As a changeling, Lumi's life was simple: go to work, train a new changeling, and meet a new human to feed on. However, mysterious changelings deaths have her investigating to keep the peace between species. Set in the Gentlemanverse
Now this is what I like to see. The interconnection between your stories. The fact that they take place at the same time and the characters bouncing back and forth between them. It's nifty, and it gies us a chance to see the aftermath of some things.
So... is it intentional that I can only imagine Bastion as voiced by Nathan Fillion?
I can't help but think that "Brad" and "R. S. Bradley" might have some connection, even though I know that couples don't usually refer to each other by last name.
It would just be too (in)convenient if they were the same person, you know?
That's why I'm drawn to her. Sure her situation is in part her own fault because of her unreasoning dislike of "comfort horses." Yet at the same time I understand where she's coming from. Her life was screwy (haha, yeah, no) from the start because of one, and those kinds of things tend to stick with us, unreasonable or not. So really, I just want to be able to do the same thing Lumi is in this chapter - comfort her and try and make it better. She really needs someone who can and will help her.
Minus the whole part about being a sneaky changeling who might hurt her again with the additional deception.
So Luminescence based her appearance off Five Star? I remember her saying she hadn't been with a human before the beginning of the story so I'm assuming they aren't the same individual... I think.
Wow. Adding Sea Swirl really added some new dimensions to this Perhaps I should not be so surprised, but it really feels like tumbling down the rabbit hole. In a good way, naturally By the Gods, I really do love this Universe of yours.
3384385 You can't sympathize with an individual like Sea Swirl because all it does is add to the lie they've created for themselves. She is more of a tormenter than she is a victim.
Anyway, it's nice that I can feel this way about a character. You don't come across something like this often.
What lie? That all "comfort horses" deserve to be hated?
And of course I can sympathize. She feels hurt by something that happened in the past and has developed a persecution complex from it. She feels hurt by one and is transferring her perceived problems to all. Yes, it's irrational, but I know very well that kind of knee-jerk reaction. It is insanely hard to not lash out at something that seems similar to that which initially hurt you.
Unfortunately her eventual reaction was made all that much worse by Harry's handling of the situation. If he'd come out at the beginning as a Gentleman there would have been problems but his honesty might have given him a chance to reach her. As it was he only fed the fire by being exactly what she expected to find.
Um, am I missing something here? Big Mac, a comfort horse? Since when? Or is this Sea Swirl's biased attempt to rationalize why Cheerilee would like Wingman? If that's the case, then isn't she pretty much outright slandering Big Macintosh? I'd like to think the latter, because it makes Sea Swirl all the more unsympathetic with her persecution complex.
“Am I a bad pony?”
I'm probably gonna get a lot of hate for this, but my immediate thought was, 'Yes, yes you are. Especially for your irrational dislikes.'
“Would you watch where you’re… Five Stars?”
Oh shi--
Loving the interconnection between stories, DEL. As always: MOAR!
I keep wondering if I was too subtle with my hints.
“Darling, hasn’t Apple Bloom told you how strange Cheerilee’s been acting for the week?” Rarity asked.
“Well, yeah, but that’s just her heat pass...ing,” Applejack blinked, and looked at me for a moment, her eyes widening before narrowing into slits. “Wait a tootin’ minute! What ya’ll trying to say is that this... Gentleman... ain’t nothing but a fancy shmancy talk for a comfort horse!?”
“Well, you don’t have to put it that rudely,” Rarity replied with a slight huff. “Honestly, Applejack, you’d think that with how B—” and she was cut off immediately when the yellow earth pony bumped strongly into her, almost causing her to lose balance.
“Yer mah friend, Rarity, but if yah talk one more word ‘bout that, Ah’ll buck you hard to the next town!”
“Eeyup,” was all the red stallion said before moving behind the counter. Once in place, a few mares began approaching. Huh.
~Gentleman for Mares: Take the Heat, Gentleman
One odd thing I noticed though was the fact that he had increasingly been receiving stares from a lot of mares, who either passed by or were there to pick up their foals.I was pretty sure Big Macintosh here had some pretty interesting stories to tell.
Now, watching him leave, I wondered if talking to him (even if it was just regarding mundane things like the weather or Ponyville life) would have been a fruitful pursuit.
