"To stick his shorts up my..."

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Now I have a boner and it won't stop! Curse you sexy Tia and Lulu.

Oh well than.....(takes guns) Now Luna where are you going to stick it.......Oh there........( takes guns and puts it in mouth) Fuck me and your hot ASS EVERYTHING! (Pulls trigger.Dies of happiness and form bullet hitting brain but still happy)

Oh so Annon admit he has a crush but decided to crush it for Celestia well being? that its noble of him…and its looks like mares are noticing him, maybe find one will not be so difficult.

Oh I can see it now…Anon friend zone Celestia and then start dating the closest mare he can get, before she try anything to prevent her to do something she regret

Eeyup…I don't see anything bad with that plan

This is my first time proofreading something, I hope I did well =)

What a wonderful chapter to wake up to

make it a double relatio ship with Luna and Celestia both going for him
Celestia is a must as for the title and picture but Luna ... hmmm interesting thoughts
also i can already see anon waking up in the morning while having a "nice" dream ...
"argh where are my underpants!?!"
yup...

Anon, the first being that started a herd/harem. They don't know about it yet though :3.

I can just it now Anon waking up and he is half naked and his underwear are wet.

I can see it now.

Anon wakes up, looks down. "I'm not even going to ask!"

Classic. Love your story man, keep it up.

that happen to me with some female friends gooood tiimmees

no pants in the morning seems right to me.

as the other chapters you have my undivided attention

This is great. You had best do more of the truth or dare. That was awesome, and rather erotic.

("Yes, your future. Now I understand that you do in fact, eat meat. Am I correct?" You nod your head. "So that would make your kind used to fighting, correct?" Again you nod your head. "Enough with the nodding and answer me." He was getting irritated, and you didn't want to make him mad.)

That is one racist king.

Nooooo! I wanted to see the happy childhood memories and awkward situations. Makes the relationships feel a little rush and empty. Oh well maybe in a spin of we'll get to see what happened in the six years.

The is however one thing I feel is a little tipsy.

Look an adorable ten year old child. Oh my Faust get your touches and pitchforks!!!!

Look a sixteen year old almost mature man. Oh my Faust we wanna bang him!!!!

It may just be me, but it somehow seems unlikely. If they are afraid of the human protagonist when he is a child, they should be near total panic when his grown. I know he has been living in the castle for the last six years, but Celestia's and Luna's friend don't know what he is when he enters the room. The should basically been jumping out the window to get away from the imaginary danger.

4462854 How so? It seems like a logical train of thought that a species of meat eaters would be used to some from of fighting. I mean their meals aren't exactly gonna just stand there or drop dead from fright... fainting goats excluded that is.

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The point is he already assumes aggression based on species, not by actual observed behaviors. This kid has shown how much aggression in his life in Equestria? I don't recall the author mentioning any in the story. The human has been more scared and avoidant of danger. As he stands now, he isn't guard material, period. To emphasize the king's bias, we are shown that he neglects that this kid has been trained, raised, and educated while working as a chef. A motherfucking chef. But because of his diet, he wants to make him in the barracks and turn him into a soldier? Ridiculous. I shudder to think how badly the human is going to bring down the rest of the recruits.

4464539 I see what you mean. Though I just felt like the King was assuming that because the kid eats meat he comes from a predatory species that will also have, once again assumed, instinctual fighting in him that they can then form into a lethal fighter.

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If only you could see how the guard actually acts...

4464765 They gonna be a bunch of pushovers or maybe Rambo it up in there? Maybe abit in between?

4465043 I refuse to ruin it for all fo you =)

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You did pretty well, not many mistakes you had overlooked... There were still some, the most prominent (to me anyways, no one else cares much about it) is when it was 'ok' instead of 'okay'. It's a bit annoying to me... But it's usually ignored, and isn't that big... Hmm... Mostly noticing just small mistakes after I've looked it over twice. Hardly noticeable, trust me, I'm just a perfectionist.

4468229 Thanks, I really appreciate the feedback man.

Just waiting for the next chapter now.

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I don't ever wait usually.

It's always when I'm away, they always give me a bunch so it's all cluttered and annoying... I over exert myself, don't do that.

Don't rush it. But hurry up. Gosh the anticipation.

You were going back over your favorite book, Lord of the Wings.

Lord of the Wings

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OH LAWDY YAEHS!

He tasted a little salty

They're equines.
Equines LOVE salt. (A large number of mammalian animals do actually.)
(They also don't get much salt naturally from grasses, luckily salt is cheap, which is why salt licks are an essential part of livestock care.)

If anything, this would be like a human finding out ponies sweat sugar.

Anon here is about to become the most popular steamy teen gossip in all of Canterlot.

4479826 you sir deserve a medal but sense i can't give what i don't own at the moment have a moustache

4479826 I have no words.

"I would like to see you in that armour. Mares like a stallion in uniform." She likes to get you flustered. And flustered you get.

Oh, the words Celestia just said is one the reasons why so many men from Australia died in WW1.