My name is rainbowdash73 and I am going to take parts of my [ponies] life. Some of it will be from mine and some will be added as my ponie's.
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RainbowDash73
rainbow dash is my favorite and she is awesome
RainbowDash73
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oh and for the coloring I was trying to make it look like a cherry pie.
Okay, I'm back to help you out. I like how the story's going; I especially enjoy the little mini-story vibe you've got going on. Though I do want to know, how was that sleepover?
Easy as pie...yeah, right. When somepony says "easy as pie", you usually think of the dessert, right? Or maybe even the mathematical term, like I do. In my case, life is as easy as pi.
I've decided to gallop to my mother's for a visit. It's not the most pleasant outside; it's pouring rain. I'll cope with it, though. I'm sure my mother misses me. I don't come by that often, so I guess this is a surprise. She'll enjoy it. It'll take her mind off everything else that she's been dealing with, like money problems.
I finally ended up at my mother's house, my coat and my mane soaked with rain. I knocked on the door and stood under the awning that I was suddenly very thankful for.
As I expected, my mother is surprised to see me. "Oh, come inside, Rainbow! It's pouring out there! You're going to catch a cold!" I had forgotten how much she's worried about me over the years, yet she never worries about herself or drags others into her problems.
"I know, Mom, but I thought it'd be a nice surprise." I'm trying to regain her attention. She's shuffling through a cabinet looking for a towel. A small towel is draped over my shoulders like a cape.
"Well, I'm glad you did, but you could have at least worn your raincoat." She's still worried about me and not even worried about herself. Maybe after taking care of me and my siblings, she's become more generous. Generosity is always a good thing, but it's corrupted her and she has begun to disregard everything else in favor of caring for me and my family. At the time, me and my siblings didn't understand why she worried so much, but as we grew older, we began to get it.
Sometimes life is as easy as pi: confusing and infinite.
-RS
An interesting short chapter, but, again, your writing style is flawed. But here I am to fix that. I'm like the duct tape of writing.
Maybe your life's exciting, boring, fun, or tragic. I don't know. You could be anything because we are all different.
As I take my daily stroll through Ponyville, I think about how others live.
The first two ponies I saw this morning were Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash. They don't have much in common, but there are a few things, like the fact that they are both pegasi. However, this doesn't change them. Nopony's personality will change because of their traits or abilities. Generally, nothing can change a pony for better or for worse.
Everypony's life is different, yet the same. That's why we call it everyday life, not because there's always another day but because we live it almost the same way as the last. Our personalities will never change unless we decide to use force. That creates a new lifestyle.
Really good, almost philosophical-type thinking. I smell an excellent writer growing!
-RS
A'ight, your writing improves but your pacing is just...Whoa. Slow down, Rainbow Dash, or we'll have a Sonic Rainboom on our hands.
When you hear the word "family", you may think of siblings, your parents, or your grandparents.
When I hear the word "family", ponies who are more distant come to mind. Take my father, for instance.
Today is a lot better than yesterday. The sun is shining, there's a nice breeze blowing, and nearly everypony is outside. Well, except for my father. He isn't much of a father to me as opposed to somepony I once knew. He took care of me for about three years of my life, but those years weren't all in a row.
There are certain crimes that you'll get busted for in Ponyville. One crime in particular is theft.
My father was a burglar.
Of course, I still have a family who's not so distant: my mother and my siblings. They don't come to mind when I hear the word "family". This might have to do with the fact that I can only remember how sad I was when my dad was arrested and now that I think about it, my brain always remembers the sad and embarrassing as opposed to the good and the happy.
The mind is pretty funny that way, pretty much like life. Maybe when you hear the word "family", you think of your grandmother, who spoils you rotten with hoof-made clothing and doilies, or your hard-working mother who pays all the checks and hardly gets a break.
But it's not like I know who or what comes to mind. The definition of a family is different for everypony. We're all different.
3305739 thank you so much for the extra help your giving me
3305739 and the sleepover was great
aww! nice story.
3312032 why, thank you!
3305969
No prob! Anything to help a budding author grow.
I've been wondering...why do people question everything that outer space has to give us? Space will always be there. We think we know so much about what's out there, but it's the complete opposite.
I look up into the clear blue sky .There's so much going on up there, so much that we don't even know about.
We keep trying to learn about other planets, yet our own is still a mystery. Apparently, there's a new animal that was recently discovered in a jungle. It's part of the raccoon family.
We still search for answers about life. We don't dare give up because we know there will always be more to learn, whether on Earth or another planet.
Once we reach our quota for knowledge, we just cut it off, no matter what. For instance, the former planet of Pluto is now just a rock floating in space. It can't be called a planet anymore because it's so small.
We still search for water on Mars. We think that there will only be life if there is water. That rule only goes for us and what we know about ourselves. We don't know if life on other planets survive by different means, we just don't know. We're too busy basing this knowledge on what we are used to.
But we don't even know about ourselves.
I really do like the way you think. You're, like, blowin' my mind.