~Gentleman for Mares: Gentleman, Teach Me Something Please
“Please, darling, I am a grown mare,” Rarity replied. “I know about Sea Swirl’s situation. And I know my friends well enough to know that they are only acting like this because one is playing matchmaker and the other... well, I should not say more. Plus, I like you. So, that is that.”
Ohhh man I was so happy when I found out this is the same time frame as Gentleman For Mares . And even the mention of sea swirl made me ball up . PLEASE TELL ME SHE WONT BE HURT THIS STORY TOO
Its scary how Harry, a nice guy, gets so many people angry and annoyed with him. If Lumi really cares enough for Sea Swirl to get angry enough of the suffering he brought down on her, she may... well, get revenge.
Yeah, well, apparently, I haven't been too obvious on the whole comfort horse issue. I received word that a few people don't even remember it, even if there was a whole conversation dedicated to it.
3392545 I had wondered why AJ was so up tight about it but in the end I just passed it off as "old fashioned sensibilities/ethics"
Unfortunately your universe gets blended with Escort's Journal so every once and awhile I mix up the history of your worlds... It's annoying but it's a burden I'm willing to accept
So, when are we getting to the meat of the story, DEL? Dead changeling meat, that is
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Well, it is a lot of explaining and building, so that could be a factor.
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Soon.
Ok, now I'm really conflicted. Sea Swirl going from a "comfort horse" to possibly a changeling... Do you like traumatizing the poor filly?
Also...
dun Dun DUNNNNNNN...!
I like the tie-in to Gentlemen for Mares. Very nice!
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I'm not even doing anything to her. Yet.
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It's a bit important, actually.
Now this is what I like to see. The interconnection between your stories. The fact that they take place at the same time and the characters bouncing back and forth between them. It's nifty, and it gies us a chance to see the aftermath of some things.
So... is it intentional that I can only imagine Bastion as voiced by Nathan Fillion?
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A little bit. Lumi did describe him as handsome. Ruggedly? XD
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Yes, but straight from one deceptive interest to another. That's it, I'm stealing her for my own story.
dun dun DUNN
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lol, she's a background character. Use her how you like. ^_^
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I think she's just a little desperate.
Five Stars was Harry's first mare/lover. She's at the 'We Need Gentlemen' chapter.
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Yeah. I seem to have a penchant for that.
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lol, what?
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XD I'm not going to spoil, so I won't say anything.
OH SHI--
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Man, people are going to dislike me next chapter.
I can't help but think that "Brad" and "R. S. Bradley" might have some connection, even though I know that couples don't usually refer to each other by last name.
It would just be too (in)convenient if they were the same person, you know?
Woo! More chitin-y goodness!
... I'm drawing a blank on the name at the end, though. Guess I'll have to go skim through the other story for a bit.
Sea Swirl!! Good to see her again. Shame she's still really torn up about what happened at Neighagra.
...WHAT.
ohhhhhhhhhhhh shit!!!
*shots being fired*
Can't stand Sea Swirl, she's selfish and hateful.
Those who cannot set aside their own prejudice don't get to begrudge the prejudice of others.
Y'know the biggest problem I have with your writing habbits?
*reads chapter* Yeah, good chapter! Bring on the next!
*author's note says gonna be working on a chapter of another story*
WHAT?! NOOO! More of this story!!
*reads chapter from other story* Yeah, good chapter! Bring on the next!
Rinse and repeat.
*sigh* Ah well, good chapter by the way. Bring on the next!
Well well well, this just took a turn for the interesting. It's nice to see Sea Swirl still shook up over what happened.
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Well, Word of God: they aren't the same person.
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We Need Gentlemen is the chapter title.
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A little, yeah.
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Yeah... happens when I have two stories still active. Sorry. :P
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Shook up or horny? XD XD
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Thanks. That'll make things much faster.
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That's why I'm drawn to her. Sure her situation is in part her own fault because of her unreasoning dislike of "comfort horses." Yet at the same time I understand where she's coming from. Her life was screwy (haha, yeah, no) from the start because of one, and those kinds of things tend to stick with us, unreasonable or not. So really, I just want to be able to do the same thing Lumi is in this chapter - comfort her and try and make it better. She really needs someone who can and will help her.
Minus the whole part about being a sneaky changeling who might hurt her again with the additional deception.
I'm too nice for my own good.
So Luminescence based her appearance off Five Star? I remember her saying she hadn't been with a human before the beginning of the story so I'm assuming they aren't the same individual... I think.
