Hey, not bad! Good characterization of Trixie and the chapter sets up the story quite well.
The flow is a bit jerky at times, but I'm assuming this is your first story, and that's the sort of thing that quickly improves as your write more and get more practice.

I do really like this story premise though, can't wait to see what awaits 'her' on the other side

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Hey there, first of all thanks for the comment, big fan of your work.

And yeah, this is indeed my first fic, the "jerky" flow as you describe it was more or less to get the prologue out of the way, the actual fic will of course be about 'you' playing (or trying at least ) to be Trixie ...that or try to undo this whole mess!

You should get some help with editing for punctuation and grammar. There are plenty of times you use a comma when you should be starting a new sentence, and you use "its" a lot of times you should use "it's". Other than technical gripes like that, I like it so far.

2911777 Royal Duties all over again?

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Heh, I do see some faint similarities. But that's great, I wrote Royal Duties because I love that story premise. Seeing another fic with parts of the same theme is like a dream come true.

You have all my attention)

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I'll blame that to being from europe and from a non english speaking country. Unfortunately I don't have a proofreader or anything of the sorts so there might indeed be some spelling errors and wrong uses of comma's and the likes.

I read allot of fics, but this is my first time actually writing one, so I do apologize for any wrong use of comma's and spelling errors, I'll try to make more work of that in the later chapters

So many fucks but kinda like it must be coming down with a ton of craziness but this could be a lot more better. just keep trying and no doubt it would b the best story just make the next update faster or I will rip you to pieces

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The swearing actually works as a story plot though. 'You're' a human, kind of an ass with a small hatred for everything and everyone, hence the actual swearing. It wil be severly toned down in the next chapter (which is actually done, just proofreading and spell error checking) and will be gone completely later on

Traffic sucks, job sucks, boss sucks, pay sucks, coworkers are decent besides that one asshole, fuck that guy!

Hmn...I'm surprised about that other dream....but isn't that supposed to be somewhat normal?

I would problly love this story if it wasn't in second person. Sigh, but I'll still give it a shot.

Why in these stories is "my" life so crappy? 9/14 fics have to protagonist be a jerk...

I like it so far

3167951 "So ur with ur honey and yur making a sandwich wen the toaster digns. U buter it n the vioce is “wut r u doing wit my dinner?” U tell ur sandwich n it say “my dad is bred”. THEN WHO WAS THE PIECE OF TOAST?"

The smile Trixie shows you is weird, predatory even that you almost want to nope the fuck out of this dream, even when having no clue how to leave a dream, but she quickly comes closer to you.

This won't hurt a bit. But it may hurt a LOT.

I would like it if he could stay in her body, i don´t like the farewells at the end, and i would like it even more since this is supposed to be a romance.

I'll only read on because I want to see how things go in Equetria... I honestly can barely stand these kind of stories where you are the main character when the MC is nothing like you. Not to be rude to the author, of course... it's... an exceptionally ok story... I guess. So far. Um... I'll just go to da next chapter then...

I'm calling this one Jerry.

Because he's a dick, and a Rainbowfag.
He should be honored to trade lives with The Great and Powerful Trixie!

This is going to be fun.

You try to speak, tell Trixie to stop but no sound is coming out, you can’t even shout in pain, almost as if you lost the ability to speak all together, You can’t even use your arms or legs to throw her out, oh god, what is she doing to you.

As a child, I've actually had dreams where I'm unable to speak all the time, even though I had the ability to speak in the waking world. What do you think this meant? And what if another dream like this happens?

Wait, pain? You’re not supposed to feel pain in a dream!

You actually can. Dreams can replicate pain very realistically and accurately. What it cannot do however, is invent pain. If you never got your leg broken, you cannot feel that in your dream, or it will still be painful but oddly off instead.

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Probably a bad case of sleep paralysis. I'd suggest consulting with a parental figure and taking it easy, as those usually are the result of intense stress and feeling of not controlling your life enough. For a more biological cause, it might be from your diet. I've heard people linking intolerance to something with sleep paralysis after consuming said something.

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I remember being bitten by a dog in a dream and it felt like static