-RS
3353015 thanks I try to think as logically as possible. I think I'm twilight mixed with a rainbowdash, it's a wierd mixture but it's who I am.
i finally got to read this and i'm so glad I did! I am crying so hard right now! you made me feel so special! i remember when we made that things-to-do list and we only did like three of them anyway! I remember that! I love you so so so much and I miss you and I'm getting really emotional and i'm going to call you now but first i'm going to read the next one and stop typing BECAUSE YOUR SO AWESOME!!!
this made me cry again!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
you are so good at this, **! I still miss u though and i'm glad i got around to reading this
when i hear the word family, I think of you, RainbowDash73.
every day i learn something new about you, rd73.
i read it again and i cried even harder
this story deserves way more likes than five.
How about that time you met a Dashing young changeling,
who was smart, charming, and just a little bit insane?
But where ever could you find a changeling like that?
*Smiles*
What?
Hey dont look at me, im just here for the muffins.
that was really touching, rd73
3397442 this is a serious thing,
and thank you CMC
3411391
Hmmm i dont think i can be serious.
Think of me as a mix between,
Pinkie pies love of fun, Derpys Obliviousness,
And just a little bit of Discords annoying self gratifying humor.
3411522 then how about you shut your trap and not read this because this obviously isn't your type of story
3413116
Wow someones not so,
*Sunglasses*
FlutterShy, about telling me how they feel.
3415524 are you stupid?
3416487
Nope
Just Autistic Bipolar And Schizophrenic!
*Pulls out a muffin and slaps you with it*
I must go now,
*Puts on a cape and underwear*
My muffins need me!
*Flies into the sky*
3416504 it's about time you wierdo
3420471
Shhh...
*Holds a hoof to your lips*
Don't Speak, Your eyes say everything.....
And right now, they are saying......
Some really mean things!!!
3422355 i dont care
3429619
Now your starting to get it
3429625 can you please stop talking/typing to chat with me...
3429693
yeah srsly. ur getting on everyones nerves.
loved this chapter btw
3429693
Fair enough, this will be the last you hear from me.
For future reference, trying to argue with someone,
Who is clearly insane only ends with frustration, ok cya!
3429726 you arent insane, your stupid thanks for shuting up though
3429625 you're
I'll be completely honest here: this is an amazing story. I love how it's literally "bits and pieces" done in a short story form. It reads just like a girl's diary, and that's great. I feel like you're true to yourself when you write.
Okay, here's my typical grammar nitpick. I love the letter and the relationship between Rainbow and her father, but your grammar could use work. Fear not, learning grammar is like learning to ride a bike. Once you know, you just...know!
For a formal letter (I assume that this is informal because it isn't on business), you'll begin with a greeting in the upper field.
Dear RainbowDash73,
Numbers below 20 can be written like this: one two three
Hi there, young lady. I apologize for the late letter, but this is the third one I've written.
I keep thinking about how I should approach you but I've decided to just keep it simple and ask you for forgiveness.
I know that my behavior is probably confusing and unforgivable...
First of all, this is just a bit repetitive. It could easily be mashed into one sentence and elaborated, like so:
Rainbow, everypony does strange things when they're under the influence of drugs.
Second off, her father's "Don't do drugs!" is almost a cliche. The example below shows him sounding sentimental and thoughtful, not just a D.A.R.E. mantra:
Please, don't do drugs. I don't want you to end up like me.
"Anyways" isn't much of a word, but it's dependent on writing style. You can change it to read "anyway" or you can keep it like it is.
I really miss you. Don't worry; I don't think I'll be in this cage much longer.
I picture Rainbow's father as wise and sentimental with a good sense of humor, kinda like my dad.
I acted horribly, as you saw, but this is finally setting me straight. When they let me out, I'll have my mind back to normal!
This ending is chaotic at best.
Love, Dad
Bueno.
Wow. I'm not a dog person by any means, but you make an excellent point. I don't endorse animal abuse of any sort, including animal testing for cosmetics. (Though a pig wearing mascara and red lipstick is a hilarious sight.
)
Here we go.
The use of periods ("...") is called an ellipsis. The right way to do ellipsis is to use three periods, like so:
A man's best friend...what a lie!
According to "Ezn's Guide To Writing (Fan)Fiction," there are many different ways to write ellipses:
"Words … more words
Words…more words
Words … more words
Words… more words" (Ezn 3) (http://eznguide.neocities.org/#Dashes-hyphens-and-ellipses-a-technical-note)
I'm aware of people who love dogs but I have two examples as to why they aren't "man's best friend". First off, Applejack sure isn't a man, but she sure loves her dog, Winona. So, it's not just men who love dogs.
Secondly, we abuse them! If they're such good friends then why do they suffer due to us?
I happen to have a dog myself. His name is Shadow because he's a black dog who loves to follow others. He protects us, loves us, and in return we would never harm him.
However, some ponies just don't seem to get that. I suppose it's just that we can't figure out that dogs are such kind beings. I guess it's not clear to us quite yet. We're all different with much to learn.
I would also like to mention, to any future readers, this is all real, so I'm sorry if i get mad at you if you post something sily but its almost offensive, this letter, its completely REAL! Thank you!