The royal guards all glanced around in confusion as the unicorns of the palace had detected a massive surge of magic, and then silence. It was as though three powerful forces fought one another and two were abruptly silenced. However they came on guard when a red aura engulfed the door and it swung open to reveal the creature known as Jasper Montgomery strolling into the throne room. He then approached the throne and sat down.
One guard approached him, “What are you doing?!”
Jasper smirked as he took the seating stance reminiscent of one of the jarls from Skyrim, “Simple, I called The Gambit and triumphed. So I’m testing the new throne.”
“You’re lying!”
“Really,” Jasper snapped his fingers and the frozen princesses appeared before him, “They say differently.”
The guards looked to the statues then the human, “You’ve all been educated on the law. Plus I’m a guy with some arcane knowledge in my head thanks to Miss Sparkle. So to put it simply,” he then coldly stated, “Bow before me.”
The guards had no choice but to obey.
*
At that very same moment, Twilight was doing something that surprised everypony present. She was hurling books everywhere after cycling through them for information.
Rarity ducked to avoid an encyclopedia, “Do you think we should say something?”
Applejack dodged several hardcovers, “Ah wouldn’t recommend it.”
“AHA!!”
Rainbow hovered above her head, “What aha?”
Twilight placed a massive old looking tome down in front of them that had a book mark in it, “I knew Jasper had been doing something when Spike and I went to sleep every night.”
Twilight placed a hoof on the section of the magic book she had lent him, “See here! It seems he had been looking through various sections of the book for specific spells,” her eyes became focused, “The spell he used on the princesses was the petrification hex. With the fact that he possesses the Gem of Ages, it’s no wonder he could perform it so easily.”
Fluttershy raised a hoof, “Um…what is the Gem of Ages?”
Pinkie Pie pulled in a massive window that displayed the comment bar, “Yeah, everypony has been driven nuts on how little it was explained,” she tapped her chin, “Although the magic book clarifies how he knows spells, even though it was mentioned he borrowed it from you.”
Everypony just stared at her as she folded the window up and stuck it in her mane, “Just saying,” She then stared at the reader, “pay attention now.”
Twilight shook her head quickly, “Right…,” she then hoofed through one of the books that Spike seemed to have brought up from the basement, “Alright let’s see here…Gem of Ages….here we GO!”
Twilight then cleared her throat, “Now the Gem of Ages, like the Alicorn Amulet, is a powerful magical artifact. It also shares the Amulet’s unknown origin, no pony knows who made it or why. But the earliest recorded occurrence of its usage was when Starswirl the Bearded & his apprentice Nickel Flamel studied it in great detail. From Starswirl’s notes, he claimed the gem itself has the capability to make even a mundane pony become on par with the most skilled and powerful magic users. Thing is, he later discovered that the more it was used the more it would literally burn up a ponies life force.”
Rainbow Dash scratched her head, “So it’s like a double edged sword?”
Twilight nodded, “Exactly! But from the notes Spike left here, it seems Jasper encased it in the gold to eliminate the drawback. But it seems that it’s only dulling it, I noticed steam rising from his gauntlet which means his little weapon isn’t entirely perfect. The princesses were told of the gem after the research was concluded and sealed it away. I’m so glad Spike found these notes, now we might have a-” she then blinked, “I just realized something, where is Spike?”
Rarity nodded, “I was wondering that as well.”
Pinkie Pie stuck her head outside and looked around and gasped, “Girls…I found him.”
All the ponies rushed outside and Rarity shrieked. Spike was lying inside of the bush beside the front door, frozen in stone. A small sticky note was attached to his shocked expression; Twilight pulled the note from its place and read it out loud.
“Mama don’t like tattle tales.”
Twilight gritted her teeth in anger as the note combusted, “That does it! Girls, get the elements. We’re going to pay his highness a visit.”
*
If it had been several minutes earlier, the ponies could have found Jasper sitting in Canterlot. But that was not the case. He had long since teleported away and appeared at the Crystal Empire with a battalion of guards backing him.
He approached a crystal guard pony, “I’m here to see Prince Shining Armor and Princess Cadance,” the pony raised an eyebrow at him, “I’m the new king of Equestria and I am ordering you to let me pass.”
The guard narrowed his eyes, “King or not, you have little power here.”
Jasper smiled, “Your right.”
He then pointed his right index finger and there was a red flash. Where the guard had stood, there was now nothing but a pile of steaming armor. The Canterlot guards all widened their eyes as Jasper strolled into the castle. The human glanced around until his eyes fell upon his targets.
“Greetings to the happy couple,” he bowed, “I am Lord Jasper and I’m here for two simple requests.”
