Fastest Flyer In Equestria (21)
Fastest Flyer In Equestria
"Ready for round two?" Rainbow Dash asked as she licked her lips.
"First, we need to take care of that promise I made you. Besides, I'll need a little time to prepare, and by the looks of it, so do you." Nightshade replied as he got dressed. Rainbow blushed, smiling sweetly.
"You big tease."
Nightshade gave the sleeping Fluttershy a gentle pat on the head, whispered 'I love you', and covered her in the bed sheets. He headed outside, followed by Rainbow Dash, who was flicking her tail.
"So, what's this you said about a race?" She asked.
"We need to find out once and for all, who the fastest flyer in Equestria is." He said, the two of them flying up above the Everfree forest.
"And we're going to do that how?" She asked again.
"I'm going to fly in a straight line as fast as I can. After counting to five, you're going to chase me. Soon as you can tag me, we land right there and do it. Doesn't matter if it's in a snow bank, or on someones roof, or in the middle of a photo shoot. By the way, try not to catch me over Canterlot, else you'll probably get ripped apart by mares trying to get at me." Nightshade smiled. It was a wonderfully devious idea. A race, followed by doing it, possibly in public. That kind of thing was right up the rambunctious rainbow mare's alley. She loved it.
"Ready?" He said.
"Set." She replied.
"GO!" He flew straight, due east, about a mile above ground.
"One." Rainbow counted, watching as he flew away.
"Two." She could barely contain her excitement.
"Three." The excitement turned to horror as he started to get smaller.
"Four." It turned to anger. He wasn't going to do it at all. He was going to escape over the horizon. Not if she had anything to do with it.
"FIVE!" She yelled in a voice near the level of Royal Canterlot, taking off after him, screaming in fury as she broke the sound barrier instantly. The rainboom was felt throughout the entire forest, the vibrations of which caused a certain flaming mare and purple dragon untold delight as they shook during the act.
"I'm going to catch you, and when I do, you are going to RUT ME TILL YOU DIE!" She yelled, freaking out.
Nightshade hadn't even broken the sound barrier, but spotting the fuming mare coming after him like a bat out of hell, he too passed the speed of sound. Such a thing was supposed to be difficult, but he and Rainbow pulled it off frequently, a testament to their skills.
"I can't let her catch me yet, we've only just begun. To be fair, I'm not gonna sap her strength." He thought to himself as he accelerated. He looked over his shoulder, only to see the furious magenta eyes. If he didn't know any better, he could have sworn she had fangs given the face of unadulterated rage she was wearing. Desperate to escape, he flew faster still. He was worn out from his 'activities' with Fluttershy, so he used a portion of his immortal life to restore himself. With renewed vigor, he picked up speed.
Looking at the ground passing under him, the winding roads and rivers seemed to be a blur. They were both moving many times the speed of sound now, and all the features of the ground seemed to blur together. He was able to think very quickly, his eyes and brain being enhanced by Nightmare's remnant as well as his body. He was basically getting a full view of the entirety of Equestria in mere moments. Rainbow Dash was getting a full view as well, but only of Nightshade's behind under his flapping cloak.
"Give up! You can't escape me!" She yelled at him. Given the speed they were moving at, there was no way he could hear her. He sped up once again, passing over Canterlot. The many ponies in the city saw the figured fast approaching. Wondering what they were, numerous pegasi flew up to see what the commotion was. They didn't withing 20 feet of them before being knocked back down by the torrents of air. A one pony landed on none other than Derpy Hooves, who asked them if they would eat her muffin.
Rainbow Dash flew faster still, reaching her hoof out to grab his leg, just barely out of her reach. Her frustration, and tension, built as he noticed she was close, pulling away again. It was like he was toying with her.
'Geez, she almost got me there. I gotta keep my head in the game. She really wants it bad. Gotta keep going.' Nightshade thought to himself. He pulled away again, creating more distance between the two as they now flew over the ocean.
