Half A Day in the life Part 1 (Edited)
Kingdom Hearts of Harmony
By Steel Soul
A Day In a Life Part 1
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Canterlot: Residential Quarters- Sora’s Room…
Sora couldn’t remember the last time he had slept so good. Despite being on the verge of waking up the young stallion couldn’t help but coo softly as he snuggled against the warmth of the covers, pulling his soft furry pillow closer to himself as he did so. He could feel the heated beams of Celestia’s sun shine gently upon his caramel muzzle, finding the extra warmth inviting. With a contented sigh the stallion blissfully pulled his snoring pillow in even closer, allowing it to do the same to him as they both nuzzled into each other affectionately.
Wait...
Sora’s eyes shot open as they soon came in contact with a similar pair of sleepy ocean blue orbs staring right back at him. His mind began to work overtime as it tried to make sense of what was happening right in front of him. He knew who it was that was laying beside him. Pinkie Pie was a hard pony to ever forget. Despite this, his body refused to move an inch, that was until he felt the pink pony pressed her muzzle gently against his neck as she muttered one simple word.
“Strawberries~.”
“Gah!!”
The young stallion’s body jump started all at once, the boy pushing himself away from the pretty pink pony, inadvertently causing himself to tumble out of the bed in a jumble of silk and fur as he took the covers with him. The poor boy landed upside-down, slumped with his back against the side of the bed and his golden-crown-marked hindquarters straight in the air.
Pinkie peered over the side of the bed with a look of genuine concern upon her features. Though, every so slightly, there was a hint of mirth behind her eyes. “Gee Sora, are you ok? That one looked like it hurt.”
Sora was at a loss for words, as he tried to make since of what happened. The only words he could even think to say was “Pinkie Pie?”
“Yep Yep its me!” The pink pony in question had hopped out of bed and had made her way towards the downed stallion. She twisted her head in an unbelievable manner so that she could see him from his point of view. “I don’t think ponies are supposed to get out of bed like that silly. Let's get you back on your hooves, hmm?”
Without waiting for a response, Pinkie Pie placed her head against the side of his flank and gave him a slight nudge. His body tilted to the side before falling over, allowing his now thoroughly aching neck to have some relief. With some difficulty the stallion rose to a vertical base, and slowly began to stretch each of his sore limbs. When he felt that nothing was seriously damaged he turned to the pink party pony, a very noticeable blush quite evident on his furry features.
“Pinkie?! What are you doing in my room!?”
Pinkie blinked once before placing a hoof on her chin and humming. It looked as though, at least to Sora, that the mare really had to give the question some serious thought. “Let me think…” After a few long moments the hyper pony raised a hoof in the air. “Oh yeah, now I remember! I had gone into the royal kitchens to obtain my mid-midnight snack. I think I had…two cupcakes, a chocolate bar, a bowl of ice-cream…and…a cup of sprinkles. I decided to cut back last night. I need to keep my girlish figure after all.
“Anyhoof, I think I lost my way back to my room. Which is strange because usually I never lose my way around the castle, but I did last night for some reason. I must have been very tired. Maybe I should’ve had that extra piece of lemon pie. Well since I was lost I decided to just go into any old room and sleep in the bed there. I’m sure nopony would have minded. That’s when I came into this room and found you in the bed of all ponies. That’s when it hit me. I said to myself ‘Pinkie. You must have ended up in Sora’s room’ and I answered myself saying ‘well duh. Of course I did. What other pony has a mane as spiky and chocolate looking as him’.”
Sora gave the mare a ponited look. “Okay...but why were you in my bed Pinkie?”
The pink pony smiled sheepishly, a small guilty blush forming on her cheeks “Well you see…I was going to leave but...”She trailed off to look at the bed. “Looking at you sleep made me sleepy even more, so I just climbed in bed with you.”
The Keyblade Wielder blinked a long and slow blink before asking, “You jumped in bed with me?”
“I jumped into bed with you.” Pinkie’s innocent smile conveyed nothing but the truth.
“Just like that?”
“Just like that.”
