When something tries to bring harm to the bearers of the Elements of Harmony, Celestia sends them far away. To the one place no pony has ever heard of. A world ruled by humans.
Hope you guys like this. I know this has been done so much, but I'm still putting this up here! Please don't get mad at me for being slow at updating. Things might get dark later, so I'll put up the dark category just in case.
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This is actually really well written, especially for a first time writer. It seems interesting and intriguing enough so far, so I shall follow the story to see what develops. Keep up the good work!
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Thank you! I've actually had this idea for like a year and I'm glad that others like this so far. I promise that the chapters will be longer.
Another good chapter. The way in which you've written the story is very similar to the way the actual show is written, which is something few writers on this site (at least from what I've seen) have been able to accomplish. The only thing I might recommend, in regards to this chapter, would be to perhaps add a little more in for when they arrive in Canterlot, but I don't know I'm a strange one when it comes to writing. Other than that though you did amazing! I look forward to more.
The only thing thing I'm going to be Caps Cruising on anytime soon is how the authors note just screams of lack of self confidence so much so that I suspect some kind of joke or falsification. I'd be more inclined to believe such a level of paranoia, if not for the fact the story is posted here in the first place.
Point: Stop phishing for compliments. I don't blame you, but it's
a bitvery annoying. Also, the story is fine so far, it looks like it's being made by a very capable author, so take pride in the fact this doesn't suck like a majority of stories.Ooh~ I like where this is going!
Another great chapter, I didn't notice anything off, and as always the way you describe the characters is spot-on. I look forward to the upcoming chapters.
Also, I would like to add that I'm saddened at how little attention this story is getting, especially seeing as how good it is, but it can be hard for a first time author to become recognized. I would suggest adding this to a group, such as 'The Writers Group' or other similar groups so that you might get more views; I can't honestly remember if it's already in any groups, but I would highly recommend adding it to some . If you need any help with that, I'd be more than glad to assist.
I still like the story and not to be rude but: What's the point?! It took you the end of three chapters just to say "Welcome to the Pony Protection Program."?! All the things that happened in this chapter could have easily been said, done, and combined in the previous chapter. I'm just saying this chapter feels like a waste and a major turn off for readers. Please explain to me why this is? I wish to understand. At least make something notable happen this chapter.
Umm, dude you spelled 'prologue' wrong.
*sees author's note*
Wow, you seem to be doing a good job impersonating Fluttershy...