress. She sighed and walked to the door. “Look’s like another sleepless night for me.” She thought as she put a hoof on the nob.
*CRASH*
She quickly backed up once a changeling busted through her door with a wine bottle in one hoof and a broom in the other. The changeling groaned and quickly got back on his hooves, glancing left and right outside the door.
“Come on! COME ON! Just try and see if you can take me on!” The changeling pointed the broom to the group of guards and snarled at them.
As for the guards, they smiled smugly crossed their arms. The changeling growled. “What the hive are you smiling at?”
The private peaked through the doorway and pointed behind the changeling. “Um, I think you should surrender now.”
the changeling rolled his red eyes and dropped the broom. “Oh what?” He crossed his hooves and turned around. “What could possibly do to try and stop…me...”
His eyes shot open and the redness in them started going away once he gazed at the sight of the most beautiful thing he had ever seen, he dropped his jaw and looked up to see the face of this wondrous creature. Stan’s eyes went back to greenish blue and his mouth turned right side up. Knowing that this alicorn will forever bring him joy in this land.
His love smiled back at him and with a voice ever so soft said, “So, you must be the so called intruder? Mind telling me why you’re here?”
And with that, Stan fainted.
Nice to see Stan get his shining moment there
“Just put the broom down changeling!”
“It’s Darkling, and this is and ax! Not a broom!”
“Changeling, you’re drunk, just go home!”
Oh gawd, that was the best bit I read here Poor Stan is so drunk n unstable right now.
*reads...*
I think you've been drinking as much as Stan before writing these last couple chapters.
I hate vore ever since my Boyfriend who had the fetish ripped my heart out by completely destroying my imagination i used to be innocent before i met him but now im completely hetero never going back to boys again im sticken to girls
I like the shining reference also i hope you get your account back soon man
4762559 no were just seeing what Stan thinks he looks like in his minds eye. He is still very sloshed and probably has an overactive imagination. Great chapter in my opinion, finaly made it to celestia .
I'd do the cover art, but my skills are *meh*
4763420 oh.....oh....oh god....
I, I just....oh man, looking back at it now...just...
sht...
I am so, so, SO sorry about that...I just
I was on a writing spree and...I just went too far with it...
Personalty, I hate looking at those two chapters now...
god...I feel like such and awhole now...
You...um...
I'm just gonna...gonna...delete them and, re-write it...
never thought I would stoop so low in my life
Just to vent anger for a something so fcking stupid
I mean...that's just out right...whatever the word is...
Again, Alcatraz, I deeply apologize for not even letting you know about this,
boy was I wrong, the chapters, the story, all of it...
If you really want, I'll take down the story as well.
but in the mean time, the chapter's are goin' down.
And again. I am so sorry for doing that...
I'm a just gonna go to bed now...
4763503
I can't take your half-assed 'apology' seriously if you're going to make comments that make it sound like you purposefully ripped off my story with the intention of getting away with it
I filed a plagiarism report against your story story, citing examples of the comparisons you so blatantly plagiarized from my story. Even if you unpublish the chapters, or even delete them as a whole, the moderators have the ability to restore the chapters to verify my claims.
I can tell you for a fact that doing shit like that earns you bans, from two weeks to permenantly, and anywhere inbetween.
With the 172 followers I have, if any of them remember what I write well enough to recognize the source material in your story, then that much is plagiarism, point and case.
Makes me wander if you've done it before...
4763503
>tfw the author has no idea he would plagiarize.
>tfw author can't read our rules.
C'mon, dude.
4763903
MFW that comment i.imgur.com/QpBEp0w.jpg
4763503 Bah, don't apologize to him, he's the one who wrote an offensive rape story...
On a different note; Stan has finally found the Mare of his drunk dreams, but see who it is makes it's understandable that he cracked under the pressure and fainted. Now for the suspenseful wait to find out what happens.
The author who wrote that tormenting story would think he would be happy if his character was sort of mentioned in a popular story such as this. It could encourage more readers for his work.
Please don't take this story down. It's hilarious and I know everyone here wants to see how this ends. Just change the rapists name and be done with this silly issue.
4764166 my thoughts exactly, this actually was giving his story some extra publicity when you think about.
4763636 Dude, lay off. It's not that big a deal. and he's taking/taken care of it.
So Stan finally gets to Tia and then he faints
4764202
This story actually got me curious about the Crimson character. So I checked out the other authors story and... Had to stop reading. Xp
4763951 I thought it was possible to talk things out without the need to be a dick about these things.
Apparently, I have been proven wrong.