Sora pinched the bridge of his muzzle with his hoof, which he was surprised that he could do. It was a completely childish and innocent reason to be sure, not that he was one to judge, but still, it was one that Sora could not even hope to comprehend.
Also, she had cuddled him. CUDDLED HIM! He had done the same to her too, but he didn't know it was her really. Still, her soft fur felt really good against his own. He could even remember the scent of bubble gum shifting up into his nostrils. It felt very-
The blush returned to his cheeks with a vengeance. He needed a subject change. “Ok, that aside Pinkie, why did you say Strawberry?”
The party pony shrugged. “Not too sure why. I think they thought it would have been funny.”
Sora raised an eyebrow. “They? They who?”
Pinkie tilted her head. “Who?”
Sora deadpanned. “Yes. Who?”
“Who is on first silly.” Pinkie Giggled
“Wait," Sora was really confused now "…What?”
“No. What is on second. Who is on first.” Pinkie said matter-o-factly.
Sora stared blankly at her for a few seconds before turning towards the bathroom. “I’m going to go take a bath.”
Pinkie clapped her hooves together happily. “Oh goodie! I think I’ll join-“
Sora quickly shoved her out of his room on her haunches before she could even finish what she had wanted to say. “See you downstairs Pinkie.” With that he closed the door and locked it for good measure.
“Oh. OK.” Pinkie called after him smiling brightly. “See ya later Sora!”
~
Canterlot: Public Dining hall…
Even after the nice and hot shower Sora had taken, which he had to admit, was the most pleasant shower he had ever had in his life, this morning’s events were still playing fresh in his mind. The caramel stallion sighed as the blush on his face returned, remembering the feeling of her soft fur against his own and the touch of her hot breath against his neck. He didn’t really know why, but he knew enough that If anyone caught wind of what had transpired, he was sure he wouldn’t be able to hear the end of it. Still, he really didn’t want to deal with it now, especially since his hunger was taking over him.
Following the lovely scent of pancakes and other baked goods, Sora found himself in a rather large dining hall. Many ponies, both in armor and service attire, were busy lining up to gather a plate full of breakfast for themselves. It kind of reminded Sora of his school’s cafeteria, but with much more edible looking food, and a dining area that was just too grand not to be noticed.
Not one to pass up a free meal, the stallion set off to gather a tray of vittles. His breakfast of choice: three stacks of pancakes, an apple, a donut, and a cup of orange juice. He balanced the tray quite easily between his teeth, smiling broadly as he did so. Maybe some food would get his mind off of-
“HEY SORA! OVER HERE!!”
The stallion turned to find a very excited Pinkie Pie waving him over quite enthusiastically. He also noticed that the pink pony had surrounded herself with a ridiculous amount of food. On her left was a blushing Fluttershy, who seemed to have just now caught wind of the stallion’s presence, and was slowly inching herself under the table to hide said blush. In front of the pink pony on the other side of the table was Rarity, the white unicorn tapping a hoof right beside her indicating that there was a seat open for him.
“Ah...Hey..." He had not wanted to meet the pink party pony so soon after their ‘morning’ together, especially since he really didn’t get a chance to explain to her why she shouldn’t tell anyone about it. Heck! He didn't even know where to begin. Hopefully she was kind enough to not say anything about it. With a nervous whimper, the stallion sat beside the white unicorn, trying his best to avoid eye contact with the pink pony as much as possible.
Rarity gave the stallion a coy smile as he sat, her eyelashes fluttering a little as she spoke. “So did you sleep well darling?”
Sora went rigid. W-What’s with that question? She doesn’t know, does she? Pinkie didn’t tell them did she? Please tell me Pinkie didn’t tell them. “Ah! Y-yes…n-no…I did…didn’t….It was…ah…Interesting…”
Rarity tilted her head slightly. “Darling? Are you ok? You seem a bit skittish.”
He nearly dropped the fork he was holding before looking towards the white mare. “Y-Yeah, everything is fine. Nothing weird happened at all.” His eyes shifted back and forth after he had talked.
“Are you sure darling? You’re acting a little funny?”
