Having been blindsided by Rarity's possible survival, Rainbow and Twilight wonder how to best track their former friend down, while Applejack tries her best to help Fluttershy through a chapter of her life she thought she had closed.
It's simple Rainbow. You're becoming confused and as such your cutie-mark changed to reflect that confusion. It looks like a small storm because that's the darker part of you, the side that wants Rarity dead, while the Rainbow lightning is the old you which wants more than anything to fix things between you and her even though she hurt you badly. Sounds confusing? It is but you will ultimately come to the right conclusion when the time comes.
A dark side of rainbow is winning... This is not good.
BTW I call BS on this!
But they both felt that this mystery was more pressing than sleeping in the same bed.
nothing is more important then going to bed next to the one you love /joking (somewhat)
Interesting. too bad Rainbow can't just live and let live... Seems like she would be better off just forgetting about Rarity and moving on. However, I would want revenge too... One way or another, I don't think i could ever forgive. Not THAT anyway.
now that is an itneresting development rarity is off somewhere in manhehatten without a clue who she is. and rainbow dash is struggling with just forgiving rarity and trying to murder her. considering she has gronw stronger than the night luna gave her the metaphysical opprutunity to get revenge, she probably has the will to not kill her, especially f she does not remember. and this struggle is starting to affect her mark.
though it all circle round to what the FUCK happened with rarity. it just seems unlikely that she would become so deranged without some outward force in the works. and evne if was of her own volition, then how did she end up as she is?
I was quite confused as soon as the Rarity parts started, since I thought that her awakening was at the same time of them discovering that she wasn't cremated. I must've misread something
4547091 Well, in the first chapter, you might want to add something like 'X months ago', because without telling everyone, nobody knows that italized is your way of flashbacks.
4547211 The way I did that in Cupcake Chronicles was criticized. So I have attempted to let readers know when it took place through descriptions and dialogue. You're the first one to say that you missed it.
Thinking about it, it still feels like Luna and Celestia didn't go the right way with this situation. I'm not talking about what they did to Rarity (though some might find that questionable, too), but about lying (sort of) to Rainbow Dash and the others. Yes, it was easier for Rainbow Dash and the others thinking Rarity was dead, but then, for Luna to go this route, she REALLY should have done a much better job covering up her tracks. Like, all Twilight had to do to find out the truth was walk up to the hospital and ask. Seems very foolish for Luna to leave such a gaping hole in her plan. Unless it was intentional and Rainbow Dash and the others were always meant to find out, in which case I would say she (Luna) is playing a very dangerous game. Skating on thin ice. Very thin ice.
Ok, hiding that Rarity is still alive from Rainbow and the other girls I can believe would be a good idea, but what about her family? If Luna kept the fact that she is still alive from them I will lose all respect I have built towards this Luna, even if Sweetie could be considered to be too young to understand the situation, her parents at least should have been informed.
I'm not sure wheter I can say I like this chapter or not... BUT! It still makes me want to read more, and I will throw myself over the next chapter like a hungry wolf! And that, my good man, makes you an awesome writer! You are officially the opposite of Dan Brown.
...ok, read it a second time... I think I like it.
If they do anything to Charity, they are in the wrong. Completely in the wrong.
And if this was always Luna's intention, Rainbow murdering an innocent in the name of "justice" just to get revenge on the body, not the mind, then this version of Luna is a monster worse than Nightmare Moon ever could be.
What I'm curious to see is that if Charity will remember anything from her time as Rarity. Seeing as that Charity has some vague memories about what Rarity had done, and that she is terrified of these anonymous ponies and wonders why they act that way towards her which means two things, either one Rarity was actually a sadistic sociopath, but Twilight "fixed" her brain by nearly bashing her skull in, or that the good pony at the very core of both Rarity and Charity had somehow been influenced by some third party or force which made Rarity into a sadistic, power-tripping bitch.
"She doesn't even know who she is anymore, or what she did."