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Wow. Adding Sea Swirl really added some new dimensions to this Perhaps I should not be so surprised, but it really feels like tumbling down the rabbit hole. In a good way, naturally
By the Gods, I really do love this Universe of yours.
3384385 You can't sympathize with an individual like Sea Swirl because all it does is add to the lie they've created for themselves. She is more of a tormenter than she is a victim.
Anyway, it's nice that I can feel this way about a character. You don't come across something like this often.
Nice.
Only one tiny typo.
Or maybe, 'Thank you, Lumi for making making an effort so we don't get swamped again'
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What lie? That all "comfort horses" deserve to be hated?
And of course I can sympathize. She feels hurt by something that happened in the past and has developed a persecution complex from it. She feels hurt by one and is transferring her perceived problems to all. Yes, it's irrational, but I know very well that kind of knee-jerk reaction. It is insanely hard to not lash out at something that seems similar to that which initially hurt you.
Unfortunately her eventual reaction was made all that much worse by Harry's handling of the situation. If he'd come out at the beginning as a Gentleman there would have been problems but his honesty might have given him a chance to reach her. As it was he only fed the fire by being exactly what she expected to find.
I may be a bad person, my immediate response was, "Yes, Sea Swirl, you are."
Still, interesting to see her show up, I love the story connection.
R. S. Bradley? You mean the climatologist?
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Um, am I missing something here? Big Mac, a comfort horse? Since when? Or is this Sea Swirl's biased attempt to rationalize why Cheerilee would like Wingman? If that's the case, then isn't she pretty much outright slandering Big Macintosh? I'd like to think the latter, because it makes Sea Swirl all the more unsympathetic with her persecution complex.
I'm probably gonna get a lot of hate for this, but my immediate thought was, 'Yes, yes you are. Especially for your irrational dislikes.'
Oh shi--
Loving the interconnection between stories, DEL. As always: MOAR!
mmmmmm changelings. Can't wait for the next chapter of feathered hearts.
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Even with less smexy time?
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Fixed that.
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I'm going to try to at least giver her some importance, and not just a visit. It may take a while though before the effects become apparent.
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I keep wondering if I was too subtle with my hints.
~Gentleman for Mares: Take the Heat, Gentleman
~Gentleman for Mares: Gentleman, Teach Me Something Please
~Gentleman for Mares: The Lady and the Gentleman
Make what you will.
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I'm having trouble with it.
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Nope, not too subtle at all, it's just me who's too thick-headed. NEVER MIND THEN.
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To be fair, you weren't the first to clarify on the issue. If pre-readers are wondering, then I may have been too subtle.
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That's a relief. (Although I still hate myself for not seeing that earlier)
But perhaps, if that's the case, a story detailing Big Mac's... *Ahem* 'Adventures' might be needed. *Hint, hint*
Also, get on Skype
Ohhh man I was so happy when I found out this is the same time frame as Gentleman For Mares . And even the mention of sea swirl made me ball up . PLEASE TELL ME SHE WONT BE HURT THIS STORY TOO
3387299 Well, you do have a talent for smexyness but that aside, I could really consider moving there. You make it and them all feel so real
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Well, you can guess she's still hurting, but for the future chapters... won't deny or confirm. :P
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XD Next step is smell.
OH MY GOD
SHIT IS ABOUT TO GET VERY REAL, VERY FAST
RUN HARRY
BEFORE SWIRL SEES YOU
RUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUN
I don't get the end, Five Stars was all this time a changeling? and the human is Harry?
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Its scary how Harry, a nice guy, gets so many people angry and annoyed with him. If Lumi really cares enough for Sea Swirl to get angry enough of the suffering he brought down on her, she may... well, get revenge.
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XD You'll find out next chapter... though I really stated that they aren't the same, but do look alike.
HOLD UP A MOMENT HERE!
that was harry
and lumi is five stars!?
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I'd explain, but I think the next chapter would clear it up.
3387332 Just a tad, then again it's obvious enough when you're actually looking for it.
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Yeah, well, apparently, I haven't been too obvious on the whole comfort horse issue. I received word that a few people don't even remember it, even if there was a whole conversation dedicated to it.
3392545 I had wondered why AJ was so up tight about it but in the end I just passed it off as "old fashioned sensibilities/ethics"
Unfortunately your universe gets blended with Escort's Journal so every once and awhile I mix up the history of your worlds... It's annoying but it's a burden I'm willing to accept