He sunk into his chair a little mumbling something incoherently under his breath. He really felt he was screwer then screwed at this point and he decided that the truth would be for the best. He was about to open his mouth to tell just what had happened this morning but was beaten to the punch by the pink party mare.
“Aw don’t worry about him Rarity. He’s just sulky that he had to leave the bed early that’s all.”
Sora turned to face Pinkie Pie who, in turn, had a bright smile on her face directed towards him. She didn’t tell them about what happened. More than that, she had covered for him. Holy crap, the endless stream of contemplations that her lie provided caused him to question not only about her, but the entire event that morning as well.
Sora’s eyes went wide as she winked at him and giggled.
And that's my cue to never get on this mare’s bad side ever.
He turned to face with food and eat automatically, a tinge of pink evident on his cheeks from both embarrassment and irritation.
Before Rarity could inquire any further on what the heck was going on between the two ponies, a bundle of cyan fur had made her way to the table and sat beside Pinkie Pie, cutting off any conversation prier. As Sora finally took notice of her, he could see, just by looking at her, that she didn't take mornings very well. Her mane was still unkept and frazzled and her eyes were still a bit bloodshot.
“Oh! Well good morning sunshine.” Rarity cooed. “And did we have a restful night.”
The cyan pony grumbled incoherently, waving a dismissing hoof at her friend.
Sora smiled broadly. “Not really a morning person, are ya?”
Rainbow’s scowl deepened at the sound of Sora’s voice. “Nopony asked you Spikey.”
Yep. Sora said within his mind, his smile became a bit more forced. Don’t think she likes me very much still.
Fluttershy, who had been quiet up until now, raised her hoof indicating that she wanted to speak. “Um, If you don’t mind me asking, has anypony seen Twilight and, um, Applejack?”
“Applejack set off to wake up Rainbow Dash and retrieve Twilight from the Library.” Said Rarity before shaking her head disapprovingly. “We told her not to stay in there all night but I doubted she would have listened to us anyway.”
“I guess Twilight really likes to study, huh?” Sora said with an amused smile. He had already figured out that the unicorn was one to always hit the books. While impressive, late night studying was never really his thing.
Rarity giggled. “Well, that’s our studious little Twilight for you. Applejack should have her back in two shakes of a lamb’s tail, so do not fret.”
Sora nodded and he turned to face Rainbow. To his surprise, she had been staring at him. Having caught her in the act had caused her brow to crease in an angry scowl as well make her cheeks turn a lovely shade of red.
“What?!” Her voice was as sharp as ice. More then likely at being caught by him then anything else. “Gonna gloat about that prank you did yesterday?”
“N-No...” Sora stuttered before an ideal clicked. “Actually, I was, ah, just wondering what you do.” When her brow creased further he looked away, letting the tip of his hoof scratch at his cheek. “I-I mean what do you do for work? I know Twilight is a librarian. I think Applejack works on that apple farm. Pinkie Pie works in a bakery. Rarity works in fashion and Fluttershy…” He turned to the yellow pegasus in question. “Actually what do you do Fluttershy?”
The yellow pegasus blushed bright red as she met the stallion’s sky blue eyes. “Uh…Well…I take care of animals.”
Sora raised an eyebrow. “Really? You mean like dogs and cats?”
“Well y-yes among other things…Like bears and hedgehogs and tigers…”
“What? Really?” Sora smiled brightly. “That’s amazing Fluttershy! Being around all those animals must be pretty cool.”
Fluttershy’s ears perked up and she smiled as well. “Oh yes, it is amazing. I take care of the ones that are hurt or sick you see. If an animal comes to me in pain, they really need tender loving care or else they don’t heal their wounds correctly.”
“Wow, so you’re an animal nurse. That’s pretty sweet.” Sora tapped a hoof to his chin. “I actually know a few animals as well. There was this lion named Simba. He was pretty cool. Oh! And a deer foal named Bambi. Oh and-“
“Hey!” Rainbow cut him off. “I thought you wanted to know what I did!”
Sora’s focus turned from the yellow pegasus to the cyan one, whose glare seemed to intensify by the second. “Oh! Ah, S-sorry Rainbow.”
