Odd Discovery
Chapter 1
Odd Discovery
As the princess was going through another day of day court, she was finally filling out the last bit of paperwork regarding a strange request. All she wanted right was some fresh air.
"Guards, don't let any pony in the throne room," Celestia said in a demanding yet soothing tone, "I'm going to take a break for a few minutes."
"Yes, you're highness," the guard said. Celestia walked out of the throne room and begin to walk to her sisters chamber. While walking the guards saw her walking towards the door.
"You are excused," Celestia said. The guards started walking off to the dining room, "Sister, may I come in," The door glowed a light blue and slowly opened.
"What is it, Tia?" Luna questions.
"I need to take a break and get some fresh air," Celestia said then sighed, "Do you want to come with me, Lulu?" She asked.
"Sure, Tia. I'll come," Luna said. Celestia then takes off her tiara and puts it on her sisters nightstand. Her hair changed into the pink hair she had when she was young. then her once wavy mane turned back into a normal mane. Luna did the same with her tiara, she toke it off, then put it on the stand next to the other tiara. Luna's mane turned into light blue hair and stopped waving. They both walk over on the balcony, Celestia's horn glows as she was fixing to teleport to the woods, in a bright flash of light they were in the woods. As the breeze hit Celestia face, she took in the fresh air. She took a minute to enjoy the wind blowing against her face and flowing through her mane.
"Can we walk around, Tia?" Luna asked.
"Sure, Lulu," Celestia replied, with a soft smile, "but let's follow the main path, ok?"
"Ok!" Luna beamed to hear what Celestia said. Luna and Celestia begin walking, Celestia enjoying every last bit of freedom before she returns
to her royal duties.
"So, why aren't you doing your royal duties?" Luna asked. This brought Celestia to sigh, she turned and looked at Luna.
"It's been stressful. I had to fill out easily over nearly a thousand papers. I just need some fresh air before returning," Celestia replied, before looking back on the path
"So that's why?" Celestia nodded, "Royal duties can get stressful... I can take over for you," Luna offered. Celestia shook her head then looked at Lulu.
"No, it's ok, Lulu. I can handle it," Celestia declined as she was looking at Lulu, then back at the path.
"Are you sure? I can do it," Luna insisted. Celestia shook her head again.
"No, Lulu, I'm fine. It's a generous offer, but I can handle it, trust me," Celestia said, then looked at Luna with a reassuring smile.
"Ok, but if you do want a break, just ask me anytime," Luna said. They continued walking enjoying the scenery.
Rick lets out a sigh, as he sees his fire is almost out. He could even feel his skin get a little colder as the fire started going out a little faster, 'Give it an hour, the fire will be gone by then,' Rick thought, as he looks at the fire crackling. He sits in his chair looking around in the cabin he was in before getting up from his chair, he gets up and starts heading for the door. He opens the door immediately feeling cold air hit his skin, sending a shiver down his spine. Rick hated the fact that he has to go outside and cut wood in this freezing weather, but he had to get some wood. So he started walking outside on his porch, then he walks downstairs, then walks over to a trunk in his front yard of what used to be a tree there. On the trunk was an axe, beside the left side of the trunk was some uncut wood. He grabs the axe feeling how freezing the handle was as he picks it up, then grabs one piece of wood and puts the axe at the center. After that, he positions the axe so he can hit the centerpiece of the wood.
He takes a deep breath and lift the axe then swings it down. Just like that, he hits the center of the wood, making it split in half, then he repeats the process. While absentmindedly cutting wood he thought, 'After this, I will be able to be warm, then sleep after a good meal,' Then sighed, 'Today was rough, too rough,' Rick continued to think. "I should be done soon," Then he notices, something, at the corner of his eyes, something, odd. Rick looked up and saw two horse-like animal's standing in front of him, they look almost as confused as he did. They just looked at each other, just looking. Rick started looking at the features of the to horse-like creatures. The white one was beautiful, it had long hair and tail, the hair and tail color was light pink. It had a symbol on her rump, it was the sun, here eye color was light to dark shade of pink. He also notices that it's wearing golden shoes and a huge necklace that has a giant gem in the center.