"Not good, I can't let her catch me here. We'll drown!" Nightshade used his powers some more, going with the overload method he used before fusing with Nightmare. His speed drastically increased, feeling the adrenaline pumping as he was chased by the rainbow madmare. Suddenly, he felt a dull, burning pain all over his body. He looked, and saw that due to the friction caused by flying at such speeds, small licks of flame were appearing on his body. He dared not go any faster, or he'd risk catching ablaze. Spotting the ocean's far shore, he flew over a mountain range, into an endless field beyond. Flying close to the ground, millions of butterflies took flight at the disturbance, being caught in draft, pulled behind him in a rainbow stream. Miraculously, they weren't ripped apart by the strong winds, rather dancing inside them.
"You. Will. NOT. ESCAPE!" Rainbow screamed. Nightshade suddenly thought.
'I have the sense to slow down before I catch fire. She doesn't. Shit.'
Looking back, he saw the licks of flame appearing on Dash's body. He screamed for her to slow down, but the speed at which they were traveling made it impossible. She screamed as she burst into flame, creating a burning, multicoloured arc across the sky. Suddenly, she stopped moving, and began to fall. Nightshade watched in horror as she fell from the sky, her feathers and coat singed black from the fire.
"RAINBOW!" He screamed, flying towards her. She was still high up. If she hit the ground, that would be the end of her. He flew furiously, tears streaming from his eyes as he scooped her up, not even 10 feet from the ground. He brought her to a nearby river, dunking her in it, trying to cool the overheated mare off. The river was from the mountains, caused by the melting of snow in the heat. It was frigid, but that didn't stop it from turning to steam as her body slid into it. His hands burned from the scalding water, but he didn't have time to worry about that now, he had to cool her off and heal her injuries.
Rainbow was in the darkness of her own mind, barely conscious. She squinted her eyes to find Nightshade, kneeling next to her. He was pouring frigid water on her, but rather than feeling cold, she felt relief. Green mists flowed from his hands, making her feel pleasant. Tears flowed from his eyes as a multitude of butterflies landed on him, covering him with vivid colours.
"Come on Rainbow, wake up! It wasn't supposed to be this way! I'm sorry! I let it get out of hand! It's all my fault that you're like this." He sobbed as he healed her wounds, desperate to lower her temperature. The relief of the cool water and him taking away her pain was so soothing, she finally felt able to move. Dash lifter her hoof, jabbed him in the arm and smiled weakly.
"Caught you."
At her sudden movement, he scooped her up in his arms, holding her close, tending her injuries even as he hugged her.
"Don't scare me like that. I thought you were gonna die!" He scolded her. "I don't know what I would do without you."
"You'd be fine, you'd still have Fluttershy after all." She said weakly, tears in her eyes. After all, he really did belong to her yellow friend, she was just borrowing him, she was just an afterthought. He was doing this for her, as a favour to the one he really loved.
"I'd be lost if I lost either of you. Fluttershy is kind, sweet, gentle, and caring, but you challenge me. You're hot headed, competitive, and make me strive to be my best. When I won the running of the leaves, all those years back, It was the proudest moment of my life. I had never competed in anything before. YOU made me give it my all. Don't you get it? I LOVE you." He held her tight against him. That was the first time anyone had ever told her that, ever since her parents passed, and it left her stunned. After several minutes, she finally was able to think again.
"You're just saying that." She said, looking down.
"While it's true that I don't love you the same way I love Fluttershy, it doesn't change the fact that you are important to me. She was kind, and she cared for me when I hurt, tending my wounds and my heart. You were brave. You stood up for me and defended me when I was weak. When you first hit me in the head with your hoof, if you had knocked me out, you would have felt guilty about it, then come and spent time with me in that jail cell. I would have ended up making that connection with you first, and I'd probably be having a wedding with you instead." He explained.
"But I didn't. What if's don't matter. You were all alone, and I left you alone. She went to make sure you were okay, while I went and had breakfast with the rest of them. You needed me, and I wasn't there for you." She cried.
"I seem to remember hearing that a certain pegasus told Gilda to 'Shut up before I come back there and break your jaw' because she was taunting me. You stood up for me, something nobody else did." He argued.
"After the running of the leaves, I was still struggling with my emotions with Fluttershy. I didn't know whether or not she liked me, whether or not I really liked her. When I beat you, you fell for me. When I saw you holding up your end of the bargain, helping me day after day, night after night, building my house with me, I saw something in you. I know that even if I lost, you still would have helped me." Nightshade continued.