“Gah! Just forget it. Not like I was going to tell you anyway.” Rainbow Dash huffed coldly.
Rarity’s eyebrow shot up. “So why bring it up at all darling?”
Rainbow’s eyes bulged. “I...Ah...W-Well…F-Forget it! I’m outta here!”
She slammed her hoof on the table, apparently trying to make a point, but in doing so, she hit the edge of Sora’s tray, causing his cup of juice to rocket upward. All eyes followed the glass until they all cringed as the cup landed face down upon the cyan pony, spilling its contents all over her head.
Sora blinked a few times before getting up. “I, ah...H-Here let me get you some…”
“Forget it!” Rainbow Dash zoomed away in a hurry, leaving a slightly damp rainbow trail behind her.
The stallion sighed as he watched her go. "Somehow this is gonna be my fault, isn't it?" He asked as the other three mares gave him an apologetic look.
~
Canterlot Train station…
Rainbow yawned and stretched as she waited with the others at the train tracks. “Geez. I could have flown to Ponyville and back with the time it’s taking the stupid train to come.”
“Oh stop your belly aching RD.” The southern drawl of Applejack told her, causing Rainbow to huff impatiently. “The train will get here when it gets here. Besides, riding together is a lot more fun right?”
“Yeah it would be…” She scowled. “If it weren’t for him…”
Their gaze fell upon a caramel stallion, who was conversing with three of the other Elements of Harmony, plus one familiar female guard. He was attempting, and failing miserably, to pull away from Dream Drop's grasp while both Fluttershy and Rarity were trying to assist the stallion in any way that they could. Pinkie sat back on a bench and enjoyed the show, eating her way through a bag of popcorn.
“Now that ain’t fair Rainbow. Yeah he’s a little odd but you’re not even giving him a chance. He really seems like a nice pony.”
“But he’s hiding something from us!” Rainbow said, gritting her teeth together. “Colts who hide something are the worst.”
Applejack had never seen her friend act in such a manner before. Sure she knew that she had some trouble with the colts from Flight School, but this seemed different. “Rainbow…are ya’ll ok? It’s not like ya to treat somepony like this.”
Rainbow turned to face the farm mare, her eyes widening slightly. However, they quickly turned into a glare, hiding whatever she was thinking. Just as she was about to retort, the sound of a whistle signaled the coming of their ride back to Ponyville. Rainbow, seeing this, closed her mouth and turned away from her friend, walking towards the slowly approaching train. Applejack reached out to call her back, to know if her suspicions were true, but her voice failed her.
The way Rainbow looked just then, it was almost like the way ah looked when…
“ALL ABOARD!!”
Applejack looked towards the now opening train doors. With a heavy sigh she followed after her friends. She was never one to pry in somepony’s business, but she couldn’t leave her friend the way she was. Still she felt some time was needed before she even tried to talk to her again. With that line of thought she boarded the train, allowing the doors to close behind her.
~
The train ride back to Ponyville was, in Sora’s opinion, the most uneventful thing to happen to him since he came to Equestria. Being curious, and a little bit bored, he decided to have a talk with Twilight to find out if any new piece of information surfaced in her late night venture. It was all for naught however, since the only information Twilight gathered was the fact that Heatless were indeed seen in the earliest years of Equestrian history, or at least that’s what the book she found had led her to believe.
With a sigh the stallion sat himself upon one of the chairs, lowered his head, and closed his eyes. His thoughts turned to the white alicorn he had spoken with last night. He had gained only a little information from their encounter and it was his own fault. He hadn’t expected her to say what she said. That he wasn’t a failure.
Sora frowned. It didn't matter if that was what she thought or not. He was a failure. At least...in the eyes of the Keyblade Exam. He had failed the test, nearly losing his own life in the process by being tricked by Origination thirteen. Sure nobody could have known that Xemnas would have been there but still, if it wasn’t for Riku back then…
Actually if it wasn’t for Riku back during their first fight with Xemnas he would have lost for sure. If he was being really honest with himself; Riku had helped him almost throughout his journey, even when he had took the form of Xemnas’s heartless. Riku had always been there to protect him.
“I'm I really just useless by myself?”