Both royals were skeptical at the fact as Cadance tilted her head, “And those would be?”
Jasper checked the finger nails of his left hand, “I’m here to repossess the Crystal Mirror and take it back into Canterlot custody,” he raised a finger, “I’m also here to ‘acquire’ the Crystal Heart.”
At the mention of the two requests both royal’s got on the offensive, “Why should we give you either human?”
Jasper gave a small smile, “Well you could either give them to me willingly,” a dangerous flash appeared in his eyes, “or I could take them.”
Shining advanced on the human, “Listen here. I don’t know who you think you are, but you come into OUR kingdom and threaten US? Give me one good reason why I shouldn’t blast you into the tundra!”
“Because if you lay a hoof upon the winner of The Platinum Gambit against Luna and Celestia,” he stepped forward, “Not only would you be attacking Equestria’s new king, but I will take it as a sign of war and retaliate so fast it will make your equine head spin.”
Shining backed up, “You declared the Gambit?”
Jasper gave a toothy smile, “Yes I did.”
“My lord, we have the mirror.”
Jasper turned to look at the reflective surface, “Excellent.”
Flash Sentry ran into the room and quickly bowed, “I apologize. I tried to stop them.”
Jasper raised a finger on his right hand, “Hold down the fort gents,” he blasted the glass which rippled with red energy, “I won’t be long.”
Jasper then stepped through.
*
The human emerged onto dirt and glanced around at the school before him, “Jeez, it was pretty accurate.”
With no hesitation he walked up the stair with a powerful stride and opened the door into the inactive hallways. He scratched his chin in slight annoyance at the fact that classes were still in session, but this was dismissed when he looked to his left and noticed that a school assembly was in progress. He then began to walk through the hall whistling Twisted Nerve from Kill Bill. As he passed by several lockers he stopped when he noticed a picture of the girls at the Fall Formal. He raised an eyebrow, and then he blasted the case into oblivion. He continued to whistle his tune as his pace quickened. Soon he came to the gym doors and threw them open hard shocking every student and teacher present. He casually strode among the shocked faces ignoring the teachers who were yelling at him. He walked onto the stage and approached Principal Celestia.
“What is the meaning of this!? Who are you?!”
Jasper responded by pushing her off the stage and into the crowd.
Shocked murmurs and gasped were heard as he took the microphone, “Good day Canterlot High. I am Jasper Montgomery, the new King of this world and the other one you’re all so familiar with. Now I have one question,” he scanned the crowd, “where is the one known as Sunset Shimmer? You realize you all are harboring a traitor to a kingdom right? I’m willing to grant you all leniency if you bring her forward.”
The room was silent.
Jasper merely smiled, “I was hoping you would do that,” he raised his right hand toward the ceiling as every light began to erupt into sparks and the metal above began to tremble, “Bring her forward so she can answer for her crimes!”
Something moved in the corner of his eye and he zeroed in on six girls making a break for the doors. He smirked and appeared in front of them.
“Leaving so soon?”
Sunset Shimmer backed up as the girls attempted to block her form Jasper, “Oh come of it.”
With a mere wave of his right hand the girls were pinned to the walls as Sunset was levitated off her feet, “So miss ex-student. Let’s have a little chat about what you've learned during your enrollment shall we?”
Sunset struggled against the magical grasp as she was pulled screaming from the school and back through the portal.
YES i love this story Good job
Dayum. Keep going my good sir!
oh dear....
hot damn! so spike is in stone now? huh he kinda deserved it.....i don't say that often.....
it keeps getting better and better!
King Jasper, *places hand over heart and bows head* I pledge service to you. All hail Lord Jasper! The true High King!
*looks at crowd not doing anything and pulls hand gun* DO IT! *Crowd shrieks before hailing King Jasper* Much Better. I hope to serve you more, my liege. *bows*
Yay!
More more MOTHERFUCKING MORE!!!!!!!!
*grinding teeth*
He's breaking so many of my imaginary policies and rules regarding intra-dimensional travel. I love it, gives me something to day-dreaming of solving with brute force while reading
I just... Jasper is new best human in Equestria.
Jumping dimensions to dimensions and ruling it like a boss.
FUCK THE POLICE!
Well shit. Now what?
Also
Whelp. Seems like shimmer wasn't the only pony to go through the portal.
YES! PURE AWESOME! Let him see his old friend and show him what he's done. After that I would like 1 of two things to happen.
1.(This one would suck) His friend goes into equestria, joins the girls and gets him to step down or turn him to stone. (In which case a sequel is in order)
2. HE FUCKING RULES EQUESTRIA WITH AWESOMENESS!
I would LOVE the second one.
