Good stuff, when I saw the jail I was a bit worried (or is it excited) about what was in store for our hero, but good to know she's out on her own now. I agree with the last line, what is she set to do now? Should be interesting

Oh and saw a typo in this sentence. Save should be safe:

He makes his point clear by using a foreleg to direct your view back at the cell. Well, least you’re somewhat save if you don’t go to that place, not that you have any plans on doing that anyways.

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Rechecking my story like 10 times before posting and still letting that slip by makes me facepalm for myself!
Thanks for pointing it out though, fixed already :)

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Don't worry about it, typos happen (seriously, if I had a dollar for everytime someone found a typo in Five Score...)

I did learn one trick to help proofread better. Read your story in reverse order. Read the last paragraph in your story, then the 2nd to last paragraph, then the 3rd to last, etc. When you read it in the wrong order, the flow of the story gets broken and your brain actually has to read the words, making it easy to find typos. If you just read the story start->finish your brain starts skimming because it knows the story and it will often sail right past obvious mistakes.

Much better comma use this time around. Another minor technical complaint, it's "a lot" and not "allot." Though "allot" is a real word so spellcheck wouldn't catch it, it means something totally different than "a lot." Technical stuff aside, I'm enjoying this. Good job.

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Yeah, thats my biggest 'fear' and issue I'm afraid, I always had issues like this, with were, where, your, you're, things like that basicly, so sometimes I might use the wrong version or meaning. Still, feel free to point them out so I can edit, won't learn otherwise anyways

This story looks interesting. There wasn´t much happening so I can´t say much trough the writing is decent and I couldn´t spot any major mistakes. Looking forward for more. :)

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Easy lie then go to ponyville and figure out where in the plot you are, from their I would convince twilight that me and trixie swapped bodies, but that's only me, .....also granted this is coming from a follower of slaanesh so...

For some reason the room is dark, allot darker as it should be.

*a lot

you indeed have two more legless limbs

Not really legless considering that they are legs.

You try getting up the same way you normally would, which means trying to stand on your legs to get leverage but that’s not working at all, you had some luck, but this is actually painful, as every bone in your new pony body is crying out that it shouldn’t be bending that way.

Major run on sentence there. It wasn't the only one.

The next hour your mind raced a minute with all kinds of possible reasons as to why you’re in jail

Seems like something is missing there.

Aside from some spelling and grammatical issues, it was a good chapter. This could be interesting.

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Hey there, thanks for pointing those out

The legless limbs is mostly something that got lost in translation I guess, but will fix that later on. The actual mistakes I did already

But sadly as I keep mentioning expect more of these issues since I'm not from an english speaking country ...maybe I should find myself a proofreader first

Telling the truth would be useless, I mean have you ever tried going out there and telling people youre a pony in a human body?

Doesnt work out that well, also being human isnt exactly the proudest thing you can tell to a pony kingdom.

"Oh yeah! We humans enslaved every other species on our planet to serve us, including ponies, also we created weapons that are able to destroy all of life on our planet and fought two world wars where we killed millions of each other in the most violent ways imaginable!"

Yeah uhh...he should probably only tell the good bits if somepony asks...

Also I just realized that Lyra would believe him for sure!

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Also I just realized that Lyra would believe him for sure!

That would be the second most reliable pony to tell the truth to. Princess Celestia being the first.

Also, your OC has the muzzle of a mare.

I like it we get to find what going on with Trixie and why was she there and some thing they don't show in the show makes it more real

Oh Trixie..... I guess we will just have to see what she was actually running from.

You feel like crying, not that you ever will. You’re still a guy in there even if you’re now in a female package, and you never cry! Crying is weakness! You’ll be damned before you show weakness!

Fun fact: that was once considered to be manly. Also back then pink was a guy's color, but anyway...

I suppose you could say that she was up to her old.. TRIX again?

Okay, i'm done.

ok a few of my questions got answered in here already. It is really interessting and like the Human/Trixie right now i can´t decide if i like that all the time smiling pony Sunny Law.

PS: Oh i fogot, i like that story

"At last! I've finally managed to learn enough magic to contact you again!"
"Impressive that you've learned magic, rotting away in that dank old cell there."
"What? No they let you out the day after we switched. I've actually been booked for performances so much that it's been too tiring to try to contact you."
"What?! How did they find out we switched?!"
"They... didn't? It looks like it was just the end of your sentence. I've been wandering Equestria, making loads of bits from your show. And the stallions, let me tell you! Your fans are awesome!"
"The... day after we switched..."
"Trixie? Are you alright?"

Realization quickly comes to you that you’re now a girl, mare, whatever, meaning junior is gone too.

NOOOOO not JUNIOR!!!!

I was visualizing the size of Canterlot when the image of the city burning came up... and ponies getting put down by laser fire... which came from an alien spacecraft... darn I have some dark stuff floating around in my head. Like Celestia getting blasted away by a Spartan Laser... gaargh, brain, stop it!

Jerry's up for a interesting time!

Plus, I wonder how Trixie is holding up in his body?
I'd love to see THAT moment.

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"Oh hey btw, you're now Lesbian. Sorry, it sorta happened, and word got out. Unfortunately, I didn't know that there was a paparazzi for the Elements of Harmony. Once again, sorry"

The dialogue’s succinct and crisp diction surprised me.
Ah like clean writin. Nice!

a few more wobbly steppes

"Steppe" means grassy flatland. This is nitpicky, but I'm just making an edit suggestion here.