A soldier has arrived in Equestria after being betrayed by his own military. He harbors much hatred after knowing his own comrades and friends have betrayed him. He begins to slowly let go of his hatred as he spends time with the peaceful ponies.
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I can understand.
There is no harmony without chaos.
I mean,there would be no death,or variation in life if not for chaos.Hell,life wouldn't even exist without chaos.
About Fucking time!
Good chapter by the way
I think it's great I just hope that the next one won't take as long but some times good things come to those who wait
It is good that you continued the story. I do hope to see more update more often and I am looking forward to seeing how Discord is going to reform.
Dragonfox
sunset shimmer
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Theoretically speaking, a human cannot get a pony pregnant. If it could, I would assume it would come out as a weird mutant monster baby, but I personally would rather it come out a pony. As for having a child, I think adoption would be their only way, other than getting a surget to have a baby.
well, i hope you ca make twilight into alicorn, also put equestria girls and put season 4 on to also put more mare in jame harem to make bigger and equestria girls: rainbow dash be in fall soon
4570459 I have kind of learned to get better at commas, since it had to be all self taught. I do plan of making all necessary corrections to the story when I have lots of down time.
Very poorly written, at the beginning. i felt that as time went on, it got gradually better. sex scenes felt rushed, and always, always the virgin thing. doing it once is okay, and adds the shock factor. but, every time? got a little irritating. still, very good idea, and a good piece. 9.5 / 10
4744244 Correct, I would happily murder someone if my marefriend asked.
Failed murder == NOOB!!
4747758 Monarchs actually have blue blood. :P
4796056 Still
4810337 yup that's my user name
And then Eris has BORN!
4953384 If it was, then it was by accident. I just wrote what felt right.
5033277 OH i see...What about this my friend?
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/75553/7/forbidden-fruit/vii Enjoy.
One of the best stories I read in a long time.
5152742 Personal view for me because many people probably have different reasons, but I see it as anthro ponies having a general view of their own world and never question 'what-if' so they aren't entirely open minded to things.
5347205 Yeah and my last blog post mentions that I'm going through this and trying to make it more coherent and understandable. I've withheld the newest chapter so I can make a better looking story out of this.
can you update this please
5393361 I have a chapter finished and ready for release, but I have now dedicated time to editing every single chapter so it doesn't look awful. Update may take a bit for release because of how many chapters there are, but I will try to have it out very soon.
5393490 I want moa!
Grammar needs some serious work in the earlier chapters, and you need to downsize some of the TLDR word walls. Not to mention most of the dialogue in the first several chapters is extremely wooden. It gets better in the later chapters but I really had to force myself though this to get to them. Remember, 70% of the exposition should be told through dialogue; but you need to find ways to write said dialogue so it doesn't sound like exposition.
5429578 Yeah, I've been slowly going through the drafts of these chapters so they would look nice.
This is just a little nitpick on my part, but snipers don't do demolitions, but spec. ops. do demolitions I believe.
Wow. No. Just no.
Is this a trollfic?
5486356 No, this not a trollfic.
Just how much research went into this story? You've gotten so much wrong, I'm being led to assume you're a troll with a dislike for light infantry troops.
5486434 Zero research went into this story. I am also not a troll. This was just something to start and see how to gauge myself as a writer for my later stories.
DAMN!!!! 79 chapters hidden?!?! you have earned my respect...most I see are 5-8 max and each is rather short (if serious...)
YOU have over 80...respect must be given when respect is due.
5486434 when you add something or someone new into a story, it would through everything out of wac. different situations, different outcomes.
5572940 Who is this directed towards?
5584444 It's just how I write. I do kind of miss reading a story that has an actual relationship, but I just write differently for each story.
5784758 I do not tolerate rape WHATSOEVER