Wait a second...how does Rainbow know about Rarity's amnesia? I don't see anywhere where she should have none about that, consciously or unconsciously.
There is a valid point to Rarity seemingly getting off easy - Twilight nearly drank herself to death and Celestia didn't forgive her until Rainbow pointed out the hypocrisy.
She landed as quietly as she could on the balcony, and opened the door with a creak,which was loud enough to wake the normally heavy-sleeping pegasus in her bed.
You need a space between these words.
Rarity and the curious case of Charity. Rainbow should forgive Rarity. However, Rainbow should also be the one to be able to tell Rarity what she had done. The horrible atrocities she committed, the lives she ruined, the shame she brought upon her family. Ignorance of your crimes is no reason to get away with them. Rarity is no Charles Manson, but if he lost his memory, would you want him to not be punished because he does not remember what he did? If nothing more Rainbow's revenge should be her herself telling Rarity in graphic detail what she did. If the amnesia did what it is supposed to, Rarity will be horrified. And maybe even remorseful.
I didn't point all of them out in previous fics as I've been re-reading this series. But the biggest problem in them is that new talkers get a new line with starting and ending " marks. If a person / pony does soemthing and their dialog comes after that action. The dialog stays on that line after their actions. If a pony speaks, you don't start a new paragraph wrapped in " marks. Since that designates a new talker. It can be a bit confusing re-reading the same few lines of wondering who's talking. _________________
It's simple Rainbow. You're becoming confused and as such your cutie-mark changed to reflect that confusion. It looks like a small storm because that's the darker part of you, the side that wants Rarity dead, while the Rainbow lightning is the old you which wants more than anything to fix things between you and her even though she hurt you badly. Sounds confusing? It is but you will ultimately come to the right conclusion when the time comes.
And when you thought things could not escalate anymore without finding Rarity..... dun dun DUN!!!
A dark side of rainbow is winning... This is not good.
BTW I call BS on this!
nothing is more important then going to bed next to the one you love
/joking (somewhat)
Interesting. too bad Rainbow can't just live and let live... Seems like she would be better off just forgetting about Rarity and moving on.
However, I would want revenge too... One way or another, I don't think i could ever forgive. Not THAT anyway.
now that is an itneresting development rarity is off somewhere in manhehatten without a clue who she is. and rainbow dash is struggling with just forgiving rarity and trying to murder her. considering she has gronw stronger than the night luna gave her the metaphysical opprutunity to get revenge, she probably has the will to not kill her, especially f she does not remember. and this struggle is starting to affect her mark.
though it all circle round to what the FUCK happened with rarity. it just seems unlikely that she would become so deranged without some outward force in the works. and evne if was of her own volition, then how did she end up as she is?
Depending on WHEN this takes place from Princess Luna's Suicide Solutions, calling Noctilucent a persona non grata might be a really bad idea.
I mean, running up and pulling on Superman's cape... pissing in the wind... sneezing and sharting at the same time kinda bad.
4546941 Just needed an insult to attempt to get under his skin.
Besides, it's not really Noctilucent. It's the patient and rational side of Rainbow's mind, personified with Noctilucent, whom she recently met.
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Aww... that's kinda disappointing.
4547026 Sorry. Your story is on a different psychological level than mine.
I was quite confused as soon as the Rarity parts started, since I thought that her awakening was at the same time of them discovering that she wasn't cremated. I must've misread something
4547085 No, the flashbacks are italicized, and take place just after Rainbow returns to Ponyville.
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Well, in the first chapter, you might want to add something like 'X months ago', because without telling everyone, nobody knows that italized is your way of flashbacks.
4547211 The way I did that in Cupcake Chronicles was criticized. So I have attempted to let readers know when it took place through descriptions and dialogue. You're the first one to say that you missed it.
