I use to live in the Crystal Kingdom, but wasn't a crysatal pony. I was shund by others and told I was a bad olmen. So some mare walked up to me and asked if she could try a spell. Well for every pony the sounds of teleporting is diffrent, to me its thousands of pained screams. After hearing that I was on the side of a mountian hiding from changlings. Now a bad storm showed up and I'm on the side of this rock, can't fly and can't walk far due to the walk way is giving out. Yay! Luck couldn't ever be on my side more than now, or could it?
Chapters (9)
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I thought you would like it,
I mean you are the lord after all.
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Oh you!
Well gald to see that some people read this. Give me some feed back or ideas if ya have any.
Just note this is just an observation after finishing the first 2 chapters, I am sure i haven't gotten into the meat of the story yet, so take it with a grain of salt, or take the whole saltlick.
Interesting start, He appears to have history in Ponyville.
Hopefully the backstory will fill in the gaps later.
Also a proofreader would do you a lot of good.
Twilight would smack you with a book for making her talk like that.
example: "Your a ALICORN!" >> "You're an ALICORN?!"
And cider has one 'D'
3578499 At the moment take it with the whole block of salt. I do have poor grammer but I may have a proff reader., and I suck at spelling.
But thanks for pointing out some of my flaws I will be working on them. But holler at me if you have anything else.
Havent thought of any tags yet? Ive never seen a story that doesnt have any
6243019 I have had this story on the back burner for bout 8 months dude. Sorry for that, its just that I have had a few people wanting to know how the main character knew Ponyvile and the main six from the past. Please take my forgiveness. I'm also debating if I should add one more chapter of the after math and the way ponies are taking what has happened.
6244314 im not mad it was just an interesting sight
6244331 Being honest here you said tags and I never saw that I had any. That's my bad, I normally know what my tags are before I even write the first chapter to any of my stories. Please do forgive my mishap.
6246528 now im trying to figure out why new stories are having grey thumb areas im thinking that people just havent thumbed yet but 1 story wouldnt show my thumb after i clicked it
6246545 The head people of the web site has placed something for rates so if there are any people disliking for no reason it doesn't show till ten or fifteen likes or dislikes have been done. Trust me it messed me up too.
6248410 thats dumb to me but its knightys site he can do what he wants
6248523 So very true my friend.