Good job, Alcatraz. You're one of the many in this world that drain my hope for it to live through the next hundred years.
4763636
That is just precious.
4763903 Shadow, can you as a mod confirm whether there was any actual plagiarism here, or just one story being referenced by another without permission?
I for one, found the 'lunar domination' cameo/ripoff/subversion/whatever-you-want-to-call-it, pretty funny.
I did assume it was a reference the reader was intended to notice. Kinda looked like one, but what do I know. Not at least informing the writer you used his characters was an unmistakable brainfart though.
4765026
I'm a story approver. It's not my job to see if there's plagiarism after it's been submitted. He filed a report and the mods have to deal with it. Plagiarism is seriously one of the stupidest things anyone can do on this site. If the author honestly believes that it was "okay" to do, then they really need to re-read our rules. We take that shit seriously.
4763503 Yeah, plagiarism is easily the fastest way to get yourself banned on this site. If it'd been more than one chapter, you'd be taking two weeks off, and the next offense would be permanent.
Please don't attempt anything like this again.
4765509
Understood.
4763636 Dude, ever think that because he made something similar and unique, that it isn't quite yours? I haven't read your story, but is this word for word copying, or is he actually trying to put his own spin on a similar idea? Seriously man, this crap happens all the time, accidental or otherwise. Learn to deal with the fact that he wants to take that idea and run with it- hell, some of the more popular stories out there have done things like that, and lay the fuck off. Unless he is outright stealing your story word for word or with very minor changes, he hasn't done anything except put his own version of the same situation up. He REFERENCED your story, he never stole it, so if you think otherwise, let's see your so called proof. Seriously, this claim is absolute BULLSHIT under fair use, so UNLESS you can prove he copied your story word for word AND NOT JUST REFERENCED IT, he hasn't done anything wrong here. Even claiming he stole your character wouldn't help, because oh hey, once again, REFERENCES. This isn't your story that was stolen, this was full of references and his own take on what could have happened in another universe. Deal. With. It.
4765223 Not really an answer to my question, but apparently I was asking the wrong person.
4765509 Eldorado, was there any real plagiarism here, as in actual text copied from one story to the other? I ask because I remember the other story from its time in the featured box and am fairly sure the author of this story didn't just straight up copy the entire chapter. No clue if he copied parts of it, though.
4765700 The stuff linked in the report wasn't really clear at all, but the author backpedaling and apologizing tells me that something dishonest was done. Nobody's getting banned or anything for this, I'm just taking the author's admission of wrongdoing at face value and making it a formal warning.
4765777 As someone who read both chapters (admittedly several weeks ago for the other story), I'm 90% certain that the other author has spun an unauthorized reference into a plagiarism accusation and successfully used it to strong-arm this author into taking down part of his story.
You should probably actually investigate before issuing even a warning, especially since the author's back-peddling comment is so... incomprehensible.
4765840 If the author deletes the chapter, then investigation is not possible.
4765546 To clarify, if what you're doing is referencing another author's work, then that's fine. Problems arise when you directly copy storylines, so that the thing reads like you had the original open in a separate tab and were reading along as you wrote it, changing stuff slightly as you went to make it undetectable to a text comparison program. That goes for stories on this site as well as Fanfiction, deviantART, actual published written works, or non-literary material like movies or video games.
Obviously copy-paste plagiarism also isn't okay, but I don't get the feeling that's what you did here.
4765637
He took down the chapters so I can't prove it to you. If you read his comment to my OP, he got caught with his hand in the cookie jar. And the mods that have commented on the story are in agreement with my story being plagarized.
4763215 No, the 'drunkenness' is spilling over into the hard narrative.
This could work if it was a 1st person story.
But it's 3rd person omniscient. We are the voyers looking down and observing from somewhere up in the sky. We should not be affected by Stan's drunkenness.
4764070
Did you ever stop to think that maybe, just maybe that sometimes opinions are offensive?
4765509
It was my understanding he wrote two chapters pertaining to my story. I called him out on it, and he deleted the chapters so investigation isn't possible. I should have taken screencaps. His response to my OP is akin to getting your hand caught in a cookie jar. Seriously, when I re-read the comments it's like people are defending what he did, as if they think it's OK, which is completely fucktarded.
If someone doesn't copy-paste, but still makes enough references to my story, using names, places, and situation, enough to the point where it becomes recognizable to the source material, then that much is plagarism.
Now people are calling me out on it, telling me to effectually take a chill pill and calm the fuck down. Seriously, The author plagarized my work and he's getting support, more or less.
