As a changeling, Lumi's life was simple: go to work, train a new changeling, and meet a new human to feed on. However, mysterious changelings deaths have her investigating to keep the peace between species. Set in the Gentlemanverse
Another good chapter. And another mention of diamond dog raids. You eventually you will have to elaborate on that, and actually define the different diamond dog factions. It would be kinda messed up if they where all bandits, and slavers.
The whole madness thing when they get their identities mixed up seems to be a common trait in all the fics I've read that have changelings. Would have thought that evolution would have given them a natural way to separate everything. Just hoping the newbie doesn't screw up to badly.
Another great chapter! So are there fewer humans living in Fillydelphia than in other cities? I seem to remember Wingman noticing lots of humans out and about in Gentlemen for Mares, even when he visits Ponyville. Maybe he is just more likely to notice his fellow Homo Sapiens that these changelings are.
I'm a little conflicted over stories like this. I like reading 'em, but part of me just wants to hold off for a couple months or so in the hope of a nice, huge bounty of chapters to go through.
I see you did a little editing. You went from Lumi showing Silverfly her filly form in it's adult state. To filling out citizenship paperwork. And then to Silverfly trying out new adult forms.
"No," Silverfly said almost immediately. " It has to be somebody different."
In the place where it's at currently it left me scratching my head. It's out of place.
I have mentioned once in GFM that some diamond dogs don't go raiding, but chill out in some bars in Neighagra. As for the diamond dog culture, a friend of mine wanted to take a shot at it, so I'm keeping the world-building on them as little as possible.
Well, I'm taking a guess (I don't read a lot of changeing stories) that the whole madness angle here is conflicting emotions between who they feed from and staying true to the changeling leadership. If so, just wanted to point out that the madness here is really more of identity crisis of large proportions.
Infiltrators usually have more than two identities, especially when they are fully active. But generally, they aren't conflicted on who they feed on. They know they are food, but at the same time, can still look at them like loved ones.
Um, just wanted to make sure since I can't find the quote, are you saying that the new published form:
“This is hard,” Silverfly complained after her third try, which I had shut down immediately. There was no way I was walking beside a changeling who turned her mane into shining gold.
“You’re still trying to be flashy,” I said. “Why not use an adult version of your filly form?”
“No,” Silverfly replied immediately. “It has to be somepony different.” She concentrated again. I expected another form to pop up, but her shoulders just sagged. She looked at me. “Was it hard to choose your cover image?”
I'm really really enjoying this. You have no idea. Plenty of backstories and all sorts of new information on how you perceive changelings. Really cannot wait for more now.
3349080 I like to think of them like the Orcs from Skyrim.
3349128 Well then zi hope he gives us details about them soon, and that he doesn't make virtually the entire race like that. There should be some good packs, some neutral packs, and some of the as the ones that are portrayed pretty much the same as every other story set in this verse they are mentioned in.
Just for curiosity's sake, if you were to handle their world building what would you do?
* Would be funny the first human that her cluster could acquire doesn't come from the Universe that the rest of the humans hale from but from a totally different one and he is just hiding out to avoid the monsters from his side from finding him. Sorry just the thought that popped into my head when reading this (not to mention he couldn't find himself to fear the Changelings due to having seen so much greater horrors but more in line of a combination of pity and self recognition). * Really good so far and keep up the good work.
For Diamond Dogs, I probably would have went for a story about a negotiator, hiring a bitch from a neutral pack as they try and explore what causes the rest of the packs to raid. I didn't go too much into culture.
Things that a no filly will usually ever learn until they become adults.
Typo?
Otherwise, great stuff. It's kind of creepy seeing how changelings are in high and important places. It makes sense from their stance, but at the same time, it's a big concern for the Equestrians and humans.
3351922 It's this petition. Please sign it and pass it around...well, sign if it you agree. If you don't, then just forget about it...but, please, pass it around?
OH GOD PLEASE NO DON'T PLEASE SHE'S SO INNOCENT PLEASE YOUR OMNIPOTENCE HAVE MERCY PLEASE OR I SWEAR TO GOD SO HELP ME IF YOU DO SOMETHING I WILL COMPLAIN PROFUSELY REPEATEDLY RIGHT HERE
Okay, I think I'm done.