HaHaHa! I like this human, he is the most glorius and better than the other humans!
Yeah!!! Hey can I keep sunsetty?? I love messing with peoples minds!! Yay for partially legal torture!!
Win Jasper win!!!
This guy has freakin planned everything out he can not LOSE. YAY
i just realised that he asked the location of twilights crown in the first chapter
cant lose
I have a feeling he will either conquer all of Equestria by the end of this or be dethroned and exiled all the while leaving the entire world with a system of better policies and shit than there was in place before.
Seriously, where is Discord?
No way in hell is the master of chaos just gonna let Jasper just wander around without doing something about it.
Dear god...ALL OF MY YES!!!
You sir are a genius!
6/5 mustaches!
3283423 Discord would probably give him a pat on the back and offer to be hi peronal honour-guard.
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well actually jasper is basically a being of pure chaos right now, so I have no problem believing that discord would do nothing about it.
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Like hell he wouldn't do anything about it. He's supposed to be the embodiment of chaos and you think he's going to just let some punk kid show him up and not respond?
He may not like either of the princesses or anyone else for that matter but he does see at least one other pony as his friend, and if you think he won't try to protect Fluttershy then clearly you've never met an individual who has been driven to the edge. To protect the one pony about whom he actually gives a damn he will bring Hell with him and all other manner of terrible beasties.
He is a God of Chaos.
Jasper is a mortal who tugged on the tail of his better.
It will not be pretty.
I wanna go to the part where there's guns!
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>Implying discord actually gives two shits about fluttershy and wasn't just doing it because if he didn't he would never get out of that rock
Draeconeci are probably social creatures and crave attention, he'd probably just cause unadulterated chaos every time jasper left to go do something, alternatively he could just take over the crystal empire and do his chaos thing there.
I'll get the fourth wall glue... again! Don't worry, it's magic-based adhesive not bio-based. Suck that, Krastos.
The badass level of Jasper Montgomery is rising. last chapter it was 9001. now it's more like 90001 (so... It's over ninety thousaaaand!)
Welp. that takeover happened. Time to start a rebellion!
Holy crap.
3283577 Jasper doesn't need to harm ALL the elements. Just Twilight would be sufficient.
After which, he could place Flutters under Discord's supervision, thereby gaining his loyalty.
HOORAY FOR HOSTILE TAKEOVERS YAAAAAAYYYY!
This is very good. Also here is my opinion on if discord is brought in. Unless Jasper does something that completely effects Fluttershy he wont do anything.
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Can you prove beyond any doubt that he doesn't actually care about her? Unless you can we must assume that what he said according to the show was genuine. It may have been forced, but that does not make it untrue. Also the assumption that he would do stuff whenever Jas leaves is foolish itself. You seem to think Discord would fear him because of the Gem, which I think is preposterous. Discord will do what he pleases gem or no gem and Jasper can do nothing about it.
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Say Jasper does harm Twilight and removes her from the game and then hands her over to Discord to ensure some form loyalty you fail to take into account what Fluttershy herself will do in this situation. Last time something dared mess with her friends she stared a grown dragon into submission. Everyone always forgets that while Fluttershy is squishy she has steel in her core. She won't stop until her friends are ok and she'll force Discords hand. He either helps or he can go back to the way it was before.
3283758
you're putting to much power into discord, Celestia and Luna beat him before, Jasper beat Celestia and Luna. The logical conclusion to this thought would be that therefore jasper could beat discord.
lol their trying to use harmony to get rid of a leader that did it smartly and not through chaotic magic, that technically is like trying to cause chaos because he followed the rules of the challenge and stripping him of the throne would kinda be chaos
NVM rule under jasper seems better than I thought... as long as you don't piss him off. I thought he would just force every pony into building him a better palace or millions of shrines or something. Long live the king!
3283745 HOOOOORRRAAAAYYYYY!!!!!!
3283780 They had to use the EoH. A source of power that runs counter to DIscord. they probably had to find a way to trick him so they could win. If Discord does have one weakness it is his arrogance. However fool him once shame on you, fool him twice shame on him. He will not likely fall for it a third time.
He moved the sun and moon themselves and he warps reality at a whim.I don't give him to much power, instead you give him to little. Also your logic is faulty. Jasper got lucky against Tia and Luna because they underestimated him. Discord is not likely to make the same mistake. He'll play for keeps and then hold the "I saved the world" card over Tia and Luna's heads for years.