He then looked over to the dark blue one, it had light blue hair and tail, it had a symbol on its rump too, a moon. He also notices that it had a black necklace with the moon on it, he also notice it had light blue shoes.
The dark one opened it's mouth, "May I ask what's your name?" The dark blue one asked with curiosity.
Rick snapped out of trans, "My name is Rick what about you two," Rick asked.
"Well, I'm Celestia," The white replied, "And I'm Luna," The dark blue one added.
"Well, nice to meet you two," Rick said with a smile.
After a minute of talking, "While I would love to talk, I must return to where I live," She said.
"Well uh OK," Rick said, "Come back whenever you can it would be nice to know more about you," Rick continued smiling.
"I would love too," She said with a smile, "I hope to see you soon, bye," Just like that her horn lit up then she was gone. Rick stared dumbfounded, 'OK... Where did she go?' Rick questioned, 'I better start cutting some more wood it's starting to get colder,' He continued.
Both Luna and Celestia was now in Luna's bedroom, they both walk over to the nightstand and put back on their tiara. Both their hair started waving and changing color.
"Well, I got to send a letter to Twilight and her friends about this new creature," Celestia said, "It's very nice, I think they'll like it," Celestia added.
"Your right, it is very nice," Luna agreed with Celestia.
"Well, I must write this letter and start working again. So will see you later," Celestia said.
"OK sister," Luna said. With that Celestia walk out of Luna's room and closed the door behind her. Celestia walked around the castle to her room, she opened the door and walked in closing it behind her. She levitated a piece of paper and a jar of ink that was on her desk, she levitated a feather over and dipped the tip of it in the oil and started writing.
Dear Princess Twilight
I discovered a new species, this new species is a bipedal creature, it is not dangerous, it's actually quite nice. So I want you to come here tomorrow morning to visit this new creature and bring your friends too. Also, his name is Rick.~From yours truly Princess Celestia
Celestia rolled up the scroll and then lit up her horn and sent the letter to Twilight. Not even a minute later a letter appeared. Celestia elevated it and unrolled it and started reading.
Dear Princess Celestia
Thanks for telling me about this discovery, I will tell my friends to come with me to see this new creature called Rick.~From Princess Twilight
After Celestia was done reading she rolled up the letter and put it on her desk. She got up and started walking to day court, 'Tomorrow is going to be a big day,' She thought to herself.
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This reminds me of Unreal World.
I hope twilight doesn't bring the dissection tools
The ideas there but your wording and flow is awkward
Hmmm shows promise I hope you do continue
5613105 Lulz.
5613968 We'll see.
5613711 I did touch up on this story that was half written a year or two ago.
5612922
Huh?
Also a question to the author, who the human is going to get shipped with?
5615372 That will be explained later in the story I don't want to spoil the readers.
5615372 It's a Survival Game. It has notoriously difficult winters if you don't prepare. Mainly trying to chop enough firewood to not frieze to death.
5615593 Oh that's what that is I was confused too on that comment.
Unless you plan to put a bit more effort into the writing, I'd say don't bother continuing. It seems somewhat an interesting premise, but if you're only half interested than it would probably just be better to drop it rather than continue with a mediocre story.
5617063 Thanks for the feedback, I'll try to put more effort in the story.
Tenses gets mixed up, some typos, capital letters are missing, the descriptions are tacky. "He did x. Then he did y. And he said z."
5630123 Thanks for the feedback.
I think I give up at this point.
5665645 See Diaries of a Madman you may or may not like it. I haven't gotten around to reading it yet but give it a shot. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/45860/diaries-of-a-madman
Looks okay so far. And I like it
Definately hope you continue this. Has the beginings of a great story!
This is really cool, though i assume its been left for so long there os no intrest to continue, however if this is not the case, you should definitely continue
9020290
After going on a long break and starting back recently, I decided this story shouldn't continue. Grammar problems, rushed pace, and structure is poor. I have changed a lot from when this was written. My new story should, hopefully, prove to be engaging and more enjoyable, at least for me.