WAAAAAAAGH CALL OF DUTY RAGE 360 NO SCOPE SWAG MLG HHHHHHNNNNNNNNNNNNNNGGG
I like the espionage angle of the story. Too many authors consider that element of Changeling culture a throw away thing. Something to mention for canon's sake and then forget whenever it's inconvenient. This one doesn't look set to make that mistake. This is gonna be good.
3356629 Yes, cut it off right after she start a relationship...I don't think it'll be too difficult to sneak onto a plane going to the Phillipines... anyway...damn, lost my train of thought.
3356603 BETTER BE FUCKING GOOD GOD I WILL DOWNVOTE THIS STORY IF IT AINT YOU HEAR ME LAHARL DO YOU HEAR ME HUH YEAH YOU DO THATS RIGHT BOY
):(
AND IF SHE GRTS ALL CLOPPY WAY TOO SOON I SWEAR TO GOD YOU WILL REGRET THE DAY FIMFICTION EVER PUT A DOWNVOTE OPTION YOU GOT THAT PUNK WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAWAAAGH
3357220 Calm your tits and let the man sing us the sweet, sweet song of erotic fan fiction with an actual, quality story to back it. He's done it before and he can do it again.
Another good chapter.
And another mention of diamond dog raids. You eventually you will have to elaborate on that, and actually define the different diamond dog factions. It would be kinda messed up if they where all bandits, and slavers.
Oh, this Silverfly character has got me praying for more! Character development, ho!
Don't you do it. Don't you dare! I will threaten to do unpleasant things if you take that adorable Silverfly and murder her!
The whole madness thing when they get their identities mixed up seems to be a common trait in all the fics I've read that have changelings. Would have thought that evolution would have given them a natural way to separate everything. Just hoping the newbie doesn't screw up to badly.
Another great chapter! So are there fewer humans living in Fillydelphia than in other cities? I seem to remember Wingman noticing lots of humans out and about in Gentlemen for Mares, even when he visits Ponyville. Maybe he is just more likely to notice his fellow Homo Sapiens that these changelings are.
I'm a little conflicted over stories like this. I like reading 'em, but part of me just wants to hold off for a couple months or so in the hope of a nice, huge bounty of chapters to go through.
3348700 I kinda see diamond dogs as the Hutts from Star Wars myself.
I see you did a little editing. You went from Lumi showing Silverfly her filly form in it's adult state. To filling out citizenship paperwork. And then to Silverfly trying out new adult forms.
"No," Silverfly said almost immediately. " It has to be somebody different."
In the place where it's at currently it left me scratching my head. It's out of place.
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I have mentioned once in GFM that some diamond dogs don't go raiding, but chill out in some bars in Neighagra. As for the diamond dog culture, a friend of mine wanted to take a shot at it, so I'm keeping the world-building on them as little as possible.
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Now I am tempted to do something to her.
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Well, I'm taking a guess (I don't read a lot of changeing stories) that the whole madness angle here is conflicting emotions between who they feed from and staying true to the changeling leadership. If so, just wanted to point out that the madness here is really more of identity crisis of large proportions.
Infiltrators usually have more than two identities, especially when they are fully active. But generally, they aren't conflicted on who they feed on. They know they are food, but at the same time, can still look at them like loved ones.
If that makes sense.
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The busiest cities are Manehattan, Ponyville, Canterlot, and Negihagra.
Ponyville is actually the odd one. Not a lot of humans live there, but it is a stop before Canterlot, which explains their numbers.
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I honestly wish I could publish s story fully finished, just to see how people would react.
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Um, just wanted to make sure since I can't find the quote, are you saying that the new published form:
the line is out of place?
Impressive
I'm really really enjoying this. You have no idea. Plenty of backstories and all sorts of new information on how you perceive changelings. Really cannot wait for more now.
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I like to think of them like the Orcs from Skyrim.
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Well then zi hope he gives us details about them soon, and that he doesn't make virtually the entire race like that. There should be some good packs, some neutral packs, and some of the as the ones that are portrayed pretty much the same as every other story set in this verse they are mentioned in.
Just for curiosity's sake, if you were to handle their world building what would you do?