“Um…”
Sora looked to his side to find a yellow pegasus looking up at him from behind her pink mane. Where did she come from?
“Oh! Hey Fluttershy." He smiled gently towards the mare." Can I help you?”
Fluttershy’s gaze shifted down and she scuffed her hoof along the floor nervously. “Um, w-well, that is...I…What I mean is…” The young mare breathed deeply before asking, “Sora, are you ok?”
“Huh? Oh. Well yeah. I'm Fluttershy. Just thinking things over.” He forced a smile. “I’m right as rain, so don't worry.”
“Oh...Ok. But...I-I’m sorry but you just seemed so, well, down…”She lowered her head even lower. “I guess I was wrong…sorry for bothering you…”
Sora felt a stinging sensation in his chest. Here he was being, well, sort of a jerk to a girl that just wanted to make sure that he was ok. Without saying a word, the stallion shifted over, letting a bit to room for her to sit next to him. “Well, I guess I’ve been pretty down.”
Fluttershy looked back up at him, her eyes gazing deep into his own. “R-Really?”
“Yeah, maybe I’m homesick…I’m not too sure.” It wasn’t a total lie.
She looked at the seat and then slowly climbed to sit next to the caramel stallion. “Well, if you want, we can talk about where you come from. It helped me when I first moved to Ponyville. All my animal friends made me feel so welcomed and at home in my little cottage.”
Sora smiled. “If you're sure it would help, I guess I can tell you a bit.”
“Oh yes I promise it will.” She leaned in a bit towards him, the blush on her cheeks brightening. “I mean, um, if that’s ok with you…”
“Hmm…ok then…so where to begin...?”
~
Ponyville Train station…
Sora jumped out the door of the train, stretching both his front and hind legs. “I love riding trains but geez was it cramped.”
Fluttershy smiled at the stallion as she followed after him. She was happy to have at least a little peek into what his life was like where he had lived; she wasn’t even mad that Rarity had made herself a part of the conversation soon after spotting them together. She was just happy to see a notable difference between how the stallion was feeling before and now. Still, she couldn’t help but feel that something was still bothering him a great deal.
Rarity followed suit, exiting after the butter-yellow pegasus. “Yes a bit confining indeed. Still, it beats having my mane ruined when carried in a pegasus chariot.”
“Says you!” Rainbow quipped, hovering just above the white unicorn. “Nothing beats flying Rarity. Nothing!”
“A day at the spa beats flying any day of the week my dear Rainbow Dash!” Rarity retorted.
“That girly fru-fru stuff?! Flying beats that, hooves down.”
Rarity huffed. “It is not girly fru-fru. Being prim and proper is just natural for a lady. ”
“Naw. I’m pretty sure I'm ok not being in a dress all the bucking time.”
Before Rarity could even come back with a proper retort Twilight stood between them. “Girls, we can save the debate for later. Right now there are more pressing matters.” She turned to Sora smiling. “Sora, I think a place for you to sleep is in order too.”
The stallion raised an eyebrow. “Well, can’t I just sleep on your couch like last time?”
The lavender unicorn shook her head. “I am sorry Sora, but I need that work space for my research. Besides, I’m sure you don’t want to sleep on some old dusty couch.” She placed a hoof to her chin. “Now then where can you sleep...?"
“WITH ME!” Rarity all but screamed. She paused, noticing how loud she was, and then coughed politely into her hoof. “What I mean is, I have more than enough room. He can sleep in the boutique’s guest chambers. It’s just piling up with dust anyway.”
Applejack gave her a look, a look only reserved for her, before looking between the other mares. “Anypony else feel like that’s a bad idea? Anypony?” Everyone, including Pinkie Pie, raised their hooves in response.
Rarity huffed and looked away. "Well I never!"
“Both Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie are out of the question as well. They already have full houses as it is.” Applejack added soon after.
Pinkie nodded. “It’s true. The Cakes take up the other seventy-five percent of Sugarcube Corner.”
“N-not that I would have minded it….but I do have too many animals at my place.”
“What about Rainbow Dash’s house? He is a pegasus after all. He can walk on clouds.” Twilight asked.