4547213
Maybe I'm the first that spoke up about it
Anyway, the second and third chapter eventually made sense
Thinking about it, it still feels like Luna and Celestia didn't go the right way with this situation. I'm not talking about what they did to Rarity (though some might find that questionable, too), but about lying (sort of) to Rainbow Dash and the others. Yes, it was easier for Rainbow Dash and the others thinking Rarity was dead, but then, for Luna to go this route, she REALLY should have done a much better job covering up her tracks. Like, all Twilight had to do to find out the truth was walk up to the hospital and ask. Seems very foolish for Luna to leave such a gaping hole in her plan. Unless it was intentional and Rainbow Dash and the others were always meant to find out, in which case I would say she (Luna) is playing a very dangerous game. Skating on thin ice. Very thin ice.
Ok, hiding that Rarity is still alive from Rainbow and the other girls I can believe would be a good idea, but what about her family? If Luna kept the fact that she is still alive from them I will lose all respect I have built towards this Luna, even if Sweetie could be considered to be too young to understand the situation, her parents at least should have been informed.
This is one of those moment's you just have to say-
OH SHIT!
I'm not sure wheter I can say I like this chapter or not... BUT! It still makes me want to read more, and I will throw myself over the next chapter like a hungry wolf! And that, my good man, makes you an awesome writer! You are officially the opposite of Dan Brown.
...ok, read it a second time... I think I like it.
If they do anything to Charity, they are in the wrong. Completely in the wrong.
And if this was always Luna's intention, Rainbow murdering an innocent in the name of "justice" just to get revenge on the body, not the mind, then this version of Luna is a monster worse than Nightmare Moon ever could be.
What I'm curious to see is that if Charity will remember anything from her time as Rarity. Seeing as that Charity has some vague memories about what Rarity had done, and that she is terrified of these anonymous ponies and wonders why they act that way towards her which means two things, either one Rarity was actually a sadistic sociopath, but Twilight "fixed" her brain by nearly bashing her skull in, or that the good pony at the very core of both Rarity and Charity had somehow been influenced by some third party or force which made Rarity into a sadistic, power-tripping bitch.
Anyway, hope to see the next chapter soon!
Wait a second...how does Rainbow know about Rarity's amnesia? I don't see anywhere where she should have none about that, consciously or unconsciously.
There is a valid point to Rarity seemingly getting off easy - Twilight nearly drank herself to death and Celestia didn't forgive her until Rainbow pointed out the hypocrisy.
4548890 Twilight visited the hospital, got the witness statement from Life Line, and went back and told Rainbow.
4548914 Shoot! Somehow I missed the exact line where Life Line told her that.
Split personalities right? The darker side is winning.. This is getting very very interesting...
Wait, no, hold on. Rarity is dead and Charity is 'born'. Meanwhile Charity is in Rarity's body.. This is so confusing yet so very clever.
You need a space between these words.
Rarity and the curious case of Charity. Rainbow should forgive Rarity. However, Rainbow should also be the one to be able to tell Rarity what she had done. The horrible atrocities she committed, the lives she ruined, the shame she brought upon her family. Ignorance of your crimes is no reason to get away with them. Rarity is no Charles Manson, but if he lost his memory, would you want him to not be punished because he does not remember what he did? If nothing more Rainbow's revenge should be her herself telling Rarity in graphic detail what she did. If the amnesia did what it is supposed to, Rarity will be horrified. And maybe even remorseful.
KBO.
Why do I get a feeling that discord is acting behind the scenes.
move to previous line of dialog.
I didn't point all of them out in previous fics as I've been re-reading this series. But the biggest problem in them is that new talkers get a new line with starting and ending " marks. If a person / pony does soemthing and their dialog comes after that action. The dialog stays on that line after their actions. If a pony speaks, you don't start a new paragraph wrapped in " marks. Since that designates a new talker. It can be a bit confusing re-reading the same few lines of wondering who's talking.
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I sense a Frozen reference?
Her...her Cutie Mark changed?!