Also your next argument maybe why he didn't try to stop them from preventing petrification the second time and the answer is quite simple. He couldn't. The way the EoH appear to work is that it creates a unified field in which nothing that is not in pure harmony can find purchase. It separated the Nightmare from Luna, It blocks and erases chaos. It is pure harmony, however it must rely on ponies to activate.
"But," you cry, "why doesn't he just do something to them while they power up!"
You think the elements glow before firing to look pretty? My guess is that it is actually a shield to prevent such a thing from happening. They are the most powerful thing on the planet bar nothing. Underestimate them at your peril.
Make the Equestria girls world suffer! Mahahaahah!
So, he is suicidal then if he's using an artifact that uses life force. Also, you stated that gold helps magical penetration. So, the Gem of Ages life draining force shouldn't be hindered but enhanced instead. The Gem would be the dam and the water the life force, the gold being the dynamite. All three together and you have next to nothing by the end of it.
So he's overpowered, suicidal, and 'evil'. Yup, poster boy gary stu. Called it.
Pinkie broke the fourth wall! I knew Pinkie was crazy, but I didn't think she was Deadpool crazy!
I'm sorry, I couldn't resist.
Lord Jasper, ladies and gentlemen, Lord Jasper!
I can't hear you! *hesitant applause*
I CAN'T HEAR YOU, YOU FUCKING PEASANTS! YOU BETTER START APPLAUDING!
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And 3283869 ...
Please, find a better reason to hate him than just "he is overpowered, grrr."
If this story was about the Mane 6 defeating Lord Jasper, you'd be congratulating the writer for making a villain that didn't fall to the mistakes of his predecessors and actually posed a threat to the Elements. But because he's the protagonist, you hate him and declare him to be a Gary Stu. Of course.
there's no word to describe how juicy is this story.
3283758 Again, you fail to consider how far Discord woulld go to protect Fluttershy.
If Jasper approached Discord and promised not to harm Flutters, provided he be kept away from her friends, He would do so BEFORE 'removing' Twilight, so as to avoid facing the wrath of Fluttershy.
3284111 Ah yes, the loyal fans rising up to defend the honor of their 'Lord Jasper'.
But of course I call him a Gary Stu. I don't hate him because he's the protagonist, that's just details in the contract. Part of it, but not the whole deal. He goes to Equestria because Celestia and Luna want to teach him the value of Friendship, him over anyone else. Then proceeds to construct a gauntlet in under a day using gold which apparently can bypass magic and in an intricate design using only a beginners book. The normal process for a beginner to make a regular gauntlet is three weeks. Next he finds a book about a gem that makes him stronger than both Princesses combined. Stop me if this is starting to become overkill.
Now each villain in the past did come close to defeating the Mane Six if it weren't for one thing (excluding Nightmare Moon): outside interference. Discord had broken them apart completely and if it weren't for Celestia they would've lost. With the Changelings they did lose. With Sombra, he had been sealed away in perpetual darkness for a thousand years. If that doesn't drive anyone mad, I don't know what would. He had traps laid out that would've cemented his victory if it weren't for Spike. The last thing they had in common was the fact that they didn't have the show to watch to know how things would turn out. Of course Jasper wouldn't make the same mistakes because he was aware of his predecessors. Nightmare Moon didn't have anyone before her, Discord wasn't was aware of what happened but wasn't aware of the Friendship reports used to bring Twilight back, and Sombra wasn't aware of his predecessors so he couldn't do anything. They also didn't posses the immediate trust of the ponies.
But maybe I'm being a bit unfair. How about this, I'll give you a chance at trying to convince me he's not a Gary Stu. Go ahead, I'm rather curious at how you could possibly defend him.
3283869 Not necessarily, a Gary Stu usually has little to no flaws how ever Jasper has some notable flaws they're also typically loved by almost everybody or pony... Jasper is just using his intelligence, books, and plenty of time to formulate a plan and because he is borderline suicidal means he either has little to lose or is over confident with his ability to quell the draining of his 'life force' he also has social problems. He seems more like a sociopath rather than a Gary Stu, I can see where you are coming from though.
3283856
why wouldn't jasper just lock discord back up in stone before he does anything? In addition, why do you care so much? In the end the only opinion that matters is that of the author's.
3284252
I am not a "loyal fan." I'm not going to defend a character that I'm losing faith in as each chapter comes out. I am going to say that I still have some faith in the author, unlike you.
Oh, make no mistake, Jasper is at least eighty percent of the way to the Gary Stu line. But he's not there yet.
3284322 Then here's the twenty percent. He says the gold helps negate magic, that's why the Guards wear it to help bypass enemy spells. So how does a gauntlet made of gold supposed to channel the very thing it's meant to negate?