Before Rainbow could even hope to shoot down that suggestion Sora spoke up first. “Sorry Twilight, but if her house is in the clouds, then no can do.” He pulled at one of his wings. “Not really a flying pegasus you see.” Though it did hurt him a bit to say so. Walking on clouds really sounded cool.
Rainbow scoffed and looked away. “W-Well whatever. Not like I was gonna let you anyway.”
Applejack gave Sora a gentle look. “Well since everypony else is out of the question, ah guess that just leaves me. We can put ya up at the farm. Got an extra room in the attic for when our relatives come over. You can use that’un.”
“You sure?” Sora asked in an uncertain tone. “I don’t want to put you out of your way.”
Twilight deadpanned. "It was ok to bother me though?" She mumbled under her breath.
“Course not Sugarcube. Besides, it's not like you’re gonna be living there for free. We at the Apple farm work for our vittles, and since you’re gonna be living there, you’re gonna do the same.”
Sora wasn’t expecting that. Still, pulling his own weight was only fair. He was never really one to just mooch off somebody anyway. “Alright, Applejack. I’ll make sure to work as hard as I can.”
The farm mare smiled. “That’s what I like to hear. Well then come on. We’ll get you settled in all nice and comfy like.” She turned to wave to her friends.” See ya’ll later ya hear?”
With Sora in tow, Applejack made her way from the train station, leaving the rest of the girls to their own devices.
“Well, it’s off to Sugarcube corner for me!” Pinkie exclaimed. “I missed some serious playing time with the twins and promised them a full two hours of patty-cake when I got back.”
“I must be off as well.” Rarity said, though there was still evidence of her being a little ticked off about Sora not being able to stay with her. “I have some ideas I want to try out and they won’t design themselves now will they?”
“Yeah and I’m gonna go and take a nap in a tree somewhere.” Rainbow said with a yawn. “My shift was covered for today so I have the free time.”
“I guess I’ll go too.” Fluttershy took off into the air. “Angel bunny might be getting angry right now about me being gone so long.”
“And I must get back to the library. I have some serious rearranging to do.” Twilight smiled at each of her friends. “We’ll convene at a later time?”
Everypony nodded before splitting up, to their respective places of living.
If they had stayed a little longer however, they would have noticed a dark cloaked pony figure stepping from behind the train, a devious smile the only thing visible under their hood. She had turned to face the direction Sora and gone.
“Sleep tight little Keyblader. Come morning, you and that sorry excuse for a magic user will feel the full weight of what it means to cross my master’s plans…” She chuckled, chilling the air in cold displeasure before disappearing in a mass of darkness.
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Well, considering I just updated, it would be rude of me not to give your crossover a chance. (Though your latest chapter is missing the 'o' in 'into', just so you know. X3)
Well, Applebloom is gonna be happy.
3177275 Heh yeah that was back before i had an editor
3177290 Oh thank God! Sorry,but it was starting to drive me nuts! (I'm stupidly OCD about stuff like that. Part of why I'm a pre-reader as a side gig.) That'll make it easier to keep reading, knowing that the grammar and whatnot will get better. Woohoo!
I mean, the story is interesting enough, so... Yeah.
3177356I have the same problem. That's why I volunteer to edit.
3177356 Heh no its fine...to tell the truth I would love to have you have a proof reader as well. Nightmareknight is good but they might be too busy some times. I mean if you don't mind that is...
3177377 yay
3177377 Oh, I recognize you! Yeah, thanks for that! (Though the first chapters still really need it, if/when you have the time. Defiantly instead of definitely in the first paragraph or two of chapter two? That... My eyes burn a little. Definitely want that taken care of, as it's within the first chapter or two that people decide if they want to read it or not, and for other people like me, but who aren't willing to help edit, it's a huge turn-off. Which is a shame, because the plot seems pretty good so far. (Only the beginning middle of chapter 2) Maybe a minor re-write, or something would help, if not only minor edits.
3177387 I don't think I mind, depending on when I find free time, but yeah, we'd have to start at the beginning. There's... quite a bit of work to do, and the best place to start is at the beginning, especially since that's what catches, or turns off, a reader's attention.