* Would be funny the first human that her cluster could acquire doesn't come from the Universe that the rest of the humans hale from but from a totally different one and he is just hiding out to avoid the monsters from his side from finding him. Sorry just the thought that popped into my head when reading this (not to mention he couldn't find himself to fear the Changelings due to having seen so much greater horrors but more in line of a combination of pity and self recognition).
* Really good so far and keep up the good work.
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I thought that Silverfly's new form should've come before all that paperwork is all.
But then again I've been known to make a fool of myself.
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You mean like she could bring home the first human? Yeah! That's an awesome idea!
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Thanks dudes. ^_^
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I hope I'm semi-original with them. I didn't want to read too many changeling fics to 'inspire' me.
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For Diamond Dogs, I probably would have went for a story about a negotiator, hiring a bitch from a neutral pack as they try and explore what causes the rest of the packs to raid. I didn't go too much into culture.
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Um, I think it was during the paperwork. As they were filling it up, they needed her basic body down before they could fill it up.
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Glad you're enjoying it so far then.
Typo?
Otherwise, great stuff. It's kind of creepy seeing how changelings are in high and important places. It makes sense from their stance, but at the same time, it's a big concern for the Equestrians and humans.
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Corrected that, thanks.
So, the changelings have infiltrated those set up to catch changelings.
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Um, what?
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Which reminds me...
Thor in 14 days.
Um...Demon Eyes? Can I give you something?
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Hmm?
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Thank you for updating this. I absolutely love this story and, to be honest, I think this is better than Gentleman For Mares...
Yes, that is supposed to be a hug...a stupid one, but one nonetheless...
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^_^ Thanks. Happily accept the wonderful gift hug.
3351899 I swear I'd give you more if I wasn't already married to Cosmo...
Hey, can you do me a favor?
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Depends. What do you need?
3351922 It's this petition. Please sign it and pass it around...well, sign if it you agree. If you don't, then just forget about it...but, please, pass it around?
3351932
I'll give it some thought, but I will try to pass it around.
3351961 Thank you...again...
3351077 They have someling doing the registering of new ponies.
3351361 This movie, I like it!
ANOTHAH!
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OH GOD PLEASE NO
DON'T
PLEASE
SHE'S SO INNOCENT
PLEASE
YOUR OMNIPOTENCE
HAVE MERCY
PLEASE
OR I SWEAR TO GOD
SO HELP ME IF YOU DO SOMETHING
I WILL COMPLAIN
PROFUSELY
REPEATEDLY
RIGHT HERE
Okay, I think I'm done.
WAAAAAAAGH CALL OF DUTY RAGE 360 NO SCOPE SWAG MLG HHHHHHNNNNNNNNNNNNNNGGG
I like the espionage angle of the story. Too many authors consider that element of Changeling culture a throw away thing. Something to mention for canon's sake and then forget whenever it's inconvenient. This one doesn't look set to make that mistake. This is gonna be good.
"Metal Hive Malleable: Emotional Espionage Action".
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Yeah. More on that soon.
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You watched it already?
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Yeah, well... considering I'm known to do cultures and stuff... I don't think that'll be a problem
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Hey bud! You're doin good on this one!
3355004 lol I meant the first one. So this new one would be the 'ANOTHAH!'
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Look at it this way... more Silverfly!
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Thanks. ^_^
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Hehe. XD Another!
3356603 Eh, no prob. Just don't dissapoint anyone with endings. Like if she falls in love with a human, don't have them get together and cut it there.
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Hmm. I like that suggestion! XD
3356629 Yes, cut it off right after she start a relationship...I don't think it'll be too difficult to sneak onto a plane going to the Phillipines... anyway...damn, lost my train of thought.
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BETTER BE FUCKING GOOD
GOD
I WILL DOWNVOTE THIS STORY IF IT AINT
YOU HEAR ME LAHARL
DO YOU HEAR ME
HUH
YEAH YOU DO
THATS RIGHT
BOY
):(
AND IF SHE GRTS ALL CLOPPY WAY TOO SOON
I SWEAR TO GOD YOU WILL REGRET THE DAY FIMFICTION EVER PUT A DOWNVOTE OPTION
YOU GOT THAT
PUNK
WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAWAAAGH
3357220 Calm your tits and let the man sing us the sweet, sweet song of erotic fan fiction with an actual, quality story to back it. He's done it before and he can do it again.
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