"During that time, I was torn between the two of you. Fluttershy had helped me so much, and I knew I liked her, but you tried to make things better between yourself and Scootaloo. You were practically her mother. More than like, I respected and admired you. I had a very hard time deciding who I wanted to be with, and just when I thought I couldn't make the decision, fate came and made it for me, picking Fluttershy. Where I'm from, having more than one spouse is wrong. It's against everything I know, yet when you told me your feelings, saying you wanted to be with me. It was the second happiest moment of my life. The happiest was when Fluttershy agreed to it openly. Didn't you see how easily I was persuaded? I went against everything I know by having the two of you, due to mere puppy dog eyes? Everything in my head screams that I shouldn't do it, yet, everything in my heart tells me I should. I followed my heart, and I'm happy, because I love you both."
Rainbow sat there for a moment. For the longest time, they had been so stubborn and out of tune with themselves, that they had never admitted to each other, nor themselves, how they really felt.
"Your prized possession, the wonderbolt's pin. When I was trapped in stone, you put the one thing that meant most in the world to you, your dream, that you had finally achieved, and put it at my feet. We tease each other, challenge each other, strive to make each other do their best. Even now, you flew so fast that you caught ablaze, casting a flaming rainbow across the sky, you can't tell me that it was just your heat, and that it wasn't largely due to me beating you and you wanting to improve?"
"You're right. I wanted to beat you so bad, I trained every day. I don't even take naps anymore. I joined the wonderbolt's because of you. I adopted Scootaloo because of you, having her live in my home, and I was never happier. I finally started living for somepony else. If not for you, I never would have known that joy." She nuzzled close to him, and he wrapped his wing around the cyan pegasus, much the way he would with the yellow one.
"While my love for Fluttershy is full of tenderness and care, my love for you is full of passion. It's just, you never told me how you felt, and so I swallowed those feeling, hiding them away, thinking you'd never return them. You were so, brash, egotistical. Then, when I saw you with Scoots, I couldn't help but think you'd make a great mother, and secretly wished to be with you, even though I was with Fluttershy. I couldn't do it, I couldn't betray her. That was why I was so hell bent on escaping you last mating season I was around, and why I got mad when you said you wanted me. I was with Fluttershy, preparing to get married, and then the other mare of my dreams comes waltzing in, telling me to be with her? It was like a nightmare, until you pointed out that it could work. Then I dragged you to her, kicking and screaming, so you could try and make it work. I'm just glad she knew about you for so long, probably even long than YOU knew about you. I love the both of you so much, although in slightly different ways. There is nothing I wouldn't do for either of you." Nightshade said, tears in his eyes now.
"Then why did you try to get away so badly just now?" Dash asked.
"Because, if you caught me, and I hadn't tried my best, you would never forgive me. Which, by the way, you flew fast enough to catch on fire, I did not. That means you are still the fastest flyer in Equestria, and have won the race. While Fluttershy may be the cutest pony around, you're the hottest, in both meanings of the word." He looked into her eyes, much the same way he looked into Fluttershy's. They were different, but the feelings they gave were the same. She wrapped her hooves around him, placing her chin on his shoulder.
"I never knew how you felt." She said calmly.
"That's because, when it comes to emotions, I'm as bad as you are."
Dash had finally cooled down, and her injuries were healed. She leaned in, giving Nightshade a peck on the cheek, as he wrapped his arm around her.
"Well, here's where you caught me, right in the middle of this field filled with millions upon millions of butterflies and flowers. The sun was setting when we left, but look, it's rising over the horizon right now. We just flew halfway around the planet in about an hour. Perfect setting for some romance, don't you think?" He asked.
"You know, Fluttershy would love this." She said, looking into his eyes as the sun rose.
"Yeah, but she'd never be able to make it here on her own. Maybe one day the three of us can come here for a picnic or something, but until then, this is a place all our own. I didn't see settlements of any kind as we flew over." He replied.
"Equestria, as well as the griffin kingdom, are the only civilized places on this world. Celestia's sun and Luna's moon travel all the way around, and they can see everything the light from them touches. This land is unexplored. We're the first ones to ever set hoof, err, foot here." Rainbow said with a smile. She wasn't looking lusty, just content.