3177411Thanks, I'll look into that. One question though. Where do you recognize me from?
3177389Magical Trevor makes a good point. Do you have a Google doc of the earlier chapters? I'm pretty sure I have another 4~5 hours of free time today, so I could get to them fairly quickly.
3177420 YAY!! I really do think i need to redo the first few chapters either way
3177457 Just in general around the site. No articular story comes to mind, but you're a user who, like myself, gets around often enough to get noticed. At least, noticed by the guy with ADOS. (Attention Deficit OH SHINY! syndrome.)
3177457 i need to get them on there
3177474Hah! ADOS! My friend told me that like a year ago and it's still funny.
MADNESS.
MADNESS AND LUNACY IS ALL INSIDE THE PINK DEMON!
Thank you so much for including a cameo of that joke. I had yet to see it here on fimfiction, but it fit so well and I enjoyed it.
3177478 moar
Another great chapter.
Great chapter dude :).
Gah! Sora! You so awesome! You write him so well, and it makes this story even better! The love he is getting is so great I can't contain my giddiness! Keep up the great work!
I loved this
Am I the only one who didn't get the who-what thing?
3183310 its an old comedy thing
3186074 Ok...but I still don't get it.
3186752 It originated from this comedy skit. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kTcRRaXV-fg
I get the feeling Maleficent is involved
I sense a boss battle
Sweet Shinra
"Sweet Yuna!"
how, in the name of all that is Holy
“Why in Zack’s name were we in bed together?!”
Is any pony else noticing the variety, here?
4129111 Yes there ff refences i know captin obvious but the sweet shinra thing sounds like it would be sweet jesus and given shinras track record....yeah no
I love that comedy bit.
more comforting then anything
Sora took a nice not shower
Are you sure darling? You’re acting a little funny?
cutting off any conversation prier
just by looking at her,that she didn' take mornings very well
"Somehow he known that this is going to be my fault isn’t it?"
nearly losing his own life in the processes
1. Than.
2. Hot. Unless he wasn't taking a shower like you said which in this case, he would be taking an air dry
3. Change it to a comma.
4. Prior.
5. You need a space after the comma, Didn't.
6. Somehow she'll think that this is going to be my fault isn't it.
7. Process.
4411270
Pinkie tilited her head. “Who?”
Sora deadpanned. “Yes. Who?”
“Who is on first silly.”Pinkie Giggled
“Wait," Sora was really confused now "…What?”
“No. What is on second. Who is on first.” Pinkie said matter-o-factly.
Who, What, When, Where, Why, How?
I don't know is on third
Crap!
I'm really on edge with these cliffhangers!
NEXT CHAPTER!
3468859 thats probably who's in the cloak.
Does anypony else really wanna see what would have happened if he had stayed at Rarity's?
4705048
And Idontgivadarn is the short-stop.
You seem to be confusing Xemnas with Xehanort at times.
While the first use of Xemnas is technically true, it was Master Xehanort's actions that caused Sora and Riku's Mastery Exam to go the way it did. Additionally, Xemnas is a Nobody, and so cannot have a Heartless. The Heartless Sora fought in Kingdom Hearts 1 was Xehanort's Heartless. Easy fix, just replace the instances of "Xemnas" I bolded/underlined with "Xehanort".
The hell is Rainbow's problem?
Sora took a nice not shower
ableit less then the pink mare,
stuttered before an ideal clicked.
Somehow he known that this is going to be my fault isn’t it?
1: a not shower could be anything, a bath, a stream of hot air, even a pile of fudge. I think you mean hot.
2: then should be than
3: instead of ideal, it should be idea.
4: Somehow she'll think that this is going to be my fault isn't it? (Thanks referee/the other sans)
6810420 She's a Tsundere so it's natural
Alright, I know enough about Rainbow to say that while she can be fairly suspicious of new people, she's never been outright mean to them either. How she treated Twilight when they first met, and then the whole fustercluck that was how the town was treating Zecora, taught her to be a little more open.
That tells me something is manipulating her emotions. She gonna be the first victim of Darkness in this story?