(This story takes place before S3 E13).
During a stargaze with Rainbow Dash, there's a shooting star and Scootaloo makes a wish. What she didn't know at the time is that this wish would change her and Rainbow's lives forever.
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... ... ... That's it?
2886246 yeah, i'm still a newbie when it comes to writing, and i'm starting off small. If i keep on writing in the future, i'll probably write more in detail and longer stories.
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You're doing well to start, both of your stories are well written. It's just that in this story the ending came out as *jump off a cliff* ... *black screen* asking for something to happen, but really I don't care.
Well, that as rather odd. I do enjoy the cliffhanger ending though.
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Odd is always good, because that means it's original :D
and also, that feeling on the end was kind of what i was aiming for, but i don't think i quite managed to perfect it.
Thanks for the feedback ^^
2886876 Not a problem.
This was a pretty good story, the quotes still need a little work, but it's an improvement from your other story. Keep up the good work!
I really liked the whole cliffhanger ending.
Also, poor Rainbow Dash
NOOOOOOOOOOOO NO THAT CANT BE IT WHAT ABOUT HER FRIENDS AND SCOOTALOO NOOOOOO
Ok, this was a great starter story and dont get me wrong, but i want to make a honest review about this. I will probably be harsh, but then again its honest
REVIEW: The pacing on this story was much too fast for me, you need to slow down and include more detail. Its the small details that count
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I didnt see any grammer problems but I read through it pretty fast. I think your tenses switched up a bit but i dont remember where. all in all 3/5 mustaches.
There was some good though, i would like too see this rewritten into a bigger like 20000-30000 word story with more focus on detail and pacing.
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Thanks for taking your time to review it, it means alot :3
And i don't think I'll rewrite it right now, maybe when (or if) i become more experienced with writing. But in future fics I'll think of the pacing and add some detail in it ^^
more! i need moar!
3129175 And more will probably come ^^
Although do you mean more on this story or another one? :p
3131509 this one and more story's
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I do have an idea to prolong this story, but i don't think it would make it that much better, if better at all. I also have an idea for a new story which i have to get some more details on before i start writing, but keep an eye out for new stories in maybe a month or two
3137525 ok cant wait
Liked the story but it was a bit fast paced for me. I know you typed this story ages ago but this story is in dire need of editing... I could edit and extend it if you'd like, I mean, if that's okay with you...
I'm that random person that comes out of nowhere 20 weeks after people stopped reading it.
3816272 Hi there, i know it's a bit short, but I don't really like filling out stories with unnecessary words. I suppose that might help the story though, so I will definately try that in my next one (speaking of which, I am getting some ideas so might start writing one soon). Also, i have a friend who's name on here is PTTGRW who is currently editing the story and it will be uploaded on our shared account called Clouded Thoughts (or something, was a while ago i was on it). He has alot of school at the moment so it may not be his first priority. You can PM him about it if you want :). Thanks for offering your help though, it's appreciated ^^