For some reason I feel like Anon will get some sort of pseudo-immortality and literally watch over Celestia/Luna for all time. Would be kinda... nice actually.
Fun chapter what with Luna walking in on the morning after and Luna/Celestias dad sitting Anon down for the talk.
Why its seems that each time Celestia and him get nasty so does Luna…or is Luna having a crush on him as well?
Oh well if this was like a tragedy or something from game of thrones this will be the moment where something very horrible will happen, like an attack or an assassin killing Anon
4539332 It wasn't called the Silver Wedding the fuck are you talking about? Joffery's wedding was called the purple wedding. And what I was trying to say is that things are always bad in the Game of Thrones world but you obviously didn't understand the joke.
5 freaking years! Dude that's a lot of time, don't yah think mate? Good story keep it up. I would suggest being more structured in the time line it looks messy, though, nothing that a little read can't fix. Hugs*
A good change of pace would be to see a plot line last for more than 2 chapters as well as going for more than two chapters without a time skip. These two points have been a persistent and a constant problem that has held the story back. For example, how am I supposed to care what happened to Anon, Celestia and Luna, or anything that happens to both the major and minor characters, if you just brush the entire thing off with a 5 year time skip? What happened in that last chapter isn't something small in regards to how it should shape the future of this story. This event should have and has changed how Celestia, Luna and Anon's characters are written, however, without going into more depth with the effects of said event the impact it leaves is severely diminished and leaving me, the reader, without knowledge of exactly how it has affected everyone not just the three main characters but also the parents and the public. Granted you did try to go in depth with what happened with the use of flash backs but a dedicated chapter to the immediate after effects would have been better. I also cant help but feel that a lot is being missed with each time skip, as was mentioned by BronyKor, 5 years is a massive amount of time to take out, two of the major event's that would have been missed off the top of my head is them reaching the legal drinking age and how Anon coped with taking a life, once again, not a small thing by any means. it was a stretch when you did it the first time skipping out on six years but doing it again with one chapter separating them is a bit much, and even back reading chapter three I was conflicted with how to feel about skipping out on so much at the beginning of a story. I just wish for there to be some sort of filler, such as the dates or the adventures they went on outside and within the castle. I do like the direction your taking with the story, although the last chapter was unexpected it was not... unwelcome for the lack of a better word, it is interesting to see you attempt to line up your story with cannon which brings into question, will this story take place in the one time frame of 'past Equestria' or will it somehow transition to another time? either one would be interesting. As you know I have followed this story from the start, even if I haven't commented on every chapter, and in my last comment to my memory I made mention to to pressing the green thumb, well it has been done and I like the story and the next step I want to take it to is to my favorites, but as was pointed out above there are a few improvements to the story that I would like to be seen made and until that happens it will be staying in my read later list. Always good to read and I cant wait to see what will happen throughout this story. Sincerely, TheMagicalBrony
Quite the interesting read, though it feels too rushed... Otherwise, the fanfiction is great, and any mistakes I may have noticed have been forgotten by now. And that's not an easy thing to do... And the scene with the King... I laughed as soon as I read the part where he wants Anon to walk with him. Though I thought he was going to be waiting for him to come out of his room in the morning... Hehe. Welp, I hope you'll post a new chapter soon.
Hmmmm good chapter but that 5 year time jump could of been filled as a chapter or 2 before this chapter
For some reason I feel like Anon will get some sort of pseudo-immortality and literally watch over Celestia/Luna for all time. Would be kinda... nice actually.
Fun chapter what with Luna walking in on the morning after and Luna/Celestias dad sitting Anon down for the talk.
Omg how did her dad react !?O_O
I have a feeling that something bad is going to happen
Poor Anon, he has to sit through court. May god have mercy on his, Tia, and luna's souls.
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the plot thickens!
4537629 I second that.cdn.memegenerator.net/instances/43309081.jpg
Do I sense a love triangle going on?
BTW great chapter, it gave me a lot of inspiration... Minus the clop part of course
Sitting through court... a fate worse than death...
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preach it
Why its seems that each time Celestia and him get nasty so does Luna…or is Luna having a crush on him as well?
Oh well if this was like a tragedy or something from game of thrones this will be the moment where something very horrible will happen, like an attack or an assassin killing Anon
4538150 amen
4538824 What are you talking about? In Game of Thrones things are going wrong all the time, not even at specific moments like this xD
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The red weeding? the trial? the sentence of Ned Stark? The Silver weeding?
4539332 It wasn't called the Silver Wedding the fuck are you talking about? Joffery's wedding was called the purple wedding. And what I was trying to say is that things are always bad in the Game of Thrones world but you obviously didn't understand the joke.
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Ah, sorry
4540223 It's ok, on a second reading I came off as an asshole in my last comment, so, I'm sorry.
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Don't worry it happens to all of us
THE JIG IS UP! CHEEZE IT! RUN AWAY!
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5 freaking years! Dude that's a lot of time, don't yah think mate? Good story keep it up. I would suggest being more structured in the time line it looks messy, though, nothing that a little read can't fix. Hugs*
This Chapter So Look Like 20% Cooler In My Book.
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A good change of pace would be to see a plot line last for more than 2 chapters as well as going for more than two chapters without a time skip. These two points have been a persistent and a constant problem that has held the story back.
For example, how am I supposed to care what happened to Anon, Celestia and Luna, or anything that happens to both the major and minor characters, if you just brush the entire thing off with a 5 year time skip? What happened in that last chapter isn't something small in regards to how it should shape the future of this story. This event should have and has changed how Celestia, Luna and Anon's characters are written, however, without going into more depth with the effects of said event the impact it leaves is severely diminished and leaving me, the reader, without knowledge of exactly how it has affected everyone not just the three main characters but also the parents and the public. Granted you did try to go in depth with what happened with the use of flash backs but a dedicated chapter to the immediate after effects would have been better.
I also cant help but feel that a lot is being missed with each time skip, as was mentioned by BronyKor, 5 years is a massive amount of time to take out, two of the major event's that would have been missed off the top of my head is them reaching the legal drinking age and how Anon coped with taking a life, once again, not a small thing by any means. it was a stretch when you did it the first time skipping out on six years but doing it again with one chapter separating them is a bit much, and even back reading chapter three I was conflicted with how to feel about skipping out on so much at the beginning of a story. I just wish for there to be some sort of filler, such as the dates or the adventures they went on outside and within the castle.
I do like the direction your taking with the story, although the last chapter was unexpected it was not... unwelcome for the lack of a better word, it is interesting to see you attempt to line up your story with cannon which brings into question, will this story take place in the one time frame of 'past Equestria' or will it somehow transition to another time? either one would be interesting.
As you know I have followed this story from the start, even if I haven't commented on every chapter, and in my last comment to my memory I made mention to to pressing the green thumb, well it has been done and I like the story and the next step I want to take it to is to my favorites, but as was pointed out above there are a few improvements to the story that I would like to be seen made and until that happens it will be staying in my read later list. Always good to read and I cant wait to see what will happen throughout this story.
Sincerely,
TheMagicalBrony
Quite the interesting read, though it feels too rushed...
Otherwise, the fanfiction is great, and any mistakes I may have noticed have been forgotten by now. And that's not an easy thing to do...
And the scene with the King... I laughed as soon as I read the part where he wants Anon to walk with him. Though I thought he was going to be waiting for him to come out of his room in the morning... Hehe.
Welp, I hope you'll post a new chapter soon.
Learning how to take the reins for when the King and Queen leave, eh?
This shit's deader than my mom
Must have forgotten about how ponies treated him like trash and called him a monster when he was 10.