"An unexplored land, an open field, filled with butterflies and the sun beaming down on us. Ready for your trophy, champ?" Nightshade asked. Just as she was about to ask what he meant by that, he leaned on her, knocking her over. She lay on her back on the ground, grinning as she suddenly got his meaning, and as he undid his belt buckle.
I had broken the plot, making Nightshade be with Dash was completley out of character, because I didn't explain it at all. Serious error on my part. I hope I'm not slipping. It was an amateur mistake. The fact that I AM one doesn't help at all, because my readers have come to expect better than that. So, I went from being wordsmith to word mechanic on this chapter, I took it down and fixed it. I hope this all makes things better. I like it better. It's not as awkward, doesn't feel forced this time around, and it keeps everyone in character. The things I do for a story.
I removed the clop fic.
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I WEILD THE MIGHTY FIRST!
Edit: FUCK!!!!!
Never mind....
............ Ok il be honset. This isnt what i signed up for. Im all for charecter development and all, but the whole romance thing is becoming a little forced. The whole "I LOVE YOU" thing was out of nowhere.
sorry but this is well just to far off plot and general story your my plot relief when I actually need a plot not just slice of life stuff
296927>>296986 yeah, I have to admit, the romance does feel a little awkward. I am getting back to the plot though. The fact that he's with Fluttershy AND Rainbow will actually be one of the main points in the end when he's dealing with Discord. Try and guess what I'm thinking. Remember, I DO like to make you all cry.
297012 ..... Magic plot point guessing powers go!!! ...... Hmm..... well Nightshade already died so you cant do that twice... Im guessing hes going to have to choose which on to save.
296927
I know what you mean. Nightshade was, and should still be, completely devoted to Fluttershy. Him saying that he loves Dash completely demolishes the loyal, devoted Shade we all love. Him getting into it with Dash was Fluttersy's will, at least how I saw it. Not that I thought he minded Dash. Basically, what Nightshade just did seemed completely out of character and against his loyalty towards Fluttershy.
297023 Yeah, I know. I kinda broke the plot on that one. Grr, damnit. It's not easy okay? Writing is HARD. This was probably the first time I actually broke the plot. Damnit, now I gotta think of a way to fix it. Hold on, I'm thinking. I'm working on it. Hmm, okay. People, RE READ THE CHAPTER. I'm going to take it down, and make some alterations to it.
There, I slapped myself upside the head for not catching such an obvious error, and did my best to fix it.
297204 I put the ascended clop URL in the story description.
Dawwwwwwwwwwwww
297225 or we could click on your name and look through your stories
297182
Don't worry, everybrony derps once and a while
Your readers will always be there to keep you in line... Never forget that!
We love you, BlackWing. We love your writing, your characters, your interactions with us.
But I love you MOAR. I need you!
BlackWing, will you marry me?
Ummm... That is, if... ummm your not... ummm... occupied right now... If that's okay with you...
297238 Marry you? Well, we just met. I hardly know you, it's all so sudden.....
WOAH, WOAH.
Did you say that the Fluttershy/Dash/Nightshade romance is gonna be a plot point for Discord?
YOU HEARTLESS BASTARD.
297268 Don't worry, I makes you all cry, but then has happy ending! I'm NOT pulling another Scootaloo. Oh god, Scootaloo
297253
I KNOW IT'S SOON!!! But I love you... I need you... Do you understand? Ever since you posted your first chapter of "Monster" I've had these... feelings about you. Don't you see? WE ARE MEANT TO BE TOGETHER!!!
I know things are moving fast... but, when you made "Acended Clop", weren't you thinking about me?
DO YOU FEEL THE SAME WAY I DO?!??!
297275 I'm sorry, twas not meant to be. I am but a figure behind a screen, placing words on a website from small town Canada. I fear we will never meet beyond the electric coil that is the internet.
297277
Canada!!
Canada? forget it. Bucking Canadians...
I
Seriously. Mississippi sucks. I'm the only brony in 625 miles...
297291 Yeah, I know that feeling. Every time I meet somebody new, I always drop a little hint. "You wanna go to that bar? Nah, this one is 20% cooler." "That makes me so full of yay." If they are a brony, they'll find a way to let me know, and if they're not, they'll just be confused. so far, no hits.