4766085 yes but the author is trying to show stans point of view and how bad ass he feels its a small break from the norm and not everyone is gonna be pleased I like it. Also did I miss something I never read lunar domination so did I miss something or am I just retarded.
4765879 If it would help put this fire out more quickly, I actually have the all the original chapters that were posted here saved on my computer in a word file. If you think it will help put an end to this, then I would be happy to send you the word files. I just want to see this attack on Atlas put to an end.
4765223
not with that avatar
4766160 If it's to be from Stan's POV, it should be 1st person or ALL the observations must take place in Stan's thoughts, and we must see that they are in Stan's thoughts.
A disjointed narrative is not how to do it.
4763636 Plagerism is bad.
But then, plagerizing a story as bad as yours is even worse.
For shame, Dr. Atlas. You could have found far better stories to steal from!
(Alondro slams two authors in one small post! Troll mastery attained!)
4766109
4766166
Whether or not I had evidence of it, something like single-chapter plagiarism is usually handled by taking down the chapters and giving the offending author a stern warning. All this has been done.
If he does something like this again, I encourage you to report him for it. He'll be given something like a two week ban, or possibly even permanent depending on the severity of the offense. Otherwise, this matter should be resolved.
Further harassment of anyone involved will not be tolerated. Again, that's what the reports system is for.
Edit: Dropping this as per moderator instructions, didn't see the previous comment until I posted and hit refresh.
4766287 Just putting it out there that I have a fully original copy of the story before this all happened, I was hoping that I could be of help. But at least things have been somewhat "resolved" for now. You have a nice day.
4766320 There was a time when this kind of thing would have been bannable, but we've kind of toned things down as of late. I really have no idea how you could ever accidentally plagiarize something, or what frame of mind you have to be in to think someone "won't care" if you rip their stuff off, but we do allow people second chances these days.
If the action causes the author to lose fans as a result, that's a different story. I know I wouldn't blame anyone for voting with their feet and finding someone else to read. But official action will stop here, until another offense has been committed.
4765637 "Similar and Unique" The fact of the matter is, I read the couple mentions of "Crimson" and the rape drug with Luna, so on so forth, and my first thought was "That was from Lunar Domination". If someone can immediately pick something out from 2000+ words, I dunno, seems to me like it's pretty obvious. I'm a pretty inattentive person. Nevertheless, let's stop bashing on Alcatraz. If you guys should be mad at anyone, it's me. I snitched. I'm the narc.
hehe i51.tinypic.com/e0hd7c.gif
4766109 All this would be a lot more meaningful if this entire site wasnt dedicated to using names, places, characaters (you forgot that one) and situations, enough to the point where it becomes recognizable to the source material.
I dont approve the way Dr Atlas handled this, had he actualy gotten your permission and credited you then it could have only been mutualy beneficial, but realy double standard much?
4771668 If you'd like to file a report backed up with evidence, and actually use the site properly, then I'd be happy to investigate for you and take action as appropriate.
4771719
4771668
Pretty sure there's things in his comment that constitute harassment, don't you think?
4771761 How about you stop posting derogatory comments all the same? The matter's been resolved, the author admitted to wrongdoing, and everybody needs to just calm down about it. It's done. If further problems arise, then we'll deal with them, but I'd really appreciate it if you could stop trying to perpetuate this unpleasantness.
Go find something else to do with your time.
4766109 Okay, I have not read wither of the stories in question but I do have to correct you on this (since I don't have the patience to see if someone else already has)
That is not true. Plagiarism is, by definition, using someone else's work and passing it off as their own. Now, if I were to write a story, and reference another because I wanted the stories to be parallel, then technically, it is not plagiarism, especially if I were to credit the original author of the story I was basing mine off of.
I feel it is my duty as an unbiased third party to say that: If indeed, the writer in question did perpetrate plagiarism, then he should be penalized as such, but before making that formal accusation, you should consider if it is plagiarism or simple referencing. It is also the responsibility of the one reporting possible plagiarism to evaluate it, and be civil in your actions. You could have taken an additional step and talked to the author before reporting him, and asking him if he intended plagiarism, intended reference, or was unintentionally plagiarizing your work. There is no need to be so aggressive with it, or to create such a scene. It boils down to the simple fact of: Is it plagiarism or not? If yes, then talk with the author, or simply report him or her, without hostility.
P.S. A reply to this is not necessarry, but if you feel you must, please be civil about it.
P.S.S I am not defending plagiarism, I am simply trying to correct a misconception.