297300
(fails to come up with witty response)
I gotcha. It's us v.s the world. I just wish I was smart enough to find a way to locate other bronies without shouting "Does anybody watch My Little Pony?!?!" vainly .
*brohoof*
'eat my muffin' oh dear
297277 297275
Murphy's Law demands this marriage undergoes fruition.
297436
Na now you mention it I rarely see any Derpy pairings......THIS FANBASE IS CRUEL.
oh.........Oh..........OH..........OH...oh........DEAR GOD WTF ARE YOU THINKING OMFG...
I don't get it. I DON'T like this story, in fact I detest it, it has a Garry Stew, Clop, Dead Scootaloo. I could go on pointing out plot and story flaws that I dislike but the would be pointless. Why am I still reading? with every chapter I flinch half way through and try to pull away, infact about two weeks ago I managed to stop reading but couldn't bring my self to untrack and the emails pulled me back in a few days ago.
I had a lot of the same problems with "Monster" but not nearly as bad and I finished that one and only really wanted to stop just before the end. and then "Monster" ended really really well and I wanted to read the sequel.
ok what am I trying to say? I hope your still reading because this is the important part.
This story is horrible, the plot development is Jarring at best and is full of bad writing decisions, I with I could say that it is partially saved because the writing itself is wonderfully worded and all that but that's only partially true, your skill is above average that is to be sure but it's not enough to save this, or at least it shouldn't be. The real reason I'm still reading is because you've hooked me. I'm not sure how, I'm not sure when but there is something about your writing, the personality behind it that shines through that forces me to continue in an effort to see the end. and the strange thing is that despite all my complaints you've kept me hooked. I read stories much much better than this but lost interest becasue the writer didn;t keep the hook set you have me hooked multiple times and the hooks are set deep.
you have great potential as a writer and your currently pounding out words faster than I can blink, you seem to have a running inspiration that allows words to flow with a coherency and fluidity that rivals great authors. and I'll finish this story through because I have too.
please don't take what I've said here too personalty, I'm one man with one opinion and I hate your story not your skill. just please, the next project you work on, thoroughly plan the major plot points before you write the chapters preceding, right now major plot points seem to come out of nowhere, there should always be build up and perhaps a hint of four shadowing to major events. Also, take your time with your words, your pumping them out at an astonishing rate and the result is 50% is beautiful craftsmanship and 50% is drivel. This last chapter? the one you rewrote? has the most consistant and was the best written of all I've seen so far.
I honestly think your a great writer but your trying to make art out of spoiled fruit here with this story. when your done I hope you can find a more plot to develop.
The beginning and ending of monster was good, and I mean really good, so I know you can write. but the rest of your work has been on a wildly swinging scale from awful to mediocre with a few spurts of good.
Teh next time your write a story I have two suggestions for you, 1) avoid another Garry Stew like the plague, and 2) cut the extraneous side plots, ask your self one question when considering adding something to a story. does this knowledge or series of events directly aid in the build up to or explanation of the MAIN conflict of the story? No? kick it.
again, please take this as constructively as possible. I'm ONE man, and while your current work makes me want to print it out and burn it. there is great potential in it.
I'll shut up now.
EDIT:
LOL this started off as a rant where I didn't know why I kept reading this, turned into understanding mid rant. and then I proceeded to attempt to help you. funny how that works
297272 SCOOTALLO
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297634 did you read the one before it?
And me frankly I don' mind the love sharing with dash and fluttershy. Love is free and comes in many forms and need not be limited. besides who says Shadey can't be going slightly native. He lives in a place where culturally and socialy its okay to have more then one wife, odds are his mind is just adapting to that change or something. Either way I find the shared love to be an exciting twist and will no doubt bring some very heart twisting manly tear or openly crying chapters later. Oh blackwing you are so very cruel. But thats okay cause we love ya'
Besides I don't see anything wrong with Shade loving Dash as he does Fluttershy. If Fluttershy is okay with it then its all good in fact if Shade did not return Dash's emotions as he did with Fluttershy I suspect that our ever so loved Fluttershy would be very pissed at Shade. The only thing I will say is that If he is gonna be with both he better be able to support them both financially along with any foals they have. *though I highly doubt money will be a problem with Shade* He has plenty of ways to get money, i mean arnt knights entitled to land or fiefs or whatever you want to call them? or am I getting that wrong and getting it confused with something else. anyway even if he dont got any land to get in profits from he still has earth ideas*such as the maple candy stuff and we all know how popular that is. Just ask Pinkie Pie...when she is done raping Braeburn. Poor sod he'll be crippled from the waist down* Anyway so long as he can support them all and returns their love to them I dont see any problem with him loving both. Now if he starts getting mares left and right that might be a problem for me.
Anyway thats my little rant done and again I will say
SCOOTALOO WHY 
dindt...see...this...coming
but still. love your story. i cant w8 to see what happens next...
scootaloo murder!
297634 Ehh, well, it is only my first works. While your input is appreciated, I'm gonna keep the story going this way. Yeah, okay, so he is a bit of a flawless character, but I wanted him to be like that. For something different, I suggest Griffin the griffin, which is off hiatus. It sounds more suitable to your tastes.
298482 I wouldnt call shade flawless. I think he has his flaws like anyone else. He isnt good expressing his emotions at times :P and he sure seems to attract the attention of sex crazy mares when mating season pops in :P Plus at times his ideas usually tend to rebound back at him in humorous ways*like his maple idea...that was hilarious*
298547 The point is, while he isn't really a realistic character in terms of the way he reacts to many things, he's more of a dream character, someone from my mind, someone who I want to be. I'm been a doormat my whole life, and Nightshade is the aspect of my personality that is strong, while still not losing my kindness. It's who I want to be like. That's kind of what this story is about. I guess it's why I care so much about my stories, because they are a way of me living out a different life. That's what stories are. He's kind of the brave knight character.
298610 I can relate to you there. Alot of my characters act in ways I wish I could act. Strangly enough I can write a character that is smooth and good with the ladies, and yet I can't figure out what to say next when im trying to flirt with a girl. Then there are characters that are really violent and show my desire to actually let lose all the pent up rage and anger I feel about the world. And then there are the others that are just as crazy as I am
He a good character, you can connect to him which is why I like the story.
Have mercy! I cannot stand the sadness coming (reading Blackwing's comments)
I mean its very good, but sadness can really get me into this story.
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Knights usually aren't landed, and when they are, it tends to be more a villein or seneshal watching over someone else's land than actually being theirs. Traditional knights do get a stipend from the crown, though.
298668 Take it like a brony and give manly tears. or do this should you have to :
298682 Well there you go :) Shade has plenty of ways to support his wives*shy and dash even if dash is not really his wife*in fact he could probably add teh princesses to the list. Now that I would love to see hehe that would sure make mating season VERY interesting dont you agree :P
actually if you think about it is either going to be this...
discord is going to kill one of them and he has to pick...
he has to give up his powers or discord will make all of equestria suffer...
or he gets caught during mating season and gets raped by celestia,dash,fluttershy,twilight,AJ,Luna,lira,derpy,pinkie,rareity, and well you get the point...
DEATH BY SNOO SNOO!!!
hey at least make a what-if he got caught during mateing season or something like that what-if chapter.
298927 Hey id gladly die that way. Its one hell of a way to go :P
Blackwing do a what if fic and write what blahblahblah said. that would be HILARIOUS
Blackwings from canada too?
298717
As a brony, I shall *salutes*
297935 Why did she die, you ask? Rule of... Drama, I believe.
Holy crap, am I the only one that picked up the Firefly reference?
Also, I second everyone's feelings. The whole thing with loving them both seemed out of nowhere. I actually thought back on the story to find something that would've indicated that whole thing, in vain. So yeah, that was... odd. Honestly, I think you should take a break from writing so much. I've noticed that when I go into RP threads on forums that, after a while, my creative juices become exhausted. I hate to suggest delaying the story, but I seriously think that it may help in the long run.
I believe this song fits Nightshade rather well.
20 Percent Cooler (Alex S. Remix) - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NWd5x09gWoE&feature=related
so i take it you don't like clop fics? they that's cool we all have our opinions. would have been good to read though
Does that mean that Celestia